Voyage to confusion
Elizabeth loses control22 total reviews
Comment from Zue65
This is really naughty, a woman acting like an animal to be devoured by a man after devouring Fiona just minutes ago. It was like dogs in the streets, there was no exclusivity of partners and they do it even in streets, only in this case it is the veranda. It is purely giving in to the carnal desires without love at all. I am not here to be preachy it is my personal opinion and perception being brought up in a very conservative family where sex is sacred and done only between husband and wife in the privacy of the closed room. But you are a good story teller and have a natural flair with words. God bless.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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This is really naughty, a woman acting like an animal to be devoured by a man after devouring Fiona just minutes ago. It was like dogs in the streets, there was no exclusivity of partners and they do it even in streets, only in this case it is the veranda. It is purely giving in to the carnal desires without love at all. I am not here to be preachy it is my personal opinion and perception being brought up in a very conservative family where sex is sacred and done only between husband and wife in the privacy of the closed room. But you are a good story teller and have a natural flair with words. God bless.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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God bless you too and thank you for taking the time to read it. I know its a bit lengthy.
Comment from david bell
I have mixed feelings on this. First of all you need some type of tension at the start to make people read it. To me, most of it is stiff. It could be better.
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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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I have mixed feelings on this. First of all you need some type of tension at the start to make people read it. To me, most of it is stiff. It could be better.
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Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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This is actually the second chapter i took from my book the tension is in the first chapter but I like this part of the story best. Thanks for the stars and the honest review.