Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job, Craig with your cinquain contest entry. I like everything about it--the color scheme, the picture, the message, and the use of 'water related words--shifting sand, turning tide, wash. All of those add to the enjoyment of reading your entry. Also, they all fit with the theme of your poem and how it describes a man's dreams. It is evident that you spent time composing this poem. Great job and best wishes. Jan

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 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2019

Thanks for the lovely comments, Jan. I did play around a bit, swapping words, until I was happy with the way they fitted. Most grateful, Craig