Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

This was quite dark and scary. When we see a ventriloquist on stage we all feel that this performance is not quite right. Spooky. Don and Vicki

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thanks very much, Don, and I get that same uneasy feeling as well. Perhaps that's why I wrote about the subject.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Oh, my God. An expanded version of this poem should be on the Twilight Zone. Very clever poem. Great twist at the end.

Good luck with the poem

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thanks, Jay, I really appreciate that Twilight Zone reference. It just so happens to be one of my all time favorite television series. I never missed it as a young boy.

There was one episode I recall, entitled "The Dummy", that pertained to such a topic. here's a video clip for you.



Thanks again, my friend!

reply by Jay Squires on 23-Apr-2014

Thanks for a refresher on that episode. Loved it!

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

My pleasure, Jay. You're welcome!

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Pleasant screams to you too, oh, most anonymous DEAN!

Cleverly, masterfully done - 100 words is indeed restraining.

Best wishes, friend. Hope you win - as always!

Sonali :)


voices came (no comma needed here)

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Hah ha, how did you know, Reach? Was it the topic, or the composition? Was it the in depth history on ventriloquism? Whatever it was that gave me away, I really appreciate your feedback on this terror tale. I know these types of stories and poems aren't exactly your cup of tea, so to speak, lol.

reply by Selina Stambi on 23-Apr-2014

You'll never be able to disguise yourself, my friend!

I have no problem with your work, Dean - just need to read in broad daylight, that's all!! Have a lovely day.

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Ha ha, that's good to know, Reach, thanks. You do the same, my friend.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Wooden you know this was great...
I do think dolls are creepier......you know the porcelain kind....
Well done Dean...and thanks for author notes
God bless

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Hah ha..."wooden you know," she says!

Yes, I know precisely the kind of dolls you are speaking of, kiwijenny. I'll make certain my next horror poem contest prompt entry is about them, just for you. So, beware...and keep an eye out for it. Well, don't literally keep your eye out. Oh heck, you know what I mean, lol.

Thanks for the great review!

reply by kiwijenny on 23-Apr-2014

Ha ha ha I visualized pulling out an eyeball and sticking it on my ...."Eye Pad" lol

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Heaven forbid! Hee-hee...

Comment from Karen B.

Excellent

Ah, this is good horror, love the twist at the end. Great rhythm and rhyme make it smooth reading. And thanks for including all the info in the notes. Fascinating!

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014

Thanks for appreciating those notes, Karen. Many think they're too long winded and unnecessary, but I always like to include a little history behind the topic I've written about.

I really appreciate the fabulous review you've given me here as well.

Thanks so much again!

Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

A definite attack of the horrors here and I'm just GLAD they found his hand up his back and not somewhere else LOL I've ALWAYS found the vaudeville dummies a little eery and spooky looking and if ever I saw one laying in a suitcase I'd half expect it to come out with something smart ass. Sounds like this little piece had a mind and agenda of his own. Well written and although the ending was unexpected, it seemed well, fitting! LOL
Cheers P
PS My screams were far from pleasant thankyou! LOL

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Hah ha, thank you, CPJ. I'm really happy you liked it. I sincerely appreciate your kind comments and generous rating, my friend.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Exceptional

This really is a horror story - remind me of a film I saw some years ago where the dummy took over from the man - spooky it was. I find dummy's a bit frightening and you have just frightened me now. I know exactly who wrote this - the handwriting is on the wall LOL. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Hah, thank you, Dorothy. I really appreciate your kind comments and outstanding rating, my friend. So many figure out that I'm the author of the things I post in contests. Sometimes I think that it works as a detriment, but how does one disguise their work and still make it to where they feel it will be entertaining to those who care enough to read it? I haven't figured that out yet, but I will one of these days.

Thanks again, my friend. It's always a pleasure!

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the pictures. I love the poem. I love the author notes. I did not know it was once a kind of religion. I love the twist. The dummy was the voice. Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thanks you very much, nelliesellie. I really appreciate you taking time out to offer me your opinions on the poem. It's always nice to hear from you.

Comment from JavaJunkie

Excellent

Dang it D.K....I knew this was you! This little horror story has your hand written all over it. You definitely have a strong style that is all your own. Another well done piece that is totally creepy. Love the author notes, you are obviously well read and it shows in your writing.
Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thank you, JavaJunkie, I really appreciate the kind comments and excellent rating. I must remain anonymous for now, so maybe I am D.K., and then again, maybe I'm not, lol...

Thanks so much again, my friend. Much obliged.

reply by JavaJunkie on 22-Apr-2014

Ya I know! That's why I used initials....Good luck, not that you need it:)

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

The word ventriloquist is eerie enough but the portrayal of a
corpse construed to tantalize the audience is ghastly.
Very good areas of enjambments used.
Charlene

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2014

Thank you very much for your kind review, Charlene. It's always a pleasure to see a review and comment from you. I'm really glad that you liked it.