The Animal Doctor
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Comment from jmdg1954
Honestly, I saw this newly listed at the top of the page, displacing the story previously there.
I ventured in and read this first chapter of your story already in progress. I simply enjoyed the style of writing. I was fixated to it. The dialogue, the storyline was intriguing to me.
I'm glad I took the risk to read. I may need to go back a chapter or two.
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Honestly, I saw this newly listed at the top of the page, displacing the story previously there.
I ventured in and read this first chapter of your story already in progress. I simply enjoyed the style of writing. I was fixated to it. The dialogue, the storyline was intriguing to me.
I'm glad I took the risk to read. I may need to go back a chapter or two.
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Well, thank you John. I'm so glad you ventured into my book. My last chapter, ch. 14 is very short; you may like to read it.
Comment from ccto12
I really enjoyed reading this excerpt from your chapter. The story quickly drew me in and your writing is very clear and concise. I very quickly who tell which character was who and their connection to the others. Having said that I still really appreciate that you've included a list of the char haters at the end in your authors notes. I wish more writers would do that. The description of the farm breakfast made me feel hungry! Also the voices of your characters have an authentic sound, in particular the voice of Old Man Tucker. Looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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I really enjoyed reading this excerpt from your chapter. The story quickly drew me in and your writing is very clear and concise. I very quickly who tell which character was who and their connection to the others. Having said that I still really appreciate that you've included a list of the char haters at the end in your authors notes. I wish more writers would do that. The description of the farm breakfast made me feel hungry! Also the voices of your characters have an authentic sound, in particular the voice of Old Man Tucker. Looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Wow I am so honored that you took the time to read and review my chapter. I look forward to having you as a steady reviewer of my work. So glad you enjoyed it.T
Comment from JM daSilva
I'm curious since you used "for heaven sakes" in dialogue and the standard is 'for heaven's sake'.
If it is dialectal, where does it come from?
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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I'm curious since you used "for heaven sakes" in dialogue and the standard is 'for heaven's sake'.
If it is dialectal, where does it come from?
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you for this review, JM. I'm afraid I'm guilty of saying "for heaven sakes", myself. I heard people say both. I think characters have a right to speak as they choose.
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I agree. I was just curious about the origin.
Comment from Janie King
Well, I've not read any other chapters of this story so I'm at a bit of a disadvantage but this young doctor needs to be on his p's and q's as the saying goes or he can end up in a serious situation. God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Well, I've not read any other chapters of this story so I'm at a bit of a disadvantage but this young doctor needs to be on his p's and q's as the saying goes or he can end up in a serious situation. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank You, Janie for stopping by my work and reading.
Comment from emrpoems
Good use of dialogue. Good story plan that makes it move along smoothly.
holds the reader's interest right to the end.
A real life situation that will haunt him for he rest of hi life.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Good use of dialogue. Good story plan that makes it move along smoothly.
holds the reader's interest right to the end.
A real life situation that will haunt him for he rest of hi life.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you, emrpoems. I'm glad for your review.
Comment from Jessie Denniel
Nice story. The image of the story is clear. Nicely done. You presented your ideas clearly. And the way of thinking of the characters are also fine. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Nice story. The image of the story is clear. Nicely done. You presented your ideas clearly. And the way of thinking of the characters are also fine. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Jessie for reading and reviewing.
Comment from James Dooney
Ah it was your title that lured me in here. It reminds me of that old Joe Cocker song Unchain my heart. Well done here. You have given us a good read ! I hope to read more.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Ah it was your title that lured me in here. It reminds me of that old Joe Cocker song Unchain my heart. Well done here. You have given us a good read ! I hope to read more.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Mr. Dooney. So, that's how to lure you in. Umm, wait until you see my next title.
Comment from robina1978
A good chapter again. Nathan can't get Margaret out of his head and that worries him sick. He is married now, settled and has a lovely daughter with the wife he loves.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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A good chapter again. Nathan can't get Margaret out of his head and that worries him sick. He is married now, settled and has a lovely daughter with the wife he loves.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Robina, Always glad to hear from you.
Comment from GracieAnn
amahara, I have just dropped in to review out of curiosity and found it interesting. The dialog is good and the setting of the era is strong in believability. The dialog flows easily and moves the story along nicely. The element of mystery is a good hook. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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amahara, I have just dropped in to review out of curiosity and found it interesting. The dialog is good and the setting of the era is strong in believability. The dialog flows easily and moves the story along nicely. The element of mystery is a good hook. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Well, thank you for stopping by and reading my chapter. Don't be a stranger, I've enjoyed reviewed.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Very well written and plotted.
It is great to see Nathan settled with Grace and baby Margaret.
As always an antagonist emerges to shake the foundations of this relationship in the form of former lover Margaret.
I guess the message is "never rest on your laurels."
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Very well written and plotted.
It is great to see Nathan settled with Grace and baby Margaret.
As always an antagonist emerges to shake the foundations of this relationship in the form of former lover Margaret.
I guess the message is "never rest on your laurels."
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you dear for keeping up with my story.