Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Twenty Below with Snow"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was brilliant! I loved the repeating end line, it made it an enjoyable read. I felt warm just reading about the log fire, and the extra blankets, all nice and cosy. But, I did laugh at the mouse part, because that is exactly what my late husband did when a mouse ran across out living room floor, he didn't cuddle up, he stood on the chair! LOL It was funnier because I was there with him. Well done, I really enjoyed this poem and the memory it brought back! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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That was brilliant! I loved the repeating end line, it made it an enjoyable read. I felt warm just reading about the log fire, and the extra blankets, all nice and cosy. But, I did laugh at the mouse part, because that is exactly what my late husband did when a mouse ran across out living room floor, he didn't cuddle up, he stood on the chair! LOL It was funnier because I was there with him. Well done, I really enjoyed this poem and the memory it brought back! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Sandra, LOL, I can sit here and even see the scene unfold...
Comment from rspoet
Hello JRL,
You appear have done the form very well
with solid exact and near rhymes.
You described the ways to deal with the cold winter nicely,
the best is the warm fire and snuggling up.
Best wishes to you and hope for an early spring.
Robert
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Hello JRL,
You appear have done the form very well
with solid exact and near rhymes.
You described the ways to deal with the cold winter nicely,
the best is the warm fire and snuggling up.
Best wishes to you and hope for an early spring.
Robert
Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Robert, thank you, as always for your review and comments. We have had such a warm winter so far in western NC. I dread the next eight weeks because we will get a pay-back. It never fails!
Comment from jusylee72
socks are the greatest comfort in the world when it is so cold and your toesies froze. Enjoyed and can recognize the warmth in side your own house as you wrote these words. God Bless, stay warm
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socks are the greatest comfort in the world when it is so cold and your toesies froze. Enjoyed and can recognize the warmth in side your own house as you wrote these words. God Bless, stay warm
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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Staying warm, I write you my sincere appreciation for your review and comments.
Comment from June Sargent
You did very well with the challenge! I found it difficult at first and finally got the hang of it. It's been cold here, so I can relate to this piece.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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You did very well with the challenge! I found it difficult at first and finally got the hang of it. It's been cold here, so I can relate to this piece.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2020
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June thank you, bundle and hot lattes are the ticket...
Comment from Ogden
An old-fashioned sounding poem (penned I'm guessing, by an old-fashioned gal - my apologies if you're a guy).
("...all your worth..." in the second stanza should be "all you're worth.")
Stay out of the weather, and keep your toes warm,
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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An old-fashioned sounding poem (penned I'm guessing, by an old-fashioned gal - my apologies if you're a guy).
("...all your worth..." in the second stanza should be "all you're worth.")
Stay out of the weather, and keep your toes warm,
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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Caught it...thank you!
Comment from rjuselius
Ã?aawwwee! This is such a sweetheart piece of poetry dear jlr! Indeed, a home means warmth and safety. It is an absolutely awful thing that even Finland has now beggars without homes.
Thank you for sharing!
blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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Ã?aawwwee! This is such a sweetheart piece of poetry dear jlr! Indeed, a home means warmth and safety. It is an absolutely awful thing that even Finland has now beggars without homes.
Thank you for sharing!
blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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Smiling back with great appreciation! Have an awesome weekend!
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good entry for this potlatch. It gives good advice about what to do in the event of a blizzard or just extremely cold weather.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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This is a good entry for this potlatch. It gives good advice about what to do in the event of a blizzard or just extremely cold weather.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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Joan, thank you much!
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No problem, JLR.
Joan
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I regret that I am out of sixes! I LOVE THIS. (esp the bit about taking care of the mice! - a personal phobia!) I am NOT a winter fan, but when it hits hard, this is a perfect description of how I want to weather it. This is a lovely piece and you should not change one bit of it ever! Perfection!
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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I regret that I am out of sixes! I LOVE THIS. (esp the bit about taking care of the mice! - a personal phobia!) I am NOT a winter fan, but when it hits hard, this is a perfect description of how I want to weather it. This is a lovely piece and you should not change one bit of it ever! Perfection!
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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Wendy, thank you for the virtual six!
Comment from Mame
What a great picture you have drawn in words to accompany snow illustration. I like the way the words tumble out with a gentle rhythm. You have certainly created a story of 'comfort' amidst the snow and ice - effective repeat of 'socks on toes'. With bushfires raging in Australia at present it is hard to imagine such an icy image. Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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What a great picture you have drawn in words to accompany snow illustration. I like the way the words tumble out with a gentle rhythm. You have certainly created a story of 'comfort' amidst the snow and ice - effective repeat of 'socks on toes'. With bushfires raging in Australia at present it is hard to imagine such an icy image. Well done!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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Mame, thank you for the review - I do send prayers to all of Australians that theu are all stay safe and rains come soon.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Cole's rhythm on how-to beat the cold weather and snowy conditions when the days are too short and the nights too long it's hard to keep dry and warm without a fire burning.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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A very well-written Cole's rhythm on how-to beat the cold weather and snowy conditions when the days are too short and the nights too long it's hard to keep dry and warm without a fire burning.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2020
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Sandra, thank you!