Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 59 "Frolicking "Musings of an old man -2020
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Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is another wonderful snowy story. I can feel your excitement and joy of playing in the snow as a child or an adult. There is just something special about the once a year, white, freezing cold blanket of snow.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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This is another wonderful snowy story. I can feel your excitement and joy of playing in the snow as a child or an adult. There is just something special about the once a year, white, freezing cold blanket of snow.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Rebecca, thank you!
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, how many writing clubs have you joined?
It seems to me I have spent the morning reviewing the wonderful poems that you have posted for at least the Free Versers and this one.
I love how you have written this one post as if you were a child, and perhaps you are, inside.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Dear JLR, how many writing clubs have you joined?
It seems to me I have spent the morning reviewing the wonderful poems that you have posted for at least the Free Versers and this one.
I love how you have written this one post as if you were a child, and perhaps you are, inside.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Hi dear friend, just three clubs... and I do let my child out to play sometimes.
Comment from George Santhosh
As someone who's never seen snow in person, I'm jealous. I want to wear woolens, sled down slopes, and make snow angels too.
Thanks for sharing,
George
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As someone who's never seen snow in person, I'm jealous. I want to wear woolens, sled down slopes, and make snow angels too.
Thanks for sharing,
George
Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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George, thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem's skipping, irregular rhythm and internal rhymes here and there is a great way to portray the energetic excitement of a snow day for play through a child's eyes.
A minor correction:
hoping I had my Angel wings sown (sewn) on! ('sown' is about planting crops.)
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Your poem's skipping, irregular rhythm and internal rhymes here and there is a great way to portray the energetic excitement of a snow day for play through a child's eyes.
A minor correction:
hoping I had my Angel wings sown (sewn) on! ('sown' is about planting crops.)
Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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LisaMay, the intention of this was from the eyes of a frolicking child.
Comment from papa55mike
I remember those deep snows during my childhood in Ohio. Now, I live in Tennessee, where we barely get a flake. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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I remember those deep snows during my childhood in Ohio. Now, I live in Tennessee, where we barely get a flake. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Mike we were tougher in the days, I think. Couldn?t stay out of doors in the cold and snow too long now. LOL.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Frolicking, is a terrific look at snow hill fun with other youth on an otherwise gentle, passive slope. The thrill of sliding fast down the icy paths brings young hearts to a moment of flight. Fun to read.
I found this:
trill out a loud
(a) shrill shriek
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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This poem, Frolicking, is a terrific look at snow hill fun with other youth on an otherwise gentle, passive slope. The thrill of sliding fast down the icy paths brings young hearts to a moment of flight. Fun to read.
I found this:
trill out a loud
(a) shrill shriek
Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Good catch Bill, thank you...
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This would be just the thing to do during this pandemic if we had enough snow. Right now we don't here in Toronto. So your free verse with its good imagery and alliteration spells out the fun we may have soon. Not me though, I'm too old.
Ralf
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This would be just the thing to do during this pandemic if we had enough snow. Right now we don't here in Toronto. So your free verse with its good imagery and alliteration spells out the fun we may have soon. Not me though, I'm too old.
Ralf
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Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
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Ralf, we both are beyond those tempting days of playing to utter exhaustion.
Comment from royowen
Snow newly fallen has always been a source of joy, an it sparks these great free style rhetoric that makes entertaining and all worthwhile my friend, beautifully written Jim, great descriptive narrative and a lovely dispositional rendering, well done, blessings Roy
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Snow newly fallen has always been a source of joy, an it sparks these great free style rhetoric that makes entertaining and all worthwhile my friend, beautifully written Jim, great descriptive narrative and a lovely dispositional rendering, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Thank you 🙏 I appreciate your reviews and comments.
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