Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "The Boobook Owl"Poems written using the pantoum form
118 total reviews
Comment from barleygirl
Pretty much hate poetic formats with many repetitive lines. It's like a lot of reading with no extra meaning, plus it's very distracting to the flow & meaning. With that said, your poem is very well done, in spite of this worthless & annoying format choice. Your imagery is very vivid & enjoyable. I love the way it tells a little story about this creature, bringing her very much alive & almost palpable. I also love the choice of this creature, being unique & interesting, as the topic of you poem. Great job.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Pretty much hate poetic formats with many repetitive lines. It's like a lot of reading with no extra meaning, plus it's very distracting to the flow & meaning. With that said, your poem is very well done, in spite of this worthless & annoying format choice. Your imagery is very vivid & enjoyable. I love the way it tells a little story about this creature, bringing her very much alive & almost palpable. I also love the choice of this creature, being unique & interesting, as the topic of you poem. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Sorry about the form, Barleygirl! I just had to try it! Glad that something of the storyline got past the boring repetition!
Comment from mermaids
I am always thrilled to read poems about nature, especially an owl I am not familiar with. This is a challenging poetic form and you did well describing this owl and her stalking prey. You have a smooth flow of lines that reminds the reader of the owl's flight.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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I am always thrilled to read poems about nature, especially an owl I am not familiar with. This is a challenging poetic form and you did well describing this owl and her stalking prey. You have a smooth flow of lines that reminds the reader of the owl's flight.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, Mermaids. Appreciated! I'm so glad that you enjoyed the poem. Owls, as you suggest, are most wonderful birds!
Comment from amada
..."will make her fateful movement soon,
reflected by the hunter's moon..." You write oh so beautifully> I like the entire poem, but those lines are my favorites.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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..."will make her fateful movement soon,
reflected by the hunter's moon..." You write oh so beautifully> I like the entire poem, but those lines are my favorites.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your lovely review and kind words, Amada. Very much appreciated!
Comment from Bill Schott
This pantoum is so well done that one expects that the form was created for the Boobook owl. "her shadowed silver silhouette ... suggested in the ghost gum tree" --Super!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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This pantoum is so well done that one expects that the form was created for the Boobook owl. "her shadowed silver silhouette ... suggested in the ghost gum tree" --Super!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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What a very complimentary review! Lovely to wake up to on this fine Saturday morning! Thanks, Bill!
Comment from Terry wrote
Well written! I enjoyed the slow rhythm of this poetry poem, and love the photo of the owl you chose to accompany it. I did catch the shift in meaning as the poem progressed.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Well written! I enjoyed the slow rhythm of this poetry poem, and love the photo of the owl you chose to accompany it. I did catch the shift in meaning as the poem progressed.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, Terry. Appreciated!
Comment from JW
Your well written poem is both descriptive and informative, as well as what you shared within your author's notes.
Now I can say I truly have learned something new today.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Your well written poem is both descriptive and informative, as well as what you shared within your author's notes.
Now I can say I truly have learned something new today.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, Johnathon. Appreciated!
Comment from blaise007
She waits for swaying sedge
reflected by the hunter's moon.
Her prey, alert at water's edge,
will make her fateful movement soon,
-that part of the poem impressed me.
One knows not what lurks in the dark. Beautiful piece, it shows how much you've observed the owl, it's movement, everything about it. You could have done more extended metaphor since you're talking about an animal you've seen.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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She waits for swaying sedge
reflected by the hunter's moon.
Her prey, alert at water's edge,
will make her fateful movement soon,
-that part of the poem impressed me.
One knows not what lurks in the dark. Beautiful piece, it shows how much you've observed the owl, it's movement, everything about it. You could have done more extended metaphor since you're talking about an animal you've seen.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, Blaise. Appreciated!
Comment from Dustybones
Do they hoot hoot hoot like the one outside my New Jersey house? I always like the way they stalk and hunt. I worry about my rat terrier at times.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Do they hoot hoot hoot like the one outside my New Jersey house? I always like the way they stalk and hunt. I worry about my rat terrier at times.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the review Dustybones. No, they have a mournful two-pitched call. Hence the various names, all onomatopoeic: boobook, bubuk, mopoke, mawpawk. It is a quite distinctive cry and rather eerie.
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WOW! I never knew that!
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WOW! I never knew that!
Comment from Tina McKala
WOW! I didn't even want to read it when I saw it was pantoum (but I'm in the need of MDs - honest as I am). NOW I'm so happy I read!!! This was amazing, you managed to say a STORY as a PANTOUM! That's brilliant!!! I was taken aback when I saw your ended sentences in the middle of lines and still making a perfect sense (stays poised. She waits for swaying sedge,). If something from what I read this week deserves 6 stars, you're definitely among the top two, but I lost the 6s foolishly this time, so I couldn't award the other one, and now I can't award you either. :/
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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WOW! I didn't even want to read it when I saw it was pantoum (but I'm in the need of MDs - honest as I am). NOW I'm so happy I read!!! This was amazing, you managed to say a STORY as a PANTOUM! That's brilliant!!! I was taken aback when I saw your ended sentences in the middle of lines and still making a perfect sense (stays poised. She waits for swaying sedge,). If something from what I read this week deserves 6 stars, you're definitely among the top two, but I lost the 6s foolishly this time, so I couldn't award the other one, and now I can't award you either. :/
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your lovely review and insightful comments, Tina. I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks, too, for the virtual six!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Looks great! I like doing pantoums, too, and I see you even referenced that in the author notes. I like hearing about a bird from another country. I really like the lines:
She waits for swaying sedge
reflected by the hunter's moon.
Have no idea what to improve.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Looks great! I like doing pantoums, too, and I see you even referenced that in the author notes. I like hearing about a bird from another country. I really like the lines:
She waits for swaying sedge
reflected by the hunter's moon.
Have no idea what to improve.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review, CrystalCookie999 and your part in inspiring me to try out the Pantoum. Much appreciated, as is your generous six-star rating, praise indeed from an accomplished mistress of the art form!
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Oh, ah ha ha ha! I think I have written 3 pantoums in my entire life.