Comment from amahra

Excellent

Lovely black and white art work of the little deers. Loved the 5-7-5. It showed defiant image even without the picture. Great job.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks.

reply by amahra on 25-Jun-2014

LOL I meant to say a definite image. You're welcome.

reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

I knew what you meant, amahra. No worries.

Comment from acerisestory

Excellent

I like your river haiku very much, Dean! Despite one of my earlier reviews, this is short :) Your use of alliteration enhances the flow of the haiku, and the accompanying artwork complements your words. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks

Comment from Charlene0513

Excellent

To Dean Kuch, Where there is plenty of grasslands and a body of water there will always be the rise of of beauty and simple gazes of tranquility.
Charlene

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Dean, not hard to see why this refreshing and enjoyable haiku has reached all time best status, the enjambment in the first two lines and the 5 7 5 exceptional, it is so hard to keep to these guidelines, well done my friend, I am unfortunately after a couple of unforced errors (fat fingers on keys) unable to give you a well deserved six.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from JavaJunkie

Exceptional

A haiku from your gentle muse...I like it. Good enjambment between the first two lines. I like that you stuck to the 5-7-5. You've captured the sweet gentle nature of yearlings through their innocence and have employed strong imagery with the river flowing to nourish both the wilderness and the deer.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks, JJ

Comment from Bobby Jo

Excellent

I have to confess that I saw the cutest thing the other day. I was driving and had two fawns with white spots on their back run in front of me. I didn't hit them, but they sure were cute.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Dean,

What's this! A pleasant nature scene? You should be ashamed of yourself. There's still time to have a wolf tear the guts out of those darling yearling, lol.

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Yeah, but then the haiku police would tear the guts outta me (LOL)

Thanks for checking out my lighter side for a change, Lou. Much obliged!

Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

It would seem that the constraints for Haiku change every year and these are fearsome for some, but I love the form of the carry through of the first two lines and the satori is more delineated. You have kept the 5-7-5 format which was before required and is traditional. Your poem is a very good read.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks, Alan, I appreciate that. I hope those who take the time to vote will think so too.

Much obliged, my friend.

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi Dean Kuch,

Nice Haiku, it captures succinctly the joy of younglings of all creatures very well. The woods where I live are full of deer, both Fallow and Red, plus Wild Boar and several predators - so we get to see the young 'at play' quite frequently as I walk my Shelties.

Patrick

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Same here, Patrick. Our county has an over abundance of deer. Every day there are four or five that have been hit and are laying alongside the highway. My Chihuahua, Gidget, and I go out each morning to watch the sunrise. We have several we encounter in the large hayfield behind our home. They're beautiful animals.

Thanks for the kind review. Much obliged.

Comment from daeneam

Excellent

A new one from my favorite "pleasant screams" writer. This little poem is something refreshing and enjoyable to think about - God's creatures playing freely without fear of being hunted or killed. I wish you well in the contest. God bless...
c", Mae

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks, c",Mae. I got a feeling I'm gonna need it.

reply by daeneam on 25-Jun-2014

The feeling is mutual, my friend! It is a good breather...