The Gift
A nursing home Christmas76 total reviews
Comment from ahamranji
This is an awesome poem written in a splendid flow that rhymes so well. Yes, your did give and receive God's greatest gift that Christmas day.
Best wishes and regards. God bless.
R Jayachandran
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
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This is an awesome poem written in a splendid flow that rhymes so well. Yes, your did give and receive God's greatest gift that Christmas day.
Best wishes and regards. God bless.
R Jayachandran
Comment Written 17-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
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Thanks for the review. A true story with some embellishment.
Comment from jaded831
Moving, the rhyme gave your poem a light touch, the combination set a nice tone. It's theme, we should all take away a lesson, we are all in this world together. Who knows if they played a part long ago as well.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
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Moving, the rhyme gave your poem a light touch, the combination set a nice tone. It's theme, we should all take away a lesson, we are all in this world together. Who knows if they played a part long ago as well.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Carolyn. You are right. We should all take a lesson.
Comment from dragonpoet
Paul,
This story flows well and speeds by because of the shorter lines and the easy aabb rhyme scheme. Those boys do a wonderful thing for that old lady to take her loneliness away and let her remember better days. It is a random act of kindness and a grace for all of them.
I think what the last stanza says is a defininte fact.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Merry Christmas
Joan
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Paul,
This story flows well and speeds by because of the shorter lines and the easy aabb rhyme scheme. Those boys do a wonderful thing for that old lady to take her loneliness away and let her remember better days. It is a random act of kindness and a grace for all of them.
I think what the last stanza says is a defininte fact.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Merry Christmas
Joan
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Joan. That old lady was my mother, and the boys were my grandsons. I embellished a little.
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Is a story worth telling an embellishing. It is good when family help each other in this way.
Joan
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Is a story worth telling an embellishing. It is good when family help each other in this way.
Joan
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' The Gift ' , is an exceptionally well-written and heart wrenching piece. There are tears in my eyes as I write this. It was a privilege to read and review this talented poet's work. To me this is a true six. Bless you and thank you.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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' The Gift ' , is an exceptionally well-written and heart wrenching piece. There are tears in my eyes as I write this. It was a privilege to read and review this talented poet's work. To me this is a true six. Bless you and thank you.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Duchess. I had tears in my eyes when I wrote it. The lady was my mother.
Paul, you're very welcome. Take care and have a good week end.
Bless you,
the Duchess
Comment from royowen
Oh yes Paul, the greatest gift we can bestow on people is the one thing we can never never redeem, on can earn money, ot be given an unexpected and thoughtful gift, but time, that's different, especially for these old people, hang on, I'm becoming one of them. Beautifully and compassionately written Paul, an skilful and well written piece, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Oh yes Paul, the greatest gift we can bestow on people is the one thing we can never never redeem, on can earn money, ot be given an unexpected and thoughtful gift, but time, that's different, especially for these old people, hang on, I'm becoming one of them. Beautifully and compassionately written Paul, an skilful and well written piece, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Roy. Always good to hear from you.
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Most welcome
Comment from Boogienights
This is absolutely beautiful and well written. I worked many years in a nursing home and know the loneliness that exists in those facilities. This poem really touched my heart, thanks for sharing with us. :)
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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This is absolutely beautiful and well written. I worked many years in a nursing home and know the loneliness that exists in those facilities. This poem really touched my heart, thanks for sharing with us. :)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Boogie. This was real. The boys are my grandsons, and the lady was my mother. I added a little, here and there.
Comment from TPAC
You go. The poem structuring is very strong, loving the poetic jingle throughout its read. A delighting, touching story capturing the true spirit of all holidays. This is my given opinion.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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You go. The poem structuring is very strong, loving the poetic jingle throughout its read. A delighting, touching story capturing the true spirit of all holidays. This is my given opinion.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thanks for the review. A true story about my grandsons, my mother and me, with a little embellishment.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
This is a beautifully penned heart-warming story in poetic about visiting a lady in a nursing home. You have created wonderful imagery with descriptive narration. Very well done. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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This is a beautifully penned heart-warming story in poetic about visiting a lady in a nursing home. You have created wonderful imagery with descriptive narration. Very well done. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Seshadri. A true story with some drama added.
Comment from RGstar
You did really well here. Short lines of reality in which many will, have and indeed, if not, will have someone near that can relate to this. This time of year we think even more of this kind of reality, a reality that awaits many.
I wish life had another way of taking control.
Well done.
My very best wishes.
RGstar.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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You did really well here. Short lines of reality in which many will, have and indeed, if not, will have someone near that can relate to this. This time of year we think even more of this kind of reality, a reality that awaits many.
I wish life had another way of taking control.
Well done.
My very best wishes.
RGstar.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thanks, RG. The older are living longer now. It is a growing problem.
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
This was a nice story telling poem. And the fact, that you were trying to receive blessings is what it's all about. Nevertheless, I think it could have been a little more subtly creative. But you did your thing, and that's what counts. Keep killing it.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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This was a nice story telling poem. And the fact, that you were trying to receive blessings is what it's all about. Nevertheless, I think it could have been a little more subtly creative. But you did your thing, and that's what counts. Keep killing it.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thanks again. I appreciate your comments.