Jerry Jing-Jang on the Trail
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Comment from amahra
This is a great story in a poem and a very nice contest entry. I really loved the story of Rusty's horse and dog, roundup. Loved the ending; proving good guys always win. In stories, that is.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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This is a great story in a poem and a very nice contest entry. I really loved the story of Rusty's horse and dog, roundup. Loved the ending; proving good guys always win. In stories, that is.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Since this series is mostly for the kids, the good guys have to win. It's lots of fun to write. Thanks for the wonderful review.
Comment from krys123
Cindy;
-a very effectively and impressively written story within a poem that I enjoyed reading because of how well you had written the rhythm, the couplet rhyming and the concept and topic that kept me interested throughout the writing.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Near and notable alliteration's: /"Jerry jing jang"/"Russ the Rustler"/"Spring sunshine"/"Cowboy and cowdog"/"Raven and Roudup"/"Rusty's arm roped"/
-Excellent rhyming couplets were each rhyming word was contingent to the meaning and concept of each line making the rhythm flow smoothly.
-Rhythmic meter was iambic pentameter and Acadians, timing and tempo were all helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-Good luck in the contest. Cindy and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Cindy;
-a very effectively and impressively written story within a poem that I enjoyed reading because of how well you had written the rhythm, the couplet rhyming and the concept and topic that kept me interested throughout the writing.
-Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts from one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
-Near and notable alliteration's: /"Jerry jing jang"/"Russ the Rustler"/"Spring sunshine"/"Cowboy and cowdog"/"Raven and Roudup"/"Rusty's arm roped"/
-Excellent rhyming couplets were each rhyming word was contingent to the meaning and concept of each line making the rhythm flow smoothly.
-Rhythmic meter was iambic pentameter and Acadians, timing and tempo were all helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-Good luck in the contest. Cindy and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the wonderful review and the good wishes for the contest. I try to keep the JJJ story poems simple enough for the kids to read. Glad you found it enjoyable.
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You are so sincerely welcome Cindy
Comment from Javed05
Nice one........I like this .................it is really engaging for the reader......it flows well.....nice rhyming.......language used is great......creates good imagery.....thanks for sharing with us .....
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Nice one........I like this .................it is really engaging for the reader......it flows well.....nice rhyming.......language used is great......creates good imagery.....thanks for sharing with us .....
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Fridayauthor
This is a nice easy to read poem with a delightful tale told to rhyme. Together, it makes a most enjoyable read.
Thank you for this very nice posting.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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This is a nice easy to read poem with a delightful tale told to rhyme. Together, it makes a most enjoyable read.
Thank you for this very nice posting.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Michaelk
Very nice. It's not often I become so engrossed in the story part of a poem. Well done, with colorful names and characters. The cadence, rhyme, along with the characters add up to make this poem a very good candidate to have music set to it. I could be this as a folk song quite easily.
I also like how jing-jang sounds like spurs, adding a sound element to the writing.
Wonderful job.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Very nice. It's not often I become so engrossed in the story part of a poem. Well done, with colorful names and characters. The cadence, rhyme, along with the characters add up to make this poem a very good candidate to have music set to it. I could be this as a folk song quite easily.
I also like how jing-jang sounds like spurs, adding a sound element to the writing.
Wonderful job.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Thanks. I'm glad you found it so engrossing. I wish I had some musical talent to turn JJJ's adventures into songs. Thanks again for a wonderful review.
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a fun Western story in a poem. Great alliteration for characters like Jerry Jing-Jang and Rusty the Rustler. The story was easy to follow through your rhymes and descriptions. Your story poem also engaged my imagination. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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This is a fun Western story in a poem. Great alliteration for characters like Jerry Jing-Jang and Rusty the Rustler. The story was easy to follow through your rhymes and descriptions. Your story poem also engaged my imagination. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the good wishes in the contest and the wonderful reviw.
Comment from MelB
I really enjoyed this western story of Jerry Jing Jang. He set out to catch Rusty and catch him he did. Great rhythm, rhyme, and flow. Tells a great story.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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I really enjoyed this western story of Jerry Jing Jang. He set out to catch Rusty and catch him he did. Great rhythm, rhyme, and flow. Tells a great story.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Ah, but he's never able to hang onto Rusty for long. Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the wonderful review.
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You're welcome. Will there be more tales?
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Sure, and you can find his previous adventures in my portfolio if you're interested.
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I would love to read more!
Comment from dmt1967
This story in a poem was very well told. That little old dog was very bold. I enjoyed reading this old western tale and loved the picture. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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This story in a poem was very well told. That little old dog was very bold. I enjoyed reading this old western tale and loved the picture. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed Jerry Jing-Jang and company.
Comment from kiwijenny
Jerry Jing-Jang then tied him up tight
And with his dog keeping watch slept through night.
Two days later, trembling and pale
Rusty was happy to see the jail.
This reminds me of the cunning of Brer Fox and Brer Rabbit...well penned
God bless
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Jerry Jing-Jang then tied him up tight
And with his dog keeping watch slept through night.
Two days later, trembling and pale
Rusty was happy to see the jail.
This reminds me of the cunning of Brer Fox and Brer Rabbit...well penned
God bless
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Wow, being compared to Brer Fox and Brer Rabbit is high praise. Thanks!