Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Will my legacy be undone?"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
A well-constructed Kyrielle that reflects the thoughts of the retiring executive and what his legacy will be .... if any. Best advice: don't worry about it and go have a vacation (and perhaps a drink)! ;) LOL! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
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A well-constructed Kyrielle that reflects the thoughts of the retiring executive and what his legacy will be .... if any. Best advice: don't worry about it and go have a vacation (and perhaps a drink)! ;) LOL! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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Yvette, I am and will do, LOL!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Words that are never unspoken relates to someone speaking from the heart. It's always best to speak the truth without convicting the person. It's easy to point the finger or blame without hearing two sides of the story.
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Words that are never unspoken relates to someone speaking from the heart. It's always best to speak the truth without convicting the person. It's easy to point the finger or blame without hearing two sides of the story.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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Thanks for reviewing Rosemary.
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Beautiful Kyrielle, perfect structure! It is such a worry that values are left behind by us, but I fear to many young people are not being taught values. Too much violence which speaks of a blatant disregard for life. It boggles my mind how easily they take another's life. Manners also are sliding by the wayside, no more thank you's and please's. Good luck in this contest! xoxo
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Beautiful Kyrielle, perfect structure! It is such a worry that values are left behind by us, but I fear to many young people are not being taught values. Too much violence which speaks of a blatant disregard for life. It boggles my mind how easily they take another's life. Manners also are sliding by the wayside, no more thank you's and please's. Good luck in this contest! xoxo
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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Diana, thank you! I appreciate the good wishes.
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very welcome!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I love that line that you repeat throughout this. What's said can never be unspoken. When words pass from our lips into the free air, then, there is no going back. The impact whether good or bad has been released. I love the powerful message of this and enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
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I love that line that you repeat throughout this. What's said can never be unspoken. When words pass from our lips into the free air, then, there is no going back. The impact whether good or bad has been released. I love the powerful message of this and enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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Jeffery, thank you, much, my friend!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello anon, this is a good Kyrielle, well written in reflective mode. The repeated line throughout are so true. Once we have spoken words can't be erased. In a situation of power this can have real negative effect. A person does the best he can under certain circumstances. An interesting stanza -
Over years, at my direction
paths taken by my suggestions,
of sane reasoning for greed's needs.
What said can ne'er be unspoken!........ greed's needs. Interesting words. I've heard it said -
'"When morality comes up against profit, it is seldom that profit loses." -
You wrote an interesting poem and I enjoyed the read. Regards Dorothy
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Hello anon, this is a good Kyrielle, well written in reflective mode. The repeated line throughout are so true. Once we have spoken words can't be erased. In a situation of power this can have real negative effect. A person does the best he can under certain circumstances. An interesting stanza -
Over years, at my direction
paths taken by my suggestions,
of sane reasoning for greed's needs.
What said can ne'er be unspoken!........ greed's needs. Interesting words. I've heard it said -
'"When morality comes up against profit, it is seldom that profit loses." -
You wrote an interesting poem and I enjoyed the read. Regards Dorothy
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Dorothy, I very much appreciate your comments! Thank you, so much!
Comment from djeckert
a great write that reminds us of the power of our words and the legacy it leaves, both positive and negative. very nice. GOD surely blesses Good luck to you in the contest.
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a great write that reminds us of the power of our words and the legacy it leaves, both positive and negative. very nice. GOD surely blesses Good luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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Wow! I am so grateful to you for the six-star review. Thank you for the good wishes.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello unknown author
with your kyrielle poem,
I'm not sure what or whom that you are referring to, but I can see the structure of your kyrielle is excellent
formatting.
Gert
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Hello unknown author
with your kyrielle poem,
I'm not sure what or whom that you are referring to, but I can see the structure of your kyrielle is excellent
formatting.
Gert
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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Gert, thank you
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Hello to who, your are welcome.
Gert
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a very nice entry for the Write a Kyrielle writing prompt.
The well rhymed verse reads smoothly while conforming to the structure.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is a very nice entry for the Write a Kyrielle writing prompt.
The well rhymed verse reads smoothly while conforming to the structure.
Well done and I wish you luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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Sharon, thank you your comments are so very validating.
Comment from Miranda Langston
this is a very good piece with good flow, but I couldn't really pick out your rhyme scheme. also, i did notice 1 SPAG - 'ner (ne'er)
other than that, it's amazing. keep up the great work :)
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this is a very good piece with good flow, but I couldn't really pick out your rhyme scheme. also, i did notice 1 SPAG - 'ner (ne'er)
other than that, it's amazing. keep up the great work :)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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Miranda, yikes and corrected, mega thank you!
Comment from May 1
Although I am unfamiliar with this type of poetry, I really like what you have written. My favorite part is the conclusion of your poem. All in all a fun poem to read.
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Although I am unfamiliar with this type of poetry, I really like what you have written. My favorite part is the conclusion of your poem. All in all a fun poem to read.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2020
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May, thank you!