Erotic Addiction
A man can become addicted to anything30 total reviews
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi the author,
It seems that Jake is besotted, but the question really is, is it purely lust, or is this the stirrings of something deeper as well?
One correction for you -
three hundred for the breaks and a hundred - in this instance that should be 'brakes' ...
Patrick
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Hi the author,
It seems that Jake is besotted, but the question really is, is it purely lust, or is this the stirrings of something deeper as well?
One correction for you -
three hundred for the breaks and a hundred - in this instance that should be 'brakes' ...
Patrick
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, Patrick. Nice catch of the misspellings, thank you. Yes, that is a question, that will be answered in the third and final tale.
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. An erotic romp. This is well written, kindof like a mystery, I don't know why it feels that way to me. But, hey, I liked it.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Hello. An erotic romp. This is well written, kindof like a mystery, I don't know why it feels that way to me. But, hey, I liked it.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from Adri7enne
"That'll be three hundred for the BREAKS and a hundred...." BRAKES.
"Before him was everything he had ever wanted all contained in one BARLEY ninety-five pound woman." BARELY.
"Jake was vaguely aware...but she had not allowed him to stop as HE moved within her with wild passion." Insert HE.
Those two small corrections don't diminish the lovely write. You've described the encounters very well - with sensitivity and a light erotic touch. I enjoyed the read. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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"That'll be three hundred for the BREAKS and a hundred...." BRAKES.
"Before him was everything he had ever wanted all contained in one BARLEY ninety-five pound woman." BARELY.
"Jake was vaguely aware...but she had not allowed him to stop as HE moved within her with wild passion." Insert HE.
Those two small corrections don't diminish the lovely write. You've described the encounters very well - with sensitivity and a light erotic touch. I enjoyed the read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you for all the time and careful reading you put in. I will fix those.
Comment from comanalbert
I liked how you described kneading his mind to Li Song. And the sex scene is very sensual and well defined, with multiple orgasms. What happened let Jack and more confused.But with his card untouched..
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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I liked how you described kneading his mind to Li Song. And the sex scene is very sensual and well defined, with multiple orgasms. What happened let Jack and more confused.But with his card untouched..
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much. Was his card untouched? We'll have to see in the last tale.
Comment from MIKECON
A very well written piece,considering the subject matter. The storyline was explained well as the story unfolded.
It's a difficult subject to get right throughout the story but you managed this very well.Very Enjoyable piece and good luck with it.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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A very well written piece,considering the subject matter. The storyline was explained well as the story unfolded.
It's a difficult subject to get right throughout the story but you managed this very well.Very Enjoyable piece and good luck with it.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much. I really appreciate the great review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good introduction that raise my curiosity from the start. Clear dialogue between Jake and Juan. Good transition between the events. Good passionate details of love making between Jake and LiSong. Good complimentary photo. Good conclusion that I myself can relate to but I think mine was more lust.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Good introduction that raise my curiosity from the start. Clear dialogue between Jake and Juan. Good transition between the events. Good passionate details of love making between Jake and LiSong. Good complimentary photo. Good conclusion that I myself can relate to but I think mine was more lust.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much. That's okay, lust is a very important emotion. Most of us wouldn't be here without it.
Comment from Nottoway
Wow!! Magical presentation of that encounter we wish for or that we have had that encompasses our being. Sometimes we do not know the mutual attraction or need that we awaken in others and that others awaken in us. However, it is that moment of sharing that never can be forgotten.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Wow!! Magical presentation of that encounter we wish for or that we have had that encompasses our being. Sometimes we do not know the mutual attraction or need that we awaken in others and that others awaken in us. However, it is that moment of sharing that never can be forgotten.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much. There is a lot of wisdom in what you say. People are more than we know, and we need many things. I appreciate the great review.
Comment from Zue65
Well I guess this is meant for the adult readers, with your escapade with Li Song. But you have a natural flair for telling stories, that progressed well from the beginning to end. If this is just a fiction then you are definitely creative.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Well I guess this is meant for the adult readers, with your escapade with Li Song. But you have a natural flair for telling stories, that progressed well from the beginning to end. If this is just a fiction then you are definitely creative.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much. Oh, it's only fiction, or my wife would kill me.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, yo udid an excellent job writing this story about the man whose mind was taken away by the bath of a lifetime. it wasn't calgon, but he was taken away, lol. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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this is very well written, mystery writer, yo udid an excellent job writing this story about the man whose mind was taken away by the bath of a lifetime. it wasn't calgon, but he was taken away, lol. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from ProjectBluebook
I like your name choices, Jake and especially, Li Song. This is charming and has a touch of class, professionally done. I enjoyed it and had no trouble understanding it as I went along. Awe, you surprised me with the lovely poem, I do declare, I loved it! good imagination. A lot of folks are talking about spring, bring her on! Nice spring poem. I got no disputes looks shipshape to me, great job, astonishing! wackydo
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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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I like your name choices, Jake and especially, Li Song. This is charming and has a touch of class, professionally done. I enjoyed it and had no trouble understanding it as I went along. Awe, you surprised me with the lovely poem, I do declare, I loved it! good imagination. A lot of folks are talking about spring, bring her on! Nice spring poem. I got no disputes looks shipshape to me, great job, astonishing! wackydo
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Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you like that. I skipped it one the first tale, but wanted in one of the three.
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Thanks for your considerate reply.