Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "All Hail, Pantoum!"Poems written using the pantoum form
40 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A very good Pantoum. I think you are hooked on this form at the moment - this is not the first of yours I have read. I like this one best. I like your mention of Malay - as pantoum is a Malayan form of poetry, as you obviously knew. Very good final stanza, especially 'at last the tail engulfs the head' very good - your first and last line - clever. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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A very good Pantoum. I think you are hooked on this form at the moment - this is not the first of yours I have read. I like this one best. I like your mention of Malay - as pantoum is a Malayan form of poetry, as you obviously knew. Very good final stanza, especially 'at last the tail engulfs the head' very good - your first and last line - clever. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Many thanks for your review and comments, Dorothy. I appreciate your encouragement.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abab rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming and perfect rhyming with rung/sung. Good alliteration with Malay/malaise...pan/pipes...sense/slides...takes/time...causes/curse. Good effective use of the pantoum style. Clear message that holds my attention from start to finish.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Good use of the abab rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming and perfect rhyming with rung/sung. Good alliteration with Malay/malaise...pan/pipes...sense/slides...takes/time...causes/curse. Good effective use of the pantoum style. Clear message that holds my attention from start to finish.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Righteous Riter. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
Comment from pickthorn
I'm not familiar with this form of poetry but the poem explains, to some degree, what Pantoum is and from where it came. Real creativity is displayed here. Great job.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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I'm not familiar with this form of poetry but the poem explains, to some degree, what Pantoum is and from where it came. Real creativity is displayed here. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Pickthorn. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
I had to smile with this Pantoum work. The dual meanings within the lines quite amusing. A good reminder of form in the author notes. Great artwork choice. Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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I had to smile with this Pantoum work. The dual meanings within the lines quite amusing. A good reminder of form in the author notes. Great artwork choice. Enjoyed!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Midnight Writer 4U. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
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You are welcome. MN :)
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is nice. You are using these lines to explain the poetry form called pantoum. From your description in the author's note, it is a pantoum describing a pantoum. kudos
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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This is nice. You are using these lines to explain the poetry form called pantoum. From your description in the author's note, it is a pantoum describing a pantoum. kudos
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Perp Ihebon. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
Comment from paulah60
Well, you're really on a roll with pantoums!
We've been enculturated into the idea that life is lived in linear time (birth is the beginning; death is the end): 'Lines fixed in one climb up a rung'.
But then (and I love this line!), 'At last the tail engulfs the head'. The way I read this is that you're implicitly representing reality: life is not linear, but cyclical (a ongoing process of deaths and rebirths).
Lovely work, Tony!
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Well, you're really on a roll with pantoums!
We've been enculturated into the idea that life is lived in linear time (birth is the beginning; death is the end): 'Lines fixed in one climb up a rung'.
But then (and I love this line!), 'At last the tail engulfs the head'. The way I read this is that you're implicitly representing reality: life is not linear, but cyclical (a ongoing process of deaths and rebirths).
Lovely work, Tony!
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Paulah60. I appreciate your interesting interpretation of my poem! Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from JMUwrites
Loved the creativity you'd delved into for this write Tony...quite unusual to see a poem written that explains itself, but what a great idea!
Thanks for sharing this most enjoyable read, and I wish you well with it!
Goodbye for now, and all the best to you!
Jeffrey
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Loved the creativity you'd delved into for this write Tony...quite unusual to see a poem written that explains itself, but what a great idea!
Thanks for sharing this most enjoyable read, and I wish you well with it!
Goodbye for now, and all the best to you!
Jeffrey
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Jeffrey. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
At last the tail engulfs the head
Tucked up within each other's phrase
So here's an end. It's put to bed
All hail, Pantoum , Malay malaise
Okay, You got it done! Well done!LOL
Shhhh, It made me dizzy chasing my tail like that!
Good job. Nancy
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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At last the tail engulfs the head
Tucked up within each other's phrase
So here's an end. It's put to bed
All hail, Pantoum , Malay malaise
Okay, You got it done! Well done!LOL
Shhhh, It made me dizzy chasing my tail like that!
Good job. Nancy
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Nancy. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
Comment from Laurie Keim
Hi Tony.
Of all the meta-writing (writing about writing) that postmodernism was able to assemble, none of it was as pleasant a rendition as your poem.
The following lines took a while to nail accurately:
"Pan pipes entomb a dual sense
Tucked up within each other's phrase"
There is the obvious metaphor to the pantoum: as lines die (used up) they are entombed in the form: a real cracker of an idea and sings with cognitive music.
However "tucked up" has a coziness: tucked-up as in bed. So the pan-pipes are just a signal for a process of entombing meaning as one might sleep, not die, because the moment you start the poem everything comes back from the dead and is alive again or what i like to call "in play" again.
The following line carries a relation in letter shape to pantoum, too, yet appears like pan-pines to be there to declare the type of fun being had :
"A pantomime so richly sung" childlike fun, where high serious is for the moment postponed. By doing so, you carry a great sense of enjoyment of writing about writing.
The practicalities of writing with such fun disarms the abstract and returns writing back to the body of laughter and dancing.
A great pantoum: a nice essay in poetic form. Out of sixes.
Cheers, Laurie Keim
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Hi Tony.
Of all the meta-writing (writing about writing) that postmodernism was able to assemble, none of it was as pleasant a rendition as your poem.
The following lines took a while to nail accurately:
"Pan pipes entomb a dual sense
Tucked up within each other's phrase"
There is the obvious metaphor to the pantoum: as lines die (used up) they are entombed in the form: a real cracker of an idea and sings with cognitive music.
However "tucked up" has a coziness: tucked-up as in bed. So the pan-pipes are just a signal for a process of entombing meaning as one might sleep, not die, because the moment you start the poem everything comes back from the dead and is alive again or what i like to call "in play" again.
The following line carries a relation in letter shape to pantoum, too, yet appears like pan-pines to be there to declare the type of fun being had :
"A pantomime so richly sung" childlike fun, where high serious is for the moment postponed. By doing so, you carry a great sense of enjoyment of writing about writing.
The practicalities of writing with such fun disarms the abstract and returns writing back to the body of laughter and dancing.
A great pantoum: a nice essay in poetic form. Out of sixes.
Cheers, Laurie Keim
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Another great review, Laurie! I was most interested in your interpretation of the poem. You have picked up all that I put in and perhaps a bit more in places! I do appreciate your careful and most thoughtful analysis! Many thanks!
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, c_lucas. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
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You're welcome, Tfawcus. Charlie