Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Her life she must endure"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from AmorGentil
The old days, what we change for progress, and what is progress? More materiality than ever, more obfuscation, anxieties, less time to expend we our love ones, at least, quality time.
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The old days, what we change for progress, and what is progress? More materiality than ever, more obfuscation, anxieties, less time to expend we our love ones, at least, quality time.
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for the comments Amor
Comment from enjoi
This is an interesting poem you have here. No mistakes that I could find, just an interesting piece with a pleasant rhythm and an intriguing situation discussed. Thank you for sharing.
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This is an interesting poem you have here. No mistakes that I could find, just an interesting piece with a pleasant rhythm and an intriguing situation discussed. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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your most welcome enjoi
Comment from mermaids
Sounds like the life of the cowgirl is different from the cowboy. This is the first poem I have read that mentions Walmart. This is enjoyable to read and it is wonderful to read about the cowgirl.
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Sounds like the life of the cowgirl is different from the cowboy. This is the first poem I have read that mentions Walmart. This is enjoyable to read and it is wonderful to read about the cowgirl.
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thank you for reading mermaids
Comment from Rain Chapman
It's bitter sweet to let go of the dreams we started with when faced with the reality we are left with. Pearls for Walmart - excellent image, this line captured the essence of the poem for me. Beautifully done.
Rain :)
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It's bitter sweet to let go of the dreams we started with when faced with the reality we are left with. Pearls for Walmart - excellent image, this line captured the essence of the poem for me. Beautifully done.
Rain :)
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thank you Rain for reading
Comment from MikiB
Excellent writing done on this poem about a Cowgirl's Life.
Nice picture of it shown too. Gee, I'd hate I had to endure being on a horse!
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Excellent writing done on this poem about a Cowgirl's Life.
Nice picture of it shown too. Gee, I'd hate I had to endure being on a horse!
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for reading MikiB
Comment from lola29
Your poem is lovely and so heartrending. She obviously has a very rich and rewarding life. Maybe not the life some would choose, but still very rich.
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Your poem is lovely and so heartrending. She obviously has a very rich and rewarding life. Maybe not the life some would choose, but still very rich.
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thank you Lola
Comment from Abba Lin
Hi Deepwater, I really enjoyed reading your poem and the reality is just that, her life she must endure.. Were not all princess' Life is not a fairytale, when we realize we must be content in whatever state we're in and endure..Then were free to happy in spite of.. Great job, see how much this sparked me... Love Lin
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Hi Deepwater, I really enjoyed reading your poem and the reality is just that, her life she must endure.. Were not all princess' Life is not a fairytale, when we realize we must be content in whatever state we're in and endure..Then were free to happy in spite of.. Great job, see how much this sparked me... Love Lin
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thank you Lin
Comment from LLA16
I love this poem, excellent job.
I felt kind of sad for her after reading this. It seems like her life has turned out different than what she had expected, or the promises made by her cowboy. Of course we are all accountable for our own happiness.
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I love this poem, excellent job.
I felt kind of sad for her after reading this. It seems like her life has turned out different than what she had expected, or the promises made by her cowboy. Of course we are all accountable for our own happiness.
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for reading LLA
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful picture. people don't realize the hard work it takes for a ranch to run, i wish you well in your venture
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful picture. people don't realize the hard work it takes for a ranch to run, i wish you well in your venture
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thank you sweet
Comment from openmictime
Your poem as a whole, is indeed well written and speaks to the reader through your ability to capture emotions in some of your more blunt stanzas, such as, life she must endure. However, the flow of the piece itself was a little coarse, I felt as if you were able to channel your art more directly there would have been more stanzas like the one I made reference too. To be alone, in your space to write, unattended to, is to embark on your journey in all depths.
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Your poem as a whole, is indeed well written and speaks to the reader through your ability to capture emotions in some of your more blunt stanzas, such as, life she must endure. However, the flow of the piece itself was a little coarse, I felt as if you were able to channel your art more directly there would have been more stanzas like the one I made reference too. To be alone, in your space to write, unattended to, is to embark on your journey in all depths.
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for the comments openmic