Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "How I Write Free Verse"Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from Margaret Bednar
"words creating an ebb and flow,
a tension, pulling the string taut on a longbow,".. NICE!
Following is my "FanStory" due diligence and is given as suggestions.
first stanza - I suggest you don't need the "and" after head AND it is a "weak" word with which to end a poetic return line
I'd return the line after trickles, have "like" begin next line.
coffee cup brimming (I'd lose the "a")
my well-worn Websters near, (lose the "my" and change: Webster's
"I leave the words to mature" ... nothing wrong with the word mature, but I'm wondering - since you brought up cooking above would "marinate" be a word to consider?
"wanting the verse to subtly suck you in."... not sure I like this - something about flavors blending or whatever flavors do... ?
Overall, an enjoyable free werse approach to how you write poetry!
Word images, like bloodred when read, (do you need "like"?)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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"words creating an ebb and flow,
a tension, pulling the string taut on a longbow,".. NICE!
Following is my "FanStory" due diligence and is given as suggestions.
first stanza - I suggest you don't need the "and" after head AND it is a "weak" word with which to end a poetic return line
I'd return the line after trickles, have "like" begin next line.
coffee cup brimming (I'd lose the "a")
my well-worn Websters near, (lose the "my" and change: Webster's
"I leave the words to mature" ... nothing wrong with the word mature, but I'm wondering - since you brought up cooking above would "marinate" be a word to consider?
"wanting the verse to subtly suck you in."... not sure I like this - something about flavors blending or whatever flavors do... ?
Overall, an enjoyable free werse approach to how you write poetry!
Word images, like bloodred when read, (do you need "like"?)
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Margaret, a very solid list of suggestions from which I extracted some valuable edits. Tank you.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
How I Write Free Verse
Hello, anonymous,
Interesting poem about the method you use to write free verse.
A quiet place, daylight and warmth, memories and emotion, coffee, Webster, Ying Yang, pause, poetic device, assonance, onomatopoeia, etc
Great entry for the
Writing Poetry contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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How I Write Free Verse
Hello, anonymous,
Interesting poem about the method you use to write free verse.
A quiet place, daylight and warmth, memories and emotion, coffee, Webster, Ying Yang, pause, poetic device, assonance, onomatopoeia, etc
Great entry for the
Writing Poetry contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the strong validation.
Comment from Mark Valentine
I think the sequence of write something - let it sit - go back and polish - is common to most writers. As is your wonderfully alliterative sentence about having your coffee cup brimming with your well worn Webster's near.
I don't write a lot of free verse myself, so I appreciated your focus on letting images/feelings/memories percolate up. I like how you describe imagining how the reader will experience it - adding a pause here or there to le the reader absorb.
A very cool window into your world - good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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I think the sequence of write something - let it sit - go back and polish - is common to most writers. As is your wonderfully alliterative sentence about having your coffee cup brimming with your well worn Webster's near.
I don't write a lot of free verse myself, so I appreciated your focus on letting images/feelings/memories percolate up. I like how you describe imagining how the reader will experience it - adding a pause here or there to le the reader absorb.
A very cool window into your world - good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Mark thanks very much for your review and comments.
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is an exceptional poem that you penned here. The picture accompanying this is absolutely perfect. The poem flows effortlessly as well as any rhyming poem, that's quite an achievement. Best of luck in the contest. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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This is an exceptional poem that you penned here. The picture accompanying this is absolutely perfect. The poem flows effortlessly as well as any rhyming poem, that's quite an achievement. Best of luck in the contest. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Bobby, I am so grateful for your strong validation on this free verse entry. I thank you very much for this six-star review!
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, How I Write Free Verse, is nicely woven to model the effects you speak of as you deftly build this DIY about the deliberate methodology of creating a free verse.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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This free verse, How I Write Free Verse, is nicely woven to model the effects you speak of as you deftly build this DIY about the deliberate methodology of creating a free verse.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thanks much for your review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem about the ritual you follow to write your poetry. I also find early mornings the best time to be creative and the words come much easier.
Typo
nterwoven(interwoven) like delicate lace
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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A very well-written free verse poem about the ritual you follow to write your poetry. I also find early mornings the best time to be creative and the words come much easier.
Typo
nterwoven(interwoven) like delicate lace
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Goodness gracious... Nice catch. Thanks!
Comment from Barbaraj1
This is an excellent poem. Writing a poem to you is like serving a feast.
You add a bit of this and a bit of that. Then you ask yourself if it is good
enough to severe to me. My answer is a big Yes.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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This is an excellent poem. Writing a poem to you is like serving a feast.
You add a bit of this and a bit of that. Then you ask yourself if it is good
enough to severe to me. My answer is a big Yes.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Barbara thank you for your time taken to review my free verse poem.
Comment from victor 66
This is well written, to the point and I can understand it. Poetry, especially free verse, can give your emotions an amazing outlet and release. Positive and happy emotions can even get better when writing poetry. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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This is well written, to the point and I can understand it. Poetry, especially free verse, can give your emotions an amazing outlet and release. Positive and happy emotions can even get better when writing poetry. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Victor, I appreciate your thoughtful comments.
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You are most welcome, and it was my pleasure.
Comment from Earl Corp
It's interesting to get an insight into how someone writes free verse poetry, since I only write rhyming poetry. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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It's interesting to get an insight into how someone writes free verse poetry, since I only write rhyming poetry. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Earl I appreciate your input!
Comment from Markie Doczi
Excellent writing! Very descriptive, it answers the contest question and explains it well. '...well worn Websters...', '...spiraling upward...' you have many good turns of phrase.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Excellent writing! Very descriptive, it answers the contest question and explains it well. '...well worn Websters...', '...spiraling upward...' you have many good turns of phrase.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Smiling back, I appreciate your kind comments.