The Animal Doctor
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Comment from alexgeorge
What a tale of intrigue and unreturned love. Eva seems like a good girl, clever too, but Nathan will never get over Margaret. And if he does by some miracle marry Eva, it will only end in heartache as he and Margaret will rekindle the forbidden flames.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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What a tale of intrigue and unreturned love. Eva seems like a good girl, clever too, but Nathan will never get over Margaret. And if he does by some miracle marry Eva, it will only end in heartache as he and Margaret will rekindle the forbidden flames.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much for your review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, amahra, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where nathan moves on with his life but still keeps the memories of margaret alive in his heart and he won't be truly happy without her.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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this is very well written, amahra, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where nathan moves on with his life but still keeps the memories of margaret alive in his heart and he won't be truly happy without her.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Mark Alan Trimeloni
...with the whiteness of her teeth flashing as she laughed.
Oh, I enjoy a good Colgate smile.
He exhaled hard...then lit a cigarette.
Out with the good air. In with the bad.
"You looked at me as if you'd seen a ghost."
This ones quick. Nate you'd better dump her. She's going to know all your secrets soon.
"Will you stop!" he snapped. "I'm fine I told you!"
Not in the mood for 20 questions, Nate?
"Nathan...may I say one thing?"
"Of course."
Don't! For the love of God Nate don't let her!
"Eva, you sleep naked and never put a stitch on until after breakfast. And you don't think I'll know you're there?"
Finally, someone else willing to use a semi-nude character in their story.
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Nice use of a page break. You don't see that much anymore.
The old fart had no more juice left."
Moments like these make the story come alive.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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...with the whiteness of her teeth flashing as she laughed.
Oh, I enjoy a good Colgate smile.
He exhaled hard...then lit a cigarette.
Out with the good air. In with the bad.
"You looked at me as if you'd seen a ghost."
This ones quick. Nate you'd better dump her. She's going to know all your secrets soon.
"Will you stop!" he snapped. "I'm fine I told you!"
Not in the mood for 20 questions, Nate?
"Nathan...may I say one thing?"
"Of course."
Don't! For the love of God Nate don't let her!
"Eva, you sleep naked and never put a stitch on until after breakfast. And you don't think I'll know you're there?"
Finally, someone else willing to use a semi-nude character in their story.
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Nice use of a page break. You don't see that much anymore.
The old fart had no more juice left."
Moments like these make the story come alive.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you Mark. LOL
Comment from Darkhorse555
from 1910 reading down this really beautiful piece of writing it was quiet romantic I enjoyed reading your lovely piece nicely penned
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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from 1910 reading down this really beautiful piece of writing it was quiet romantic I enjoyed reading your lovely piece nicely penned
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you for reading my friend.
Comment from robina1978
Nathan's heart got broken by Margaret who just left. Then he dives into his work and is allowed to do more and more, improving so much and Koren getting worse with arthritis. He is now the most wanted bachelor. Even when he is with the woman that loves him, she is still on his mind.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Nathan's heart got broken by Margaret who just left. Then he dives into his work and is allowed to do more and more, improving so much and Koren getting worse with arthritis. He is now the most wanted bachelor. Even when he is with the woman that loves him, she is still on his mind.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you robina for stopping by and reading.
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most welcome, Ine
Comment from Curly Girly
That was quite long, I'm glad it's not a full chapter. I enjoyed what I read and I'm looking forward to reading more of this delightful story. No errors spotted. Very sad to mistake an early menopause for a pregancy - very disappointing.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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That was quite long, I'm glad it's not a full chapter. I enjoyed what I read and I'm looking forward to reading more of this delightful story. No errors spotted. Very sad to mistake an early menopause for a pregancy - very disappointing.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from emjaihammond
He seems to be quite the catch! But then, he is a handsome doctor. Everyone in town seems to know the truth about his true feelings. You have created a good addition to an already fascinating story. Your characters continue to grow and introduce more of themselves as time goes by.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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He seems to be quite the catch! But then, he is a handsome doctor. Everyone in town seems to know the truth about his true feelings. You have created a good addition to an already fascinating story. Your characters continue to grow and introduce more of themselves as time goes by.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much. I can't keep him wasting away over Margaret.
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
Oh I can see trouble on the horizon for both Nate and Margaret. Exa seems to have a few screws loose and will do anything to have nate in her life for ever. Good chapter that flowed nicely and the time jumps were appropriate for the interest of the story. Bravo!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Oh I can see trouble on the horizon for both Nate and Margaret. Exa seems to have a few screws loose and will do anything to have nate in her life for ever. Good chapter that flowed nicely and the time jumps were appropriate for the interest of the story. Bravo!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Thank you so very much Jacobs.
Comment from JM daSilva
Nathan is not a luck guy. He only meets manipulative women. This one loves him, but is beating a dead horse. Poor girl should look for someone else, but some people don't know when to stop. Great story. I had no trouble following it.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Nathan is not a luck guy. He only meets manipulative women. This one loves him, but is beating a dead horse. Poor girl should look for someone else, but some people don't know when to stop. Great story. I had no trouble following it.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Life is complex and so are people. I don't want my characters good or bad. Just good people sometimes making stupid decisions. Thank you for reading.
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Me too. My people are always faulty. Welcome.
Comment from Sam Mendonca
Poor Nathan, he seems to be trying to make a career for himself without the love of his life.
I'm curious to see when SHE returns. :-)
A little upset with Eva and her not telling Nathan the truth. :-(
Very nicely written.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Poor Nathan, he seems to be trying to make a career for himself without the love of his life.
I'm curious to see when SHE returns. :-)
A little upset with Eva and her not telling Nathan the truth. :-(
Very nicely written.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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Not really trying to make her bad. Just love can make you make bad decisions. Thank you for reading.