Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Bill Schott
This twenty-five syllable poem, Reflecting, has the proper syllable count and brings the reader to the mountains to reminisce how life has changed or stayed the same.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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This twenty-five syllable poem, Reflecting, has the proper syllable count and brings the reader to the mountains to reminisce how life has changed or stayed the same.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Bill, thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
taking time to reflect catching my reflection
Reflecting
Hello, anonymous,
I really like your poem. It's a great entry for the 25 Syllable Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. The words ...reflection,
And reflecting...are very similar and close together, I suggest changing to...Ruminating...instead of reflecting. Just a thought.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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taking time to reflect catching my reflection
Reflecting
Hello, anonymous,
I really like your poem. It's a great entry for the 25 Syllable Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. The words ...reflection,
And reflecting...are very similar and close together, I suggest changing to...Ruminating...instead of reflecting. Just a thought.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Gypsy, I always thank you for your time invested to read, review and comment on my poems. In this case I am doing some word play with
photo and the use of reflection and reflecting. How many times in out lives have we witnessed seeing something that is reflected back to use like looking into a mirror that then causes us to reflect on what we might have just said or the way in which we said it or just a situation that we seem to have had perhaps in a prior sitting or stretching another lifetime...
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O hi, okay, I see that. No problem. It was just a suggestion. Good job.
Comment from Coco Jane
Beautiful poem and picture. Makes a reader want to reflect too.
Maybe "I still often stand" or "I quite often stand" or "I can often stand." Just a different way to look at it.
God luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Beautiful poem and picture. Makes a reader want to reflect too.
Maybe "I still often stand" or "I quite often stand" or "I can often stand." Just a different way to look at it.
God luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Coco Jane, thank you for your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Clever play on the dual meaning of reflection (when I reflect on my reflection I reminisce of bygone days when I didn't look so damned old. Nice work. Good luck. Cheers. LIZ
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Clever play on the dual meaning of reflection (when I reflect on my reflection I reminisce of bygone days when I didn't look so damned old. Nice work. Good luck. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Liz, smiling back! Thank you for your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Wonderful witness to reflect on one's past and ponder on your present.
I like your photo. The mountains are peaceful. I like to hike with my daughters in Colorado. flylikeaneagle
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Wonderful witness to reflect on one's past and ponder on your present.
I like your photo. The mountains are peaceful. I like to hike with my daughters in Colorado. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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What wonderful vistas you do get to see and reflect upon...
Comment from mermaids
There is a feel of being human in your words. How often we reflect on bygone times, a human trait usually. You did well with the use of twenty-five syllables. I also like the image of standing in a mountain stream.
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There is a feel of being human in your words. How often we reflect on bygone times, a human trait usually. You did well with the use of twenty-five syllables. I also like the image of standing in a mountain stream.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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mermaids, thank you for your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from LisaMay
What a lovely location to pause and ponder awhile. You've used the double meaning of reflection well in your poem. Often we see the external image of ourselves, which gives rise to an internal assessment of our lives... the further along in our life journey the more we have to look back on. Our lives are made up of bygone days.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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What a lovely location to pause and ponder awhile. You've used the double meaning of reflection well in your poem. Often we see the external image of ourselves, which gives rise to an internal assessment of our lives... the further along in our life journey the more we have to look back on. Our lives are made up of bygone days.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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LisaMay, thank you for your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from estory
The image of the stream has lots of depth to it. You get a sense of time someone standing still and also one of time passing. Its a reflective moment, almost like a mirror image, but the stream also has that element of movement to it. estory
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The image of the stream has lots of depth to it. You get a sense of time someone standing still and also one of time passing. Its a reflective moment, almost like a mirror image, but the stream also has that element of movement to it. estory
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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estory, I love the depth of your thinking! Thank you for your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from MissMerri
I think your beautiful poem is a perfect match for the amazing picture. It reminds me of my Truckee roots, so of course I was drawn to it. The wording of your short poem is so pleasing to the ear. There is much assonance and just enough consonance to make it aesthetically poetic but not overdone. I liked the double use of the word "reflect" with its two meanings. This is very nice. The picture, I wish I could frame. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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I think your beautiful poem is a perfect match for the amazing picture. It reminds me of my Truckee roots, so of course I was drawn to it. The wording of your short poem is so pleasing to the ear. There is much assonance and just enough consonance to make it aesthetically poetic but not overdone. I liked the double use of the word "reflect" with its two meanings. This is very nice. The picture, I wish I could frame. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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MissMeri, I have through Truckee and you are so right! Thank you for your time invested in reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello unknown author of the man standing on a rock and a man sees reflection of himself in a quite stream. I like the last two lines that you wrote--
while reflecting upon
bygone days...
Gert
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Hello unknown author of the man standing on a rock and a man sees reflection of himself in a quite stream. I like the last two lines that you wrote--
while reflecting upon
bygone days...
Gert
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Gert, I am beyond words of thanks for this wonderful six-star validation on this poem. Thank you!
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You are so welcome
Gert
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You are welcome
Gert
I wonder if you Contact me and tell me your web name, so I can review your writings.
Gert
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Hello Gert, thank you for asking...my web nom d plume is JLR
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Thank you
Gert