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A collection of free verse poems

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Comment from wordsmatter2me
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I like first learning about the meaning of Paper Tiger. Each line and stanza introduces me to words, phrases and the dark days, exotic night flowers learning how to write unrhymed verse. Poetry teaches us all about a world I have come to know.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
    Many thanks for dropping by to review. So glad that you enjoyed the poem and found some meaning in it.
Comment from GWHARGIS
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You must have a teenaged daughter. I am raising two teenaged girls and one preteen boy. It is tough to let them do things with out your input or counseling, but better they make mistakes now while you are still right there. I made a ton of mistakes but I am still here. And I am a lot wiser than some of my contemporaries. Great poem and loved the imagery. Good job on this.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
    Many thanks for your perceptive review, GWH. It was a hard time but many years ago now. She has turned out to be a wonderful woman and we are best of friends!
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
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Loved these bits:
In the dark days
Of the Kurt Cobain addiction,
enmeshed in the cocoon of her childhood, ENSNARED

In free, unrhymed verse
Not the straitjacket of the formal sonnet

As parents since the time of Socrates (Who complained bitterly), parents entrenched, conflict with their children who reflect a changing world of values and morality. Well said and presented.

Regards:

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
    Many thanks for this review, Stephen. I think your suggested alternative of 'ensnared' is a good one. I shall certainly consider it.
reply by STEPHEN A CARTER on 06-Jun-2014
    Dear tfawcus: Glad to help out. Just posted 2 funny poems.

    Cheers: Steve
Comment from 9999pool
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The generation gap will exist and persist as long as the world keep changing the habits and lifestyles of people. What is goo din one generation may not hold true of another generation, The lingo, the rebellion and the virtual of the net and Smartphone, somehow diluted their interaction with the older generation, They have to learn to write their own story in their own time while we give advice based on good faith. Smiles.
Great write.
Ritchie. :))

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
    How very true, Ritchie! It sometimes seems a strange new world and very different from the one we grew up in!
reply by 9999pool on 06-Jun-2014
    So true. Many are blaming technology for the generation gap but does it? Smiles.
    Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi Tfawcus,

Interesting artwork to help emphasize the words in your poem. Never will understand the fried brain lifestyle of the Kurt Cobains of the the world.

Well done work.

Cheers,
Keep Smilin... Jax

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
    Thanks, Jax. I couldn't agree more!
Comment from kiwijenny
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Tony this could not have been written for me could it. My oldest daughter and I had this generation clash yesterday.....well it was a heated and loud argument with son in law ....cousin ...daughters ...yikes. But when my husband came home and in a calm way explained so she listened..it was such a paper tiger generational thing...
I love your poem but stop being a clairvoyant:o)
God bless

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
    Sorry to hear that you are going through hard times with your daughter. I hope all is resolved now.
reply by kiwijenny on 06-Jun-2014
    All is resolved.....for now...I am so proud of her in so many ways....great poem
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
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Personal adult relationship stemming from a childhood association. I think the writing refers to a late adolescent stage of development, like college: pseudo-intellectualism. She, I deduct, was free spirited and all did not go well: life is a hard taskmaster, and the free-spirited do not always fare so well. Here the sonnet bears a unique responsibility: the discipline of the straight jacket, suggesting the very worst. I wish for the very best. Kenny

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
    Thanks for this review, Kenny. The poem was about events that took place a very long time ago. All water under the bridge now. The sonnet and free verse co-exist comfortably again.
Comment from RGstar
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Yes, wise words here, as this sentiment applies to us all, and seem as though we, as parents, fall into the trap of holding on too tightly. Still , the balance is never easy to gauge, as it is set by the only standards we know. How little is too little, and how much is too much?
Good write,
Tony,
best wishes,
RG

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
    You are right, RG - it is a difficult balance and hard to know what is right. The poem was about events that took place a very long time ago. All water under the bridge now. The sonnet and free verse co-exist comfortably again.
Comment from Jackarrie
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I like this poem, it has a deep meaning of how some parents want their children to be what they wanted to be, or what they want their offspring to be. Putting high hopes and pressures that can be very damaging.

Well written
Well done
Mary

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
    You are right, Mary - it is a difficult balance and hard to know what is right. The poem was about events that took place a very long time ago. All water under the bridge now. The sonnet and free verse co-exist comfortably again.
Comment from royowen
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Ah when we were young, what a time that was! You must be younger than me I have to go back a little further! I like this nostalgic trip. It's a pretty good write! finely written in articulate expressive language. The narrative imagery was good and the flow was smooth! Well done! Blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2014


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
    Many thanks for your kind review, Roy. The poem was about events that took place about fifteen years ago. All water under the bridge now.