Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Susan Larson
This is so stirring and reflective of what is happening and so opposite of what Martin Lutherking Jr. dreamed of. Why is no one ever quoting him. Hope you have other venues for this poem so you can it out there! You can pretend this is seven stars.*******
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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This is so stirring and reflective of what is happening and so opposite of what Martin Lutherking Jr. dreamed of. Why is no one ever quoting him. Hope you have other venues for this poem so you can it out there! You can pretend this is seven stars.*******
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Susa,, I am so grateful for this validation! I am sick and tired of being sick and tired....my rant is about the lack of "voices heard" from leaders of all colors and all backgrounds, not standing up to Marxist people who hate America represents with all of our shortcomings, the USA still beats living under a different flag.
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I agree, but you have to wonder how many death threats are against these leaders. And no matter what you say, they accuse you of being racist. I RARELY get political on Facebook, but I share a picture of a little white girl and little Japanese girl with the QUESTION, NOY STATEMENT, "If she should apologize for slavery, then should she apologize for Pearl Harbor." I was bombarded with comments that I was a racist. So I've wondered. If we all signed a notarized statement to be put on file in the national archives that we're sorry for slavery, would that end it all?
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It just registered with me that your title paraphrases 2 Corinthians 4: 8-9 () : )
Comment from ElPoetry001
Their plan is to attack history and to try to erase it.
They are selective in their targets, and gloss over people that were KKK, touching them on the shoulder and forgiving them, applying "...the transformative power of this nation." [NAACP statement as to Senator Robert Byrd].
If black police are to be killed and burned like bacon, then All Black Lives Matter is not their goal.
America is a Phoenix and is poised to strike back.
Although they have abandoned Dr. Martin Luther king, they cannot avoid his message.
"...but there is something I must say to my people who stand on the warm threshold which leads into the palace of justice. In the process of getting our rightful place we must no be guilty of wrongful deeds. Let us not seek to satisfy our thirst for freedom by drinking from the cup of bitterness and hatred."
I have a dream by Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr; August 28, 1963
Stay well.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Their plan is to attack history and to try to erase it.
They are selective in their targets, and gloss over people that were KKK, touching them on the shoulder and forgiving them, applying "...the transformative power of this nation." [NAACP statement as to Senator Robert Byrd].
If black police are to be killed and burned like bacon, then All Black Lives Matter is not their goal.
America is a Phoenix and is poised to strike back.
Although they have abandoned Dr. Martin Luther king, they cannot avoid his message.
"...but there is something I must say to my people who stand on the warm threshold which leads into the palace of justice. In the process of getting our rightful place we must no be guilty of wrongful deeds. Let us not seek to satisfy our thirst for freedom by drinking from the cup of bitterness and hatred."
I have a dream by Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr; August 28, 1963
Stay well.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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I was 13 years old, I remember his speech as though it was yesterday.
We have come so far, and have so far to yet to go, sadly our history and over 200 other countries can't erase slavery from its history and there is always going to be 1 or 2% on all sides who will never "get it" but that doesn't mean bad behavior should not be put in check!
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Stay well
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Stay well
Comment from amada
This is a very intensee read. Very provocative as well in these times of turmoil. For sure, it pained me to see that tattered flag. Like most of us, its hurting as well.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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This is a very intensee read. Very provocative as well in these times of turmoil. For sure, it pained me to see that tattered flag. Like most of us, its hurting as well.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Amada, I was 13 years old, I remember his speech as though it was yesterday.
We have come so far, and have so far to yet to go, sadly our history and over 200 other countries can't erase slavery from its history and there is always going to be 1 or 2% on all sides who will never "get it" but that doesn't mean bad behavior should not be put in check!
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello JLR,
Nice piece of Commentary and Philosophy Poetry meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the present scenario prevalent in the US.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the poem.
LAUDABLE Attempt!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hello JLR,
Nice piece of Commentary and Philosophy Poetry meeting the desired norms, having impressive phraseology, enchanting flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the present scenario prevalent in the US.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the poem.
LAUDABLE Attempt!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Thank you
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JLR, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
A wonderful poem and a very suitable image to match. A great read. Well-done. You well-executed within the laid out rules for the contest.
My very best wishes in this regard.
Blessings and good health.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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A wonderful poem and a very suitable image to match. A great read. Well-done. You well-executed within the laid out rules for the contest.
My very best wishes in this regard.
Blessings and good health.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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precious, thank you.
Comment from Vanna1
I could feel the intensity you were trying to portray. However you had one line that was a mouthful. It was hard to see what was the stand or cause of the speaker. But still it is fiery so it has great potential. Happy writing!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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I could feel the intensity you were trying to portray. However you had one line that was a mouthful. It was hard to see what was the stand or cause of the speaker. But still it is fiery so it has great potential. Happy writing!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Vsnna thanks
Comment from Jacob David Collins
What your poem highlights is how crazy things in the world have become. We're experiencing the same hatred here in the UK; I fully support equality for all, but unfortunately history can't be changed. I thought this was a well written piece. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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What your poem highlights is how crazy things in the world have become. We're experiencing the same hatred here in the UK; I fully support equality for all, but unfortunately history can't be changed. I thought this was a well written piece. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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JAcob, thanks much, sad but true nonetheless.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Well said!! It makes me physically ill to see them burning our flag! The flag that stands for freedom and liberty for all! They need to get over it!!!
I believe that anyone burning the flag should go to jail!! Good job!
Patty
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Well said!! It makes me physically ill to see them burning our flag! The flag that stands for freedom and liberty for all! They need to get over it!!!
I believe that anyone burning the flag should go to jail!! Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Patty, I am right in lock step with that sentiment.
Comment from Aussie
Anger becomes hate and hate will breed among hateful attitudes. America the superpower is learning a lesson the hard way. All countries are suffering. The herd mentality will not solve your problems. Break the rules and no one rules - Trump has realized that much.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Anger becomes hate and hate will breed among hateful attitudes. America the superpower is learning a lesson the hard way. All countries are suffering. The herd mentality will not solve your problems. Break the rules and no one rules - Trump has realized that much.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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My Aussie you are so true! You folks seem to have the most calm going around the gobe.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is an interesting idea for the 20 line poem, contest.
These are definitely tumultuous times we are living in around the world and the marginalized are raising their voices to be heard once again.
Just a couple of points with your poem
This line: Is it time to write ... has five words and it should be four.
And your three central lines from: to say, "I hate and ending with ... so no one can all have 10 words, so one will need to be changed.
Also your author note is missing the number 6 in the descending list.
Canadians are in the process of statue toppling too as are other countries so it seems to be a global phenomenon.
Excellent entry into the contest celebrating FanStory's twentieth anniversary and I wish you great luck with the voters.
Gloria
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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This is an interesting idea for the 20 line poem, contest.
These are definitely tumultuous times we are living in around the world and the marginalized are raising their voices to be heard once again.
Just a couple of points with your poem
This line: Is it time to write ... has five words and it should be four.
And your three central lines from: to say, "I hate and ending with ... so no one can all have 10 words, so one will need to be changed.
Also your author note is missing the number 6 in the descending list.
Canadians are in the process of statue toppling too as are other countries so it seems to be a global phenomenon.
Excellent entry into the contest celebrating FanStory's twentieth anniversary and I wish you great luck with the voters.
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Gloria good catch thanks much!