A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Ghost Ship"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
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Comment from padumachitta
Hey Dean. How could I not give this a six. The sheer onderful complete sensory imput deserves it.
The message is one to heed.
I am floundering myself at the moment. It would seem my muse and me, well, we are dancing on the decks of different boats.
Ah, well...at least I have the smile when I see your name on the message box. I know I will read something I enjoy. And that helps, it certainly does.
padumachitta
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Hey Dean. How could I not give this a six. The sheer onderful complete sensory imput deserves it.
The message is one to heed.
I am floundering myself at the moment. It would seem my muse and me, well, we are dancing on the decks of different boats.
Ah, well...at least I have the smile when I see your name on the message box. I know I will read something I enjoy. And that helps, it certainly does.
padumachitta
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
Comment from krys123
Dean;
What can I say my friend but you are out of my league and within a league of your own.
This is so masterfully done in way your imagination goes forward with no bounds ahead with this is so inventive and creative within imagery it is so expressive and descriptive that I have seen no other like it.
Your rhyming and Rhythm is exceptional And neither of your rhyming is forced nor labored while your rhythm flows smoothly throughout your poem.
Thanks for sharing this masterpiece with all of us and may the Lord bless and keep you always.
Alex
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Dean;
What can I say my friend but you are out of my league and within a league of your own.
This is so masterfully done in way your imagination goes forward with no bounds ahead with this is so inventive and creative within imagery it is so expressive and descriptive that I have seen no other like it.
Your rhyming and Rhythm is exceptional And neither of your rhyming is forced nor labored while your rhythm flows smoothly throughout your poem.
Thanks for sharing this masterpiece with all of us and may the Lord bless and keep you always.
Alex
Comment Written 31-Jul-2014
Comment from JudyS
Dean, This is awesome. Not only is the message so true, the background pix is perfect. Well done. I really enjoyed this one.Thank you for sharing. Judy
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Dean, This is awesome. Not only is the message so true, the background pix is perfect. Well done. I really enjoyed this one.Thank you for sharing. Judy
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Carole Rosa
Dean, The ghostly sounds and your poetic words are a fascinating example of your talent as a poet. Most enchanting!! Carole
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Dean, The ghostly sounds and your poetic words are a fascinating example of your talent as a poet. Most enchanting!! Carole
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from DanielEkine
When the author speaks of a picture displaying a thousand words, his work takes the cake. The presentation and aesthetic of his work just keeps putting its reader in an awe. How unique. A jagged ghost ship is alive.
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When the author speaks of a picture displaying a thousand words, his work takes the cake. The presentation and aesthetic of his work just keeps putting its reader in an awe. How unique. A jagged ghost ship is alive.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Dean,
What a beautiful ship! Your presentation of this poem, with roaring ocean waves and creaking rigging, was fabulous. I wish I could do this, but alas, my computer is as old as the hills.
We have a ghost ship between New Brunswick and Prince Edward Island, in the Northumberland Strait. It has been sighted numerous times over the last 220 years, the sails blazing in flames. Some people have even attempted to rescue the sailors that must be on board. One of the more famous rescue attempts took place in Charlottetown Harbour around 1900. A group of sailors boarded a small row boat and paddled toward the flaming ship to rescue the troubled crew. During their struggle to reach the distressed vessel, the phantom ship completely vanished. A thorough search was immediately carried out by divers, but no shipwreck was ever found. That's how real the sightings have been, to utterly fool men. Most sightings have occurred between September and November, but the ship has appeared in every season. Spooky stuff, eh? Just like your poem.
Here's one such eye-witness report,
"As it came nearer it seemed to lose speed, and as it came opposite our house it stopped still. I said to Fred, "Perhaps they are coming ashore." We got up on the banks to watch. There was no sign of anyone on board and no dory on tow. I can't remember just how long it was, but I think about ten minutes after she stopped I seen smoke rising very slow all over the deck. Then it was only a few minutes I seen men that seemed to come up from below and they were running around the deck every way. Then as they were running around I seen a low flame all over the deck. When the flames started the men climbed up the masts of the vessel. When they was about halfway up the masts the sails caught. All the sails seemed to catch at the same time. I could not see the men any more as the flames hid my view. We watched it until the flames died and everything crumbled to the deck. There was nothing left but the hull on the water, and gradually it seemed to sink lower and finally disappeared as if it gradually filled with water and sunk."
The most recent sighting was in January of 2008 by 17-year-old Mathieu Giguere. It's sometimes called the Chaleur Phantom.
I wondered about that first line though,
"Tormenting vessel, thou beckons me"
Should it be,
(Tormenting vessel, thou dost beckon me) ???
Is this a dream? You find yourself on a ghost ship. It's a nightmare, and you realize when you awaken, you'll never see it again. Your last view before waking is no one standing at the steering wheel. That would scare me out of a nightmare!
The only other thing I can think... you are dying. And the ghost ship has come for you to carry you to Heaven. I remember the 1959 movie, "Darby O'Gill and the Little People", starring Albert Sharpe, Sean Connery, and Janet Munro. Darby plays his fiddle for the king of the leprechauns, King Brian. In the end, a death carriage and a scary banshee make this movie one of the best family dramas ever made.
Nicely penned! Superb!
Thanks for sharing.
cheers
Kimbob
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Hi Dean,
What a beautiful ship! Your presentation of this poem, with roaring ocean waves and creaking rigging, was fabulous. I wish I could do this, but alas, my computer is as old as the hills.
We have a ghost ship between New Brunswick and Prince Edward Island, in the Northumberland Strait. It has been sighted numerous times over the last 220 years, the sails blazing in flames. Some people have even attempted to rescue the sailors that must be on board. One of the more famous rescue attempts took place in Charlottetown Harbour around 1900. A group of sailors boarded a small row boat and paddled toward the flaming ship to rescue the troubled crew. During their struggle to reach the distressed vessel, the phantom ship completely vanished. A thorough search was immediately carried out by divers, but no shipwreck was ever found. That's how real the sightings have been, to utterly fool men. Most sightings have occurred between September and November, but the ship has appeared in every season. Spooky stuff, eh? Just like your poem.
Here's one such eye-witness report,
"As it came nearer it seemed to lose speed, and as it came opposite our house it stopped still. I said to Fred, "Perhaps they are coming ashore." We got up on the banks to watch. There was no sign of anyone on board and no dory on tow. I can't remember just how long it was, but I think about ten minutes after she stopped I seen smoke rising very slow all over the deck. Then it was only a few minutes I seen men that seemed to come up from below and they were running around the deck every way. Then as they were running around I seen a low flame all over the deck. When the flames started the men climbed up the masts of the vessel. When they was about halfway up the masts the sails caught. All the sails seemed to catch at the same time. I could not see the men any more as the flames hid my view. We watched it until the flames died and everything crumbled to the deck. There was nothing left but the hull on the water, and gradually it seemed to sink lower and finally disappeared as if it gradually filled with water and sunk."
The most recent sighting was in January of 2008 by 17-year-old Mathieu Giguere. It's sometimes called the Chaleur Phantom.
I wondered about that first line though,
"Tormenting vessel, thou beckons me"
Should it be,
(Tormenting vessel, thou dost beckon me) ???
Is this a dream? You find yourself on a ghost ship. It's a nightmare, and you realize when you awaken, you'll never see it again. Your last view before waking is no one standing at the steering wheel. That would scare me out of a nightmare!
The only other thing I can think... you are dying. And the ghost ship has come for you to carry you to Heaven. I remember the 1959 movie, "Darby O'Gill and the Little People", starring Albert Sharpe, Sean Connery, and Janet Munro. Darby plays his fiddle for the king of the leprechauns, King Brian. In the end, a death carriage and a scary banshee make this movie one of the best family dramas ever made.
Nicely penned! Superb!
Thanks for sharing.
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Lastamen
I am loving the concept for this series of poetry based on vivid expressive artwork! This PictaPoem should be an excellent tool for marketing your very expressive and vivid poetry. Well done and good fortunes with this endeavor.
Till the last amen
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I am loving the concept for this series of poetry based on vivid expressive artwork! This PictaPoem should be an excellent tool for marketing your very expressive and vivid poetry. Well done and good fortunes with this endeavor.
Till the last amen
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from seaglass
This is a good metaphor to sum up those mindless times when we seem so confused of direction and options. The nice, even rhyme, ABAB, and a touch of old-world language, gives it an eerie feel. Authors notes are a helpful addition.
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This is a good metaphor to sum up those mindless times when we seem so confused of direction and options. The nice, even rhyme, ABAB, and a touch of old-world language, gives it an eerie feel. Authors notes are a helpful addition.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from judiverse
This is so spooky, especially with the sound effects. Can hear the ship rotting away. Excellent ABAB rhyme and flow. The narrator seems to welcome death, referring to sweet pain and dour heartache. He seems to be out there alone on the ghost ship. This is amazing, and everything comes together beautifully. One feels sorry for the lost soul out there, who sees no hope ahead. judi
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This is so spooky, especially with the sound effects. Can hear the ship rotting away. Excellent ABAB rhyme and flow. The narrator seems to welcome death, referring to sweet pain and dour heartache. He seems to be out there alone on the ghost ship. This is amazing, and everything comes together beautifully. One feels sorry for the lost soul out there, who sees no hope ahead. judi
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
Comment from Drew Delaney
Dean, now how do you do this. I have been struggling all day with a puny 5/7/5 poem and trying to get the picture inside the colour and here you are performing miracles. Please let me in on your secrets. I am so impressed. Just awesome! And I must say, how jealous I am.
Your poem is amazing as well. Loved it! I think I am not smart enough to be here.
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Dean, now how do you do this. I have been struggling all day with a puny 5/7/5 poem and trying to get the picture inside the colour and here you are performing miracles. Please let me in on your secrets. I am so impressed. Just awesome! And I must say, how jealous I am.
Your poem is amazing as well. Loved it! I think I am not smart enough to be here.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014