Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Part Three of Chapter One"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Deorre Leonard
My heart goes out to Anna and woman like her suffering though this type of abuse. Its a sad story but it happens all the time. A good read. Great characters. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2011
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My heart goes out to Anna and woman like her suffering though this type of abuse. Its a sad story but it happens all the time. A good read. Great characters. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review . I appreciate your support.
Comment from taravan
The story is continuing to build very nicely. You can feel Anna's trepidation and fear of what Bobby will do if she goes to the doctors with Michael and yet the love and concern for her son win out. Very well done!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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The story is continuing to build very nicely. You can feel Anna's trepidation and fear of what Bobby will do if she goes to the doctors with Michael and yet the love and concern for her son win out. Very well done!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is a very good chapter... Good write with imagery. I liked the structured with a descriptive script. A very enjoyable reading.
Thanks for sharing with us. God bless you Barbara.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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This is a very good chapter... Good write with imagery. I liked the structured with a descriptive script. A very enjoyable reading.
Thanks for sharing with us. God bless you Barbara.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from misscookie
My PRAYERS AND GOD IS WITH YOU ALWAYS.
I LOVE THIS CHAPTER I FOUND IT VERY INTERESTING AND YOU KEPT IT MOVING VERY WELL.
THERE WAS NEVER A DULL MOMENT
THANK YOU FOR SHARING.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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My PRAYERS AND GOD IS WITH YOU ALWAYS.
I LOVE THIS CHAPTER I FOUND IT VERY INTERESTING AND YOU KEPT IT MOVING VERY WELL.
THERE WAS NEVER A DULL MOMENT
THANK YOU FOR SHARING.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and friendship.
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Your very welcome, take care. My friend.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ...
This is a well-written chapter in your book and your well-chosen words, especially with the dialogue, provide your readers with vivid imagery. I have given you 5 stars, knowing that you will consider the few changes recommended ...
* You have - she threw it in the trash on her way inside ..
I suggest - threw it in the trash-can ....
* You have - doesn't weigh one hundred ten pounds ...
I suggest - desn't weigh one-hundred-and-ten pounds ...
* In one place you have a much-used but nevertheless filthy word, said by Bobby to his wife. This is not necessary and just lowers the high standard of your writing.
* You have - How can I get her trust me? this should be - to trust me?
Now, I look forward to the next chapter. I am also thinking of you and praying for you each day as you await further decisions concerning your treatment.
Love from .. Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2011
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Hullo Barbara ...
This is a well-written chapter in your book and your well-chosen words, especially with the dialogue, provide your readers with vivid imagery. I have given you 5 stars, knowing that you will consider the few changes recommended ...
* You have - she threw it in the trash on her way inside ..
I suggest - threw it in the trash-can ....
* You have - doesn't weigh one hundred ten pounds ...
I suggest - desn't weigh one-hundred-and-ten pounds ...
* In one place you have a much-used but nevertheless filthy word, said by Bobby to his wife. This is not necessary and just lowers the high standard of your writing.
* You have - How can I get her trust me? this should be - to trust me?
Now, I look forward to the next chapter. I am also thinking of you and praying for you each day as you await further decisions concerning your treatment.
Love from .. Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2011
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I waited until I got on my PC so I could make a hard copy so I don't miss any of the corrections. Thank you.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
Thanks for the update on your condition, and we hope things work out.
This is an excellent chapter, nothing to criticize and much to like. Of course, Bobby yells about doctor bills, even when they're small. It's a part of his wanting to control Anna's life.
Dave
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Barbara,
Thanks for the update on your condition, and we hope things work out.
This is an excellent chapter, nothing to criticize and much to like. Of course, Bobby yells about doctor bills, even when they're small. It's a part of his wanting to control Anna's life.
Dave
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nanashirley
I feel so sorry for her. It is hard to accept help from other even for your child. We were at a fund raise for our local women's shelter last week. It is a good cause and one close to my heart. It is a sad but good chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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I feel so sorry for her. It is hard to accept help from other even for your child. We were at a fund raise for our local women's shelter last week. It is a good cause and one close to my heart. It is a sad but good chapter.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from stanishmichelle
I can't believe Bobby would whine over $15.00 for his son's healthcare. What a tyrant. Anna made a smart decision in not going home, and I hope she really will call Troy. She needs to remember the more she is abused, the less love and care she will be able to give Michael. The story becomes more interesting each time. I also wish you all the best in your treatments too. Michelle
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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I can't believe Bobby would whine over $15.00 for his son's healthcare. What a tyrant. Anna made a smart decision in not going home, and I hope she really will call Troy. She needs to remember the more she is abused, the less love and care she will be able to give Michael. The story becomes more interesting each time. I also wish you all the best in your treatments too. Michelle
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
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You're welcome.
Comment from JW
This chapter is another well written addition to your story. It is unfortunate though that it's storyline accurate describe true events that occur on a daily basis.
You may want to review the line: How can I get her trust me? - I beleive a word is missing.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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This chapter is another well written addition to your story. It is unfortunate though that it's storyline accurate describe true events that occur on a daily basis.
You may want to review the line: How can I get her trust me? - I beleive a word is missing.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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It is missing a word and I will make the correction. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barbara - this is already picking up pace. I think that you've started another winner. You are really gifted. Always warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Hi Barbara - this is already picking up pace. I think that you've started another winner. You are really gifted. Always warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 21-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.