Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from MM lives on :)
Always a great day when i can give you can six star
This was another wow chapter ..your one hell of a writer
And one i always look forward to reading ....thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Always a great day when i can give you can six star
This was another wow chapter ..your one hell of a writer
And one i always look forward to reading ....thanks for sharing
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Hi, Christopher. Thank you so much for this very generous review. I so appreciate how encouraging and gracious you are, my friend. :) Bev
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Bev.
This is another awesome chapter! Wow, the way you write keeps the reader on the edge of their seat. You have shown excellent visuals, excellent dialogue and built the tension with each sentence. I felt Jana's pain having to reveal Rick as the mole, a decision so difficult to share.
The section with Rick is excellent. I could see him struggling with Danika, his deliberation to leave her and carry on as his pain increased. The last line is such a cliff hanger. I can't wait to read what happens next.
Fabulous write my friend!!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Hi, Bev.
This is another awesome chapter! Wow, the way you write keeps the reader on the edge of their seat. You have shown excellent visuals, excellent dialogue and built the tension with each sentence. I felt Jana's pain having to reveal Rick as the mole, a decision so difficult to share.
The section with Rick is excellent. I could see him struggling with Danika, his deliberation to leave her and carry on as his pain increased. The last line is such a cliff hanger. I can't wait to read what happens next.
Fabulous write my friend!!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Dear Rosalyne. Thank you, once again, for an amazing review. I so appreciate your words of encouragement and your generosity, my friend. I don't want to let down the folks who've so faithfully followed my story, so I'm trying to come up with the best conclusion I can. Thanks for letting me know what worked for you -- so helpful!
Hugs, Bev
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Hi, Bev.
Your story is a winner all the way!!! You have done a superb job creating a fascinating plot with amazing characters and dialogue. What really stands out beyond the excitement and tension is the cultural practices and traditions. This is so fresh and different from other suspense novels I've read. I have learned so much about the Sioux people, the culture, traditions and language. This in itself has made for an awesome read among the many layers in your story.
I can't wait for the next chapter.
Bye, my friend!
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
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Gosh, Rosalyne, reading this makes my heart feel so might lighter. I have a love for the Sioux culture, so I'm glad that comes through in this novel. I so appreciate your timely comments, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well written and entertaining from start to finish with enough going on to keep a reader who tunes in for a chapter here and there to feel right in the mix. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Well written and entertaining from start to finish with enough going on to keep a reader who tunes in for a chapter here and there to feel right in the mix. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Ric, thank you so much. I really appreciate to taking time to read my chapter and for your kind words of encouragement.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from barbara.wilkey
black-clad figure clutching a worn, leather valise who slipped from where he hid in the mine's dark interior. (Not good!!!!!)
You already know I like your novel. This is another good addition. Good job of writing.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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black-clad figure clutching a worn, leather valise who slipped from where he hid in the mine's dark interior. (Not good!!!!!)
You already know I like your novel. This is another good addition. Good job of writing.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Barbara. Your encouragement and support mean a lot to me! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Joan E.
I had to ponder the exorcist's quote--a creative way to re-absorb us in the story! Your "fly" and "ripe melon" analogies were vivid and effective. Revealing Rick's thoughts in italics worked well to move the storyline forward. Once again, you left the reader in great suspense. Well done! -Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I had to ponder the exorcist's quote--a creative way to re-absorb us in the story! Your "fly" and "ripe melon" analogies were vivid and effective. Revealing Rick's thoughts in italics worked well to move the storyline forward. Once again, you left the reader in great suspense. Well done! -Joan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Joan, thank you so much! I sure appreciated your taking time to read and review my chapter. And thanks, too, for mentioning what you felt was effective. That's so helpful. Hugs, Bev
Comment from OLA THOMAS
I think Rick will be in for another shocker when he comes back from his nap. good suspense at this point keeping a reading guessing what next. Very creative work
ola thomas
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I think Rick will be in for another shocker when he comes back from his nap. good suspense at this point keeping a reading guessing what next. Very creative work
ola thomas
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Hi, Ola. I expect you are correct on Rick's surprise. Thanks so much for the great review, my friend.
:) Bev
Comment from lindalcreel
I've been away from this story for awhile and will try to go back over the previous chapters to catch up. I may not comment on all of them, but will hopefully be able to pick up where I left off. You've got a great story going. Can't wait to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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I've been away from this story for awhile and will try to go back over the previous chapters to catch up. I may not comment on all of them, but will hopefully be able to pick up where I left off. You've got a great story going. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Hi, Lindal. Thank you so much for this very generous and encouraging review. So kind of you to take time out to read my chapter. I really appreciate that! :) Bev
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I thought I had already fanned you, but I guess I didn't. I've corrected that problem.
Comment from emrpoems
loved the ending where you left on a note of mystery.
Kept my interest all along with your sell structured dialogue and your ability to engage the reader's emotions.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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loved the ending where you left on a note of mystery.
Kept my interest all along with your sell structured dialogue and your ability to engage the reader's emotions.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much for this very gracious review, E. I much appreciate your encouragement and support.
:) Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Here we go again - you sure know how to keep your reader dangling. I wish I was reading this book all at once, though. (I will when it's published!)
Fabulous chapter, yet again - so authentic, I swear. I see not a comma out of place, but then, that's not surprising.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Here we go again - you sure know how to keep your reader dangling. I wish I was reading this book all at once, though. (I will when it's published!)
Fabulous chapter, yet again - so authentic, I swear. I see not a comma out of place, but then, that's not surprising.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much for this gracious and generous review. I've got month's of work ahead of me to get this novel into shape, but first we have to get to the end LoL. I appreciate your encouragement very much, my kind friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
What can I say that hasn't already been said? Another great post, dear Bev. This story gets my tummy butterflies all stirred up.
I sense we're drawing to a close. You're bringing this to climax with perfect speed and great skill.
Comments, and a couple of other wee things:
"This location is only accessible by foot?(") - insert quote
"That's about as likely as keeping flies off horse shit," - excellent!!
Skeets persisted(.)
(")Yes. He was last seen heading in a westerly direction.
"Derek, I..." (H)e heard an escaped sob.
Rick heard it as if from a spot in space, far above any human meaning. - love this. Adds so much depth to the moment.
Exhaustion, then sleep, claimed Rick, rendering him unaware of the black-clad figure clutching a worn, leather valise who slipped from where he hid in the mine's dark interior. - Oh my god. Way to finish!
Superb stuff, my friend.
Love Av
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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What can I say that hasn't already been said? Another great post, dear Bev. This story gets my tummy butterflies all stirred up.
I sense we're drawing to a close. You're bringing this to climax with perfect speed and great skill.
Comments, and a couple of other wee things:
"This location is only accessible by foot?(") - insert quote
"That's about as likely as keeping flies off horse shit," - excellent!!
Skeets persisted(.)
(")Yes. He was last seen heading in a westerly direction.
"Derek, I..." (H)e heard an escaped sob.
Rick heard it as if from a spot in space, far above any human meaning. - love this. Adds so much depth to the moment.
Exhaustion, then sleep, claimed Rick, rendering him unaware of the black-clad figure clutching a worn, leather valise who slipped from where he hid in the mine's dark interior. - Oh my god. Way to finish!
Superb stuff, my friend.
Love Av
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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AV, thank you so much for this in-depth and very helpful review. I so appreciate you catching those spaggies! And I am very grateful that you're still enjoying my story.
Hugs, Bev