Guided by Faith
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Comment from lancellot
Well, the writing and editing showcases your talents and time in making sure every small detail is addressed. Good work. I do wonder if your female character will ever fully address their need for virginity and seemingly asexual character. Not saying it's wrong, but they all have it, in a modern world, with no sense of spectrum. Just on and off. And their males always go along without any pushback. I think that may strike some readers as unrealistic.
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"Emma, Emma, Emma, you don't get it. I'm used to getting my way and I want you."
- But why would a guy like Ronnie want Emma? This is a real question that's never addressed. Men just seem to hit on her a lot (in 30 days) when she offers nothing. But, then most love her too, and she can do no wrong. (all in 30 days)
His eyebrows rose. "How did you know?"
-Really? He's 29, why would he be?
He nodded. "I want you to know I have no problem honoring your wishes. I do ask that you speak up if I cross a line or make it uncomfortable for you."
-I've noticed this before, and I've noticed there is seldom, if ever, any talk of the male's wishes or feelings, or needs. No compromise, No honoring.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Well, the writing and editing showcases your talents and time in making sure every small detail is addressed. Good work. I do wonder if your female character will ever fully address their need for virginity and seemingly asexual character. Not saying it's wrong, but they all have it, in a modern world, with no sense of spectrum. Just on and off. And their males always go along without any pushback. I think that may strike some readers as unrealistic.
notes
"Emma, Emma, Emma, you don't get it. I'm used to getting my way and I want you."
- But why would a guy like Ronnie want Emma? This is a real question that's never addressed. Men just seem to hit on her a lot (in 30 days) when she offers nothing. But, then most love her too, and she can do no wrong. (all in 30 days)
His eyebrows rose. "How did you know?"
-Really? He's 29, why would he be?
He nodded. "I want you to know I have no problem honoring your wishes. I do ask that you speak up if I cross a line or make it uncomfortable for you."
-I've noticed this before, and I've noticed there is seldom, if ever, any talk of the male's wishes or feelings, or needs. No compromise, No honoring.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Not everybody in this modern time feels sex is necessary in a relationship. People still choose to wait until marriage. Just because the media pushes it does that make it right.
Ronnie wants her because he didn't score with her in high school.
If her wishes are to be kept there is no compromising. If he truly wants her and not just for sex, then that's the end of that story. Can't have it both ways.
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Okay. Have a great weekend.
Comment from jmdg1954
I like how they are now attempting to be more open with each other regarding feelings. It's what couples do. They need to be open with each other if they are to move forward as a couple.
I'm glad she stood up to the sleezbag, Ronnie! Way to go Emma!
Good chapter. I saw no "oops" ...
John
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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I like how they are now attempting to be more open with each other regarding feelings. It's what couples do. They need to be open with each other if they are to move forward as a couple.
I'm glad she stood up to the sleezbag, Ronnie! Way to go Emma!
Good chapter. I saw no "oops" ...
John
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from damommy
A most excellent chapter. They needed to talk this out and know where each stands and understands. I don't like that this story is close to the end, but I'm certainly enjoying the journey.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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A most excellent chapter. They needed to talk this out and know where each stands and understands. I don't like that this story is close to the end, but I'm certainly enjoying the journey.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I love your stuff. I don't write romance as a rule; my humor gets the best of me, and I have the hero tripping over his own feet on the way to his plan of whisking the heroine off her feet and into his arms. Romance has a hard time functioning while the hero is in traction. I like that you have Seth and Emma talking about their feelings and not bottling them up.
Keep writing more.Karen
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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I love your stuff. I don't write romance as a rule; my humor gets the best of me, and I have the hero tripping over his own feet on the way to his plan of whisking the heroine off her feet and into his arms. Romance has a hard time functioning while the hero is in traction. I like that you have Seth and Emma talking about their feelings and not bottling them up.
Keep writing more.Karen
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
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you are welcome :-)
Comment from Ben Colder
Wow/ Very long this time. I suppose the ground you cover was vital to the ending. It reminded me of the days when our group worked for our building fund. Good one, Barb.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Wow/ Very long this time. I suppose the ground you cover was vital to the ending. It reminded me of the days when our group worked for our building fund. Good one, Barb.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, all of this is necessary.
Comment from BethShelby
I like the way you are dealing with this relationship. It is good that Seth is so concerned about Emma remaining a virgin. Since she is having such strong feeling herself, I wonder if Seth is considering asking her to marry him. They both seem very concerned about doing something that will cause a problem for the other. I imagine they there will be more problems with Ronnie. You are all giving an indication that Emma's father might have something physical going on. I look forward to more.
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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I like the way you are dealing with this relationship. It is good that Seth is so concerned about Emma remaining a virgin. Since she is having such strong feeling herself, I wonder if Seth is considering asking her to marry him. They both seem very concerned about doing something that will cause a problem for the other. I imagine they there will be more problems with Ronnie. You are all giving an indication that Emma's father might have something physical going on. I look forward to more.
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Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Things will start to happen in a few weeks.
Comment from BethShelby
I like the way you are dealing with this relationship. It is good that Seth is so concerned about Emma remaining a virgin. Since she is having such strong feeling herself, I wonder if Seth is considering asking her to marry him. They both seem very concerned about doing something that will cause a problem for the other. I imagine they there will be more problems with Ronnie. You are all giving an indication that Emma's father might have something physical going on. I look forward to more.
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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I like the way you are dealing with this relationship. It is good that Seth is so concerned about Emma remaining a virgin. Since she is having such strong feeling herself, I wonder if Seth is considering asking her to marry him. They both seem very concerned about doing something that will cause a problem for the other. I imagine they there will be more problems with Ronnie. You are all giving an indication that Emma's father might have something physical going on. I look forward to more.
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Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. Things will start to happen in a few weeks.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, as usual this was a great chapter, but I will be looking forward to when you break the chapter into two. There so many other works I want and need to read.
I loved the scene where she kneed Ronnie. He certainly deserved that.. I found the following towards the beginning:
"Where you a good boy?" = "Were you a good boy?"
Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Hi Barbara, as usual this was a great chapter, but I will be looking forward to when you break the chapter into two. There so many other works I want and need to read.
I loved the scene where she kneed Ronnie. He certainly deserved that.. I found the following towards the beginning:
"Where you a good boy?" = "Were you a good boy?"
Ulla xcx
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the catch. Next week is another entire chapter and think from them on they are broken up. Most of my reviewers, who have commented like the longer chapter.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I thought this chapter was so lovely, Barb, and I'm so proud of Emma kneeing that scumbag. Hmm, he needed putting in his place. But will it cause a problem later? We'll have to wait and see. I'm glad that Seth and Emma have talked about their feelings, the next part is to own up to their love for each other. I'm really enjoying your story, my friend. Well done!! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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I thought this chapter was so lovely, Barb, and I'm so proud of Emma kneeing that scumbag. Hmm, he needed putting in his place. But will it cause a problem later? We'll have to wait and see. I'm glad that Seth and Emma have talked about their feelings, the next part is to own up to their love for each other. I'm really enjoying your story, my friend. Well done!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from BermyBye50
Barbara,
Every chapter you write is brilliantly written and compelling. With eight chapters to go, this will be another novel ready for publication. You continue to be one of my favorite writers on Fanstory and will again deliver a literary success in a genre the market will openly welcome.
I will visit your website to view your work and add your novels to my reading list.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Barbara,
Every chapter you write is brilliantly written and compelling. With eight chapters to go, this will be another novel ready for publication. You continue to be one of my favorite writers on Fanstory and will again deliver a literary success in a genre the market will openly welcome.
I will visit your website to view your work and add your novels to my reading list.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.