The Old Red Rooster Crowed
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Comment from ruzu27
I liked reading your poem, in fact quite a creepy story. Although I am lucky not to have nightmares, I feel great empathy for those who do.
As a child there were places I hated so much to go on my own. For this reason I only dared getting something from the cellar singing.
Like your heroine I sang in a loud voice, my heart pounding, and was always very much relieved when I was among people again.
Well, you see, I survived. Good job, thank you for sharing.
:) Ruth
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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I liked reading your poem, in fact quite a creepy story. Although I am lucky not to have nightmares, I feel great empathy for those who do.
As a child there were places I hated so much to go on my own. For this reason I only dared getting something from the cellar singing.
Like your heroine I sang in a loud voice, my heart pounding, and was always very much relieved when I was among people again.
Well, you see, I survived. Good job, thank you for sharing.
:) Ruth
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks so very much Ruth for telling me that. Sigh.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Such a spooky read and yet chillingly powerful too.
Sure glad I read this in the morning and not at night time.
Well done my friend, you made me shiver.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Such a spooky read and yet chillingly powerful too.
Sure glad I read this in the morning and not at night time.
Well done my friend, you made me shiver.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks Maureen for it's a powerful write this time. LOL.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Hi Pam. To say it was a sleep disorder would probably be an understatement. LOL Did she say her prayers ? Maybe all the smoke from the candles are causing her to hallucinate? Seriously it is an interesting write. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Hi Pam. To say it was a sleep disorder would probably be an understatement. LOL Did she say her prayers ? Maybe all the smoke from the candles are causing her to hallucinate? Seriously it is an interesting write. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Your guess is as good as mine Honey. LOL thanks for a great review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
She wondered if they'd e'er leave,
or, forever plague her sleep?
Tonight she'd sing her song 'gain
and sleep right here by the fire.
dark, but perfectly written and an enjoyable read, Pam.
you're such a natural.
Margaret
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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She wondered if they'd e'er leave,
or, forever plague her sleep?
Tonight she'd sing her song 'gain
and sleep right here by the fire.
dark, but perfectly written and an enjoyable read, Pam.
you're such a natural.
Margaret
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks Margaret. Coming from you that is a great compliment.
Comment from Adri7enne
Sad air of fear and despair. I can see where people can get caught up in their stories and not be able to get away from their nightmares. Well captured, gun. The nights must be so long when they're plagued by old nightmares.
Good job.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Sad air of fear and despair. I can see where people can get caught up in their stories and not be able to get away from their nightmares. Well captured, gun. The nights must be so long when they're plagued by old nightmares.
Good job.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Really Adri, so glad I'm not plagued by them but this poor girl is a sufferer. Sigh.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Wow oh Wow, this poem/story is filled with powerful descriptions. Different than you usually write, but still extremely good. I won't sleep alone ever again. LOL
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Wow oh Wow, this poem/story is filled with powerful descriptions. Different than you usually write, but still extremely good. I won't sleep alone ever again. LOL
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Hhahah Barbara, don't worry about it, it's only make believe. Great review girl.
Comment from juliedickson55
And who can blame you for not wanting to sleep alone?
The scary dreams of night and nightmares abound, the darkness and shadows of terrors...
I love this:
"she held her breath deep and sighed;
then cried with relief at dawn"
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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And who can blame you for not wanting to sleep alone?
The scary dreams of night and nightmares abound, the darkness and shadows of terrors...
I love this:
"she held her breath deep and sighed;
then cried with relief at dawn"
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much Julie for a wonderful review of this.
Comment from marycec
A truly creepy and disturbing poem about demons and disturbed nights.Some very powerful imagery.The wallpaper image' brown with age and family dirt' has that double entendre that leaves us wondering about the family's history.Great use of alliteration and assonance in'danced dark shadows on the wall'.The old red rooster has its own associations with darkness and betrayal.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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A truly creepy and disturbing poem about demons and disturbed nights.Some very powerful imagery.The wallpaper image' brown with age and family dirt' has that double entendre that leaves us wondering about the family's history.Great use of alliteration and assonance in'danced dark shadows on the wall'.The old red rooster has its own associations with darkness and betrayal.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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What a great review Mary!! This is one that is total fiction but carries a lot of weight with it, eh?
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Yes.Touched on archetypes I think.
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Smile.
Comment from Jean Lutz
This is a powerful description of one who is undergoing spiritual warfare and in the darkness the demons attack. This stuff is real. I loved your images. I especially liked the wallpaper. It was during the post-depression years that I grew up and papered walls were all we could afford.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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This is a powerful description of one who is undergoing spiritual warfare and in the darkness the demons attack. This stuff is real. I loved your images. I especially liked the wallpaper. It was during the post-depression years that I grew up and papered walls were all we could afford.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks Jean for a great review of this one. The imagery just popped into my head from somewhere.
Comment from J. Dark
What a beautifully dark and interesting piece you present us with here. You cleverly impart an atmosphere with the clever wallpaper descriptions and your wording is exceptional. Makes for such interesting reading, Gungalo. Great work.
Kindest of regards
Mrs D :-)
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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What a beautifully dark and interesting piece you present us with here. You cleverly impart an atmosphere with the clever wallpaper descriptions and your wording is exceptional. Makes for such interesting reading, Gungalo. Great work.
Kindest of regards
Mrs D :-)
Comment Written 11-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much you for liking this one. What an awesome review you gave it.