Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Part three Chapter two"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a very interesting piece of narrative art. I am glad that the poor woman found someone who cared enough for her to check on her and take necessary action to protect her. kudos
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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This is a very interesting piece of narrative art. I am glad that the poor woman found someone who cared enough for her to check on her and take necessary action to protect her. kudos
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from FmblingTwrdXtacy
It is short, but that helps it be clear and to the point about what is going on. I didn't leave reviews, but I did go back and read the other chapters to get caught up, I will keep following your story.
PS one suggestion- you might look up the cycle of abuse- so far in your story there is sustained anger, danger and tension. This is not usually so- after beatings, the abuser tends to come in with flowers, apologies that it will never happen again (of course it does happen again, but he says it), and asks why she has to make him so upset that he hit her etc things like that. Reasons to make her stay-because she loves him and underneath it all he really loves her, too...
just a suggestion.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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It is short, but that helps it be clear and to the point about what is going on. I didn't leave reviews, but I did go back and read the other chapters to get caught up, I will keep following your story.
PS one suggestion- you might look up the cycle of abuse- so far in your story there is sustained anger, danger and tension. This is not usually so- after beatings, the abuser tends to come in with flowers, apologies that it will never happen again (of course it does happen again, but he says it), and asks why she has to make him so upset that he hit her etc things like that. Reasons to make her stay-because she loves him and underneath it all he really loves her, too...
just a suggestion.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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That is true, but toward the end of the cycle before the person gets murdered, the flowers don't come, in a future post, Anna describes how sorry Bobby used to be after he beat her. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Moonlith
Another exciting chapter full of conflict and action. I enjoy reading your stories. Your characters seem real to me and I feel a part of your stories, as if I am there. I agree that abuse is a serious crime committed against women.
YOur stories call attention to the suffering and pain these women go through,and the children too. I will continue on to read the rest of your chapters. Thank you for writing on this subject.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Another exciting chapter full of conflict and action. I enjoy reading your stories. Your characters seem real to me and I feel a part of your stories, as if I am there. I agree that abuse is a serious crime committed against women.
YOur stories call attention to the suffering and pain these women go through,and the children too. I will continue on to read the rest of your chapters. Thank you for writing on this subject.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
Troy has found out where Anna lives. When he hears Anna being abused by Bobby he calls 911. He has gotten himself in the middle of a bad situation. Many women are so fearful of their spouses they will deny being abused. Bobby won't like Troy interfering with his marriage. He will retaliate.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Troy has found out where Anna lives. When he hears Anna being abused by Bobby he calls 911. He has gotten himself in the middle of a bad situation. Many women are so fearful of their spouses they will deny being abused. Bobby won't like Troy interfering with his marriage. He will retaliate.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. Bobby doesn't know Troy exists yet.
Comment from Nanashirley
I like the idea of him being the hero. It is not a good thing to go to the door. I can feel the fear in her and the frustration in him.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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I like the idea of him being the hero. It is not a good thing to go to the door. I can feel the fear in her and the frustration in him.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from cjsthoughts
Okay first i will have to read this whole book! I am VERY Impressed...
The backgroung alone is my life to a "T".
Anyway,
Romance fiction....... It seems like its so much like my life! In different ways but the same...
As far as your notes, Its very true that abuse is VERY real. I hope Anna makes it to safety.
Cheryl
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Okay first i will have to read this whole book! I am VERY Impressed...
The backgroung alone is my life to a "T".
Anyway,
Romance fiction....... It seems like its so much like my life! In different ways but the same...
As far as your notes, Its very true that abuse is VERY real. I hope Anna makes it to safety.
Cheryl
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your encouragement.
Comment from teacherdub
Anna's struggle is escalating as the last post indicated. Tension is turned up a knotch as Troy receives the message. Confrontation between Troy and Bobby is inevitable, and I anxiously await the next chapter.
Barbara, take care of yourself through this treatment. You are in all our prayers. Deborah
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Anna's struggle is escalating as the last post indicated. Tension is turned up a knotch as Troy receives the message. Confrontation between Troy and Bobby is inevitable, and I anxiously await the next chapter.
Barbara, take care of yourself through this treatment. You are in all our prayers. Deborah
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support. I appreciate both.
Comment from RebelRose
I will be looking forward to the next post with much anticipation and anxiety. Troy is in a bad place, not knowing if calling the cops will make it better or worse. Still, for Anna and Michael's sake, he has to take that chance.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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I will be looking forward to the next post with much anticipation and anxiety. Troy is in a bad place, not knowing if calling the cops will make it better or worse. Still, for Anna and Michael's sake, he has to take that chance.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barb Yes you chapter was short, but left me with such emotions
( happiness and fear).
Looks like Troy knows exactly what is happening to Anna
(from the his childhood)
Gert
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Barb Yes you chapter was short, but left me with such emotions
( happiness and fear).
Looks like Troy knows exactly what is happening to Anna
(from the his childhood)
Gert
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from MaryMeadid
Hi Barbara- This was still a good chapter. I have been following along and am hopeful Anna makes it out of this abusive relationship safely.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Hi Barbara- This was still a good chapter. I have been following along and am hopeful Anna makes it out of this abusive relationship safely.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.