Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "One can say,"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from The Death
Hi, DW.
A very thought-provoking question you've asked in this short poem. Ancestors' sacrifices and legendary tales must be embraced by the successors.
This could have been a very nice Naani poem, but it has syllable restrictions, but it also has four lines.
Excellent use if D,R,N consonance throughout. I like its explicit nature very much. Artwork resonates with the theme as well.
Nicely done! :)
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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Hi, DW.
A very thought-provoking question you've asked in this short poem. Ancestors' sacrifices and legendary tales must be embraced by the successors.
This could have been a very nice Naani poem, but it has syllable restrictions, but it also has four lines.
Excellent use if D,R,N consonance throughout. I like its explicit nature very much. Artwork resonates with the theme as well.
Nicely done! :)
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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thank you
Comment from Bill Schott
This could end up as one of those motivational posters one may see in a corporate office or school environment. It's food for thought as we perform our mundane tasks day to day.
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This could end up as one of those motivational posters one may see in a corporate office or school environment. It's food for thought as we perform our mundane tasks day to day.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
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thanks Bill
Comment from Lulube
Good message here. and I'd like to think that my life story even though there is a lot of adventure there is also the turning point of becoming disability with chronic back and neck pain and a bit more that I don't need to get into. But I like to think that some of my poetry will be saved by my daughter and passed down, if she can to her family to be. It would be nice to write enough poetry that I feel would be suffice to print, then the world would have a bit of me.
lulube good pondering words
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Good message here. and I'd like to think that my life story even though there is a lot of adventure there is also the turning point of becoming disability with chronic back and neck pain and a bit more that I don't need to get into. But I like to think that some of my poetry will be saved by my daughter and passed down, if she can to her family to be. It would be nice to write enough poetry that I feel would be suffice to print, then the world would have a bit of me.
lulube good pondering words
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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To all unwritten things
that are passed by voice throughout the evolution of time
never to be written in books or carved on stone
will this generation pass the secrets of our forefathers forward
to be carried over to their sons?
Thanks Gary
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I think those days for the general public won't remember an elder's voice but will remember someone singing or trying to sing on the internet.
lulube
Comment from skye
If no pride was taken in the achievements
Of our ancestors,
Will your achievements be worthy
To be remembered by your descendants?
Extremely thought-provoking. We need to strive to be worthy of our descendants and our ancestors.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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If no pride was taken in the achievements
Of our ancestors,
Will your achievements be worthy
To be remembered by your descendants?
Extremely thought-provoking. We need to strive to be worthy of our descendants and our ancestors.
Excellent.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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thanks for reading
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
This poem is deeply moving and so very true. Who will remember us in 100 years? And for what reasons? Will it be achievements, perhaps wisdom, kindness to mankind? Your message of taking pride is a good one.
Nicely done, Carolyn
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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This poem is deeply moving and so very true. Who will remember us in 100 years? And for what reasons? Will it be achievements, perhaps wisdom, kindness to mankind? Your message of taking pride is a good one.
Nicely done, Carolyn
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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thanks
Comment from Lastamen
A provocative inquiry that is deserving of evaluation. Looking back with careful reflection and consideration affords us the proper perspective as we journey forward. Well done.
Till the last amen
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A provocative inquiry that is deserving of evaluation. Looking back with careful reflection and consideration affords us the proper perspective as we journey forward. Well done.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
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thank you
Comment from Rummy500
it was very good poem
And i jusst signed up
and yours was the first I read and it has 2 ribbons
so must be good
5 stars
I liked it a lot
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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it was very good poem
And i jusst signed up
and yours was the first I read and it has 2 ribbons
so must be good
5 stars
I liked it a lot
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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thanks
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your welcome
Comment from DazzleSwift
This...puzzled me, though it does pose an interesting question. Perhaps the entertainment value is present in the pondering of the enthusiastic reader, and their need for understanding :)
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This...puzzled me, though it does pose an interesting question. Perhaps the entertainment value is present in the pondering of the enthusiastic reader, and their need for understanding :)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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This...puzzled me if you read other reviews it may help you
Comment from MisinformedPoet
That is a very interesting question you raise in your philosophical poem. I guess it's a sort of karma thing.
I really like the fact that the second and last lines end with the relationship words, ancestors and descendants.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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That is a very interesting question you raise in your philosophical poem. I guess it's a sort of karma thing.
I really like the fact that the second and last lines end with the relationship words, ancestors and descendants.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
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thank you
Comment from Tonulak
I think you made a great point here. As a lover of history, I have always been impressed with inovators and visionaries. To manybelieve that everything of worth began in their own lifetime. Great write--Ted
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I think you made a great point here. As a lover of history, I have always been impressed with inovators and visionaries. To manybelieve that everything of worth began in their own lifetime. Great write--Ted
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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thank you