Burch
He fooled them all.40 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
Hehe. This is a rather entertaining piece of poetry dear willie! I like the descreption of the main character and the twist in the end.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a super-dooper squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Hehe. This is a rather entertaining piece of poetry dear willie! I like the descreption of the main character and the twist in the end.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings and a super-dooper squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Rebekka, for the very nice review and stars. Also a big thank you for the "Super-Dooper squeeze.
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My pleasure entirely <3
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Willie,
I enjoy a surprise ending. Here I thought he was a bounty hunter, looking for information. Weary of a long trail ride, all he wanted was a drink of water and directions to the church. He was the new preacher.
The local Wesleyan minister is like that. You can't judge a book by its cover. He rides a motorcycle, and hangs out at a coffee shop. But all the while, he spreads the Word to those who need to hear it. It's quite possibly what Jesus would do if He visited earth today. He'd be talking to the people at Tim Horton's or Starbucks. And look at His disciples.... some were fishermen. Yet they wrote parts of the Bible! It reminds me of a song by Larry Norman so many years ago. It's called "The Outlaw". I hope you'll have a listen, goes right along with your poem.
https://youtu.be/oIlHeYJBjng
Cheers,
Kimbob
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Hi Willie,
I enjoy a surprise ending. Here I thought he was a bounty hunter, looking for information. Weary of a long trail ride, all he wanted was a drink of water and directions to the church. He was the new preacher.
The local Wesleyan minister is like that. You can't judge a book by its cover. He rides a motorcycle, and hangs out at a coffee shop. But all the while, he spreads the Word to those who need to hear it. It's quite possibly what Jesus would do if He visited earth today. He'd be talking to the people at Tim Horton's or Starbucks. And look at His disciples.... some were fishermen. Yet they wrote parts of the Bible! It reminds me of a song by Larry Norman so many years ago. It's called "The Outlaw". I hope you'll have a listen, goes right along with your poem.
https://youtu.be/oIlHeYJBjng
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about judging a person by his appearances can be very dangerous. A preacher who had a rough journey can look like a murderer or a thief. Strangers are usually judged before they say word.
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A very well-written poem about judging a person by his appearances can be very dangerous. A preacher who had a rough journey can look like a murderer or a thief. Strangers are usually judged before they say word.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
Very well done. I love the surprise ending. The rhyme and rhythm were perfect for your piece. The image of the cross with the cowboy worked well. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda
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Very well done. I love the surprise ending. The rhyme and rhythm were perfect for your piece. The image of the cross with the cowboy worked well. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from royowen
That would certainly be a surprise, but with the heroes of the cross they have been anything from the tiny, Iconic Mother Teresa, to St. Francis, Doctor Livingstone to the film star like Billy Graham, a not together with your great work, blessings, Roy
Typo : was (anybodies) guess. Anybody's?
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That would certainly be a surprise, but with the heroes of the cross they have been anything from the tiny, Iconic Mother Teresa, to St. Francis, Doctor Livingstone to the film star like Billy Graham, a not together with your great work, blessings, Roy
Typo : was (anybodies) guess. Anybody's?
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Boy, does this set a stage for an interesting scene. Here the townfolk were convinced they had a real hired assassin, or worse, and it turned out it was the preacher, even though he gave them a clue by ordering water instead of liquor. Nice share.
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Boy, does this set a stage for an interesting scene. Here the townfolk were convinced they had a real hired assassin, or worse, and it turned out it was the preacher, even though he gave them a clue by ordering water instead of liquor. Nice share.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Burch", is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. With craft and well-honed skill this talented poet has told it as it is. To me, this is a six, but sadly I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"Burch", is an exceptionally well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. With craft and well-honed skill this talented poet has told it as it is. To me, this is a six, but sadly I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from Vanna1
Interesting theme. I like the description of this guy, rugged and then we find out he is not a killer. Witty and a good image to go with it. Thanks for sharing.
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Interesting theme. I like the description of this guy, rugged and then we find out he is not a killer. Witty and a good image to go with it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great example of what your notes say about not judging a book by its cover. Your words crate great imagery. I could see this cowboy as he sauntered up to the bar with all eyes on him. The ending is great. He proved them all wrong. Your lines flow smoothly with good rhymes and great imagery. The art pairs perfectly with your well thought out story in a poem.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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This is a great example of what your notes say about not judging a book by its cover. Your words crate great imagery. I could see this cowboy as he sauntered up to the bar with all eyes on him. The ending is great. He proved them all wrong. Your lines flow smoothly with good rhymes and great imagery. The art pairs perfectly with your well thought out story in a poem.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Willie
Good work.
Your wording and how you described the stranger was perfect
The twist at the end was the perfect lesson in prejudging
Enjoyed reading
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Willie
Good work.
Your wording and how you described the stranger was perfect
The twist at the end was the perfect lesson in prejudging
Enjoyed reading
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020