Comment from zanya

Excellent

What an absolute poetic treat for children - and for adults ! A poem filled with sheer magic and imagination -a moment of sheer escapism and a superb pic

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018

Thank you so much. I'm glad you think so.

Comment from Shreya Ramanathan

Excellent

Haha.. Very nicely written. I really liked the finishing touch there. Very simple and understandable children's poem. Children dream of so many things and they live in their own bubble and I liked how you depicted it here. All the best for the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018

Thank you so much. I truly appreciate your time and comments.

Comment from kleck140

Excellent

Wonderful to read such a light hearted poem which
reminded me of Pucket's Pond years ago. Thanks for
the memory. Thank you for sharing your writing.
Keep on writing.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from friartuck

Excellent

I like it! And the kiddies will, too! You have packed all sorts of good things in this one, and I'm sure they will have fun unpacking them. Well rhymed and great meter as well - good luck in the contest with this!

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018

Thank you. Such wonderful comments. I appreciate them very much.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

You wrote this well author. Good to read something humorous sometimes. Catchy narrative, which is ideal for the younger generation...almost like a limerick.

Good imagery.
Good luck with the entry.
My best wishes.
RGstar

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018

Thank you. It's part of a book I've been working on. There are more Wally stories in my portfolio.

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Wally you Wally...you dreamer...weasliy schemer...dreamed it all...
I loved the flow and fall of it...the rhyme kids would love...I like the twist at the end,,,kids will too
Well penned
God bless

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018

Thank you. I'm so glad you think so.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A great children's write and this is worthy of being published in any children's book, a clever well rhymed write and it is a winner for me, thoroughly enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018

Thank you. Wally is in a book in my profile, although unpublished. Thank you for the wonderful comments.

Comment from LeftHandedScribe

Excellent

I wish you the best in this contest. Your entry is as good as I can think of an entry to be for a children's poem. There is vivacity, whimsy, play and a lovely journey. Such a pleasure to read. It calls to mind the tales of Curious George.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018

Thank you, Shauna. It's part of a book. Wally started out as an artist who doesn't paint very well, but keeps trying.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written children's poem with great rhyming choices and a good story to hold the attention of the little ones from beginning to end. They can also learn that everything does not always go the way we plan it all.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Exceptional

Your children's poem contest entry reads smoothly. The meter is great--it bounces along in a fun way. I really like the end rhymes and the internal rhyme that/hat, took/look, cute/suit. Your picture is appropriate, too. It gives readers an idea of what Wally is doing. I like the many things he did. I did not miss the places being named as readers can imagine those for themselves of what they are familiar with. The ending was great. I never expected it, but it works well. Great job and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2018

Thank you so much for the awesome review. I'm happy you like his vacation. Do the chapters show up when you look at it. It doesn't on mine. Hmmmm.

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 02-Sep-2018

yes