Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from bookishfabler
Hey there. Bare with me here, I'm on my cell phone and not good at this typing here. I can't believe I can review on this. No mistakes that I can see, but Troy saved her. I know she has a crush but isn't she being a bit childish e en if that was his girlfriend. I don't remember him even hinting at dating I'm just saying. Otherwise great chapter.
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2011
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Hey there. Bare with me here, I'm on my cell phone and not good at this typing here. I can't believe I can review on this. No mistakes that I can see, but Troy saved her. I know she has a crush but isn't she being a bit childish e en if that was his girlfriend. I don't remember him even hinting at dating I'm just saying. Otherwise great chapter.
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
It doesn't take long to get behind when one is a school
teacher. Teachers in Suffolk lost an inservice day today
because of Hurricane Irene. Fortunately, we had not begun
school yet.
I don't think you missed a thing while posting this. It is
excellent. By the way, thanks for noting "Strangers do not pose the greatest risk of sexual abuse to children; Most children are abused by people they know." That is so true.
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2011
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barbara:
It doesn't take long to get behind when one is a school
teacher. Teachers in Suffolk lost an inservice day today
because of Hurricane Irene. Fortunately, we had not begun
school yet.
I don't think you missed a thing while posting this. It is
excellent. By the way, thanks for noting "Strangers do not pose the greatest risk of sexual abuse to children; Most children are abused by people they know." That is so true.
Thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 29-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from artsybri
I thought this was a good plot line. (I haven't read any previous chapters). Personally I feel your dialogue doesn't sound very natural. Like in the beginning when Anna takes Michael out of his crib. I don't know, it just sounds very proper and not what people actually say. But as previously stated I haven't read any other chapters so that might be the reason, I don't know the characters very well.
Happy Writing.
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2011
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I thought this was a good plot line. (I haven't read any previous chapters). Personally I feel your dialogue doesn't sound very natural. Like in the beginning when Anna takes Michael out of his crib. I don't know, it just sounds very proper and not what people actually say. But as previously stated I haven't read any other chapters so that might be the reason, I don't know the characters very well.
Happy Writing.
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Comment Written 29-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2011
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Most the people in this story are professional and college educated. It would have helped you, I you had read the previous posts. Thank you
Comment from Janie King
This is well-written and easy to understand. How we jump to the wrong conclusion so many times in our life..I understand where she's coming from but it still cause her pain that if she had just given him a chnace to explain she wouldn't have had to suffer. I'm going 3-4 hours away tomorrow to see another doctor for some constructive answers so keep me in your prayers. I've spent almost no time at the computer this week so I'm way behind. How's it going? God bless.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2011
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This is well-written and easy to understand. How we jump to the wrong conclusion so many times in our life..I understand where she's coming from but it still cause her pain that if she had just given him a chnace to explain she wouldn't have had to suffer. I'm going 3-4 hours away tomorrow to see another doctor for some constructive answers so keep me in your prayers. I've spent almost no time at the computer this week so I'm way behind. How's it going? God bless.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2011
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You are always in my prayers.
Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading this chapter very much Barbara. It's a shame that Anna misunderstood what was happening with Troy. I look forward to the next chapter. The last sentence in your authors notes is very, very sad.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2011
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I enjoyed reading this chapter very much Barbara. It's a shame that Anna misunderstood what was happening with Troy. I look forward to the next chapter. The last sentence in your authors notes is very, very sad.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent story.
Women that need financial help, often find some male friend to turn to when living in a dangerous area of town, and to assist financially; but it is more than a loan . . .
Being dependent on a man, often puts him in control, and allows him to have other relationships at the same time.
Some women go to domestic violence seminars, or meetings--even if no physical or mental abuse has started-- just to talk with other women to find out about the signs; and get backup--abuse shelter telephone numbers--friends numbers.
This will give a women a better understanding of the behavior of the boyfriend; to determine if he has anger-control issues.
Good story. Too many women are afraid to speak; for some it is too late; even if they live through an ordeal, they are harmed mentally.
Interesting story.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2011
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Excellent story.
Women that need financial help, often find some male friend to turn to when living in a dangerous area of town, and to assist financially; but it is more than a loan . . .
Being dependent on a man, often puts him in control, and allows him to have other relationships at the same time.
Some women go to domestic violence seminars, or meetings--even if no physical or mental abuse has started-- just to talk with other women to find out about the signs; and get backup--abuse shelter telephone numbers--friends numbers.
This will give a women a better understanding of the behavior of the boyfriend; to determine if he has anger-control issues.
Good story. Too many women are afraid to speak; for some it is too late; even if they live through an ordeal, they are harmed mentally.
Interesting story.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book which is generally well written. There are just two small changes to suggest ...
* You have - so I better find someplace else to eat.
I suggest - so I had better find some other place to eat.
(someplace is not one word)
Now, I look forward to the next chapter and hope that Anna thinks more kindly about Troy, having jumped to a conclusion which could well end a wonderful association.
Love from ...... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2011
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Hullo Barbara ....
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book which is generally well written. There are just two small changes to suggest ...
* You have - so I better find someplace else to eat.
I suggest - so I had better find some other place to eat.
(someplace is not one word)
Now, I look forward to the next chapter and hope that Anna thinks more kindly about Troy, having jumped to a conclusion which could well end a wonderful association.
Love from ...... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from *erin*
Great chapter, as always. I'm so sorry that Anna had to witness that, and especially so soon after everything that happened with Bobby. I really hope that she lets Troy explain because she really needs a nice man in her life. Great job, and I could not find any mistakes.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2011
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Great chapter, as always. I'm so sorry that Anna had to witness that, and especially so soon after everything that happened with Bobby. I really hope that she lets Troy explain because she really needs a nice man in her life. Great job, and I could not find any mistakes.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from MS Writer
It sounds as if there is trouble again in Anna's life. I guess when you have had her experiences you can't believe something good can come your way. Good pace and writing. Enjoying this story very much.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2011
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It sounds as if there is trouble again in Anna's life. I guess when you have had her experiences you can't believe something good can come your way. Good pace and writing. Enjoying this story very much.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Hareem.S
What a poignant thing you have written. And the author notes are heart wrenching too! I havenot read the rest of the book, but I simply love this chapter. It so vividly written. You a a great writer, and its such rivetting story. Your expression is great, and there is suspense in the story too. Great work!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2011
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What a poignant thing you have written. And the author notes are heart wrenching too! I havenot read the rest of the book, but I simply love this chapter. It so vividly written. You a a great writer, and its such rivetting story. Your expression is great, and there is suspense in the story too. Great work!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.