Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "part 3, Chapter 16"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from rightforyou
Barbara
I enjoyed reading this action filled chapter and thought that you did a fine job on the flow of suspense as well a action inside this story. I haven't had a chance to read the prior chapter and after reading this need to go back and catch up..
Wonderful job...Ron
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2012
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Barbara
I enjoyed reading this action filled chapter and thought that you did a fine job on the flow of suspense as well a action inside this story. I haven't had a chance to read the prior chapter and after reading this need to go back and catch up..
Wonderful job...Ron
Comment Written 14-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from HPicasso
Hello Mrs. Barbara, this is getting creepy! This is an exciting and upsetting chapter! You keep the suspense going well and you keep your focus too. I never kow what to expect when I read another chapter of your book. I pray Troy finds out who causing all the turmoil in Anna's life. Anna was attacked and Troy was able to discover the license tag of the truck. Some good action at the end of this chapter. I wish I could keep up with all you write, their always good. Great job on the accuracy and advice in this book!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2012
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Hello Mrs. Barbara, this is getting creepy! This is an exciting and upsetting chapter! You keep the suspense going well and you keep your focus too. I never kow what to expect when I read another chapter of your book. I pray Troy finds out who causing all the turmoil in Anna's life. Anna was attacked and Troy was able to discover the license tag of the truck. Some good action at the end of this chapter. I wish I could keep up with all you write, their always good. Great job on the accuracy and advice in this book!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
Another great chapter the storyline is progressing nicely. Great cliffhanger to end on leaves the reader wanting more. nice work x
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Another great chapter the storyline is progressing nicely. Great cliffhanger to end on leaves the reader wanting more. nice work x
Comment Written 14-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, wow, that would have to be so scary. Am glad that Michael appears to be ok. So lucky that Troy had decided to follow her home. Now, to find out who belows to that loud muffler car.....
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Barbara, wow, that would have to be so scary. Am glad that Michael appears to be ok. So lucky that Troy had decided to follow her home. Now, to find out who belows to that loud muffler car.....
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Thank you the kind review.
Comment from axelbeariter
You set up this gripping scene at the end very well, just giving the reader the hint that there was a possibility of danger. I, as the reader, relaxed and then you hit me with the guy running into Anna. That was totally unexpected and worked well to heighten the suspense sure to come later. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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You set up this gripping scene at the end very well, just giving the reader the hint that there was a possibility of danger. I, as the reader, relaxed and then you hit me with the guy running into Anna. That was totally unexpected and worked well to heighten the suspense sure to come later. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Penny 4 your thought
very good. I never review in grammar and punctuation only on story content you are a talented writer. Your story flows well. The story tells a tale that draws you reader though and leave them wanting more. Your charters are well rounded and believable. All in all a solid five.
Penny for your thought
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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very good. I never review in grammar and punctuation only on story content you are a talented writer. Your story flows well. The story tells a tale that draws you reader though and leave them wanting more. Your charters are well rounded and believable. All in all a solid five.
Penny for your thought
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jclark
This was a "cut to the chase" chapter but it was effective and intense as always. I sure hope Anna doesn't get hurt or worse.
Judy
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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This was a "cut to the chase" chapter but it was effective and intense as always. I sure hope Anna doesn't get hurt or worse.
Judy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barbara - you write about such such natural things. I had to chuckle about the car seat. Seems I have the same problem Well written as always with the characteristic "hook" at the end. Well done and warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Hi Barbara - you write about such such natural things. I had to chuckle about the car seat. Seems I have the same problem Well written as always with the characteristic "hook" at the end. Well done and warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Lydia11
Sounds good and I'm sure that if I were reading the rest of your book I would probably get into the groove a bit more with who the characters are, what things look like,etc.. However, seeing I'm new and it's somewhat sparse I think more visual description's needed.Even if it's as casual as Troy's pushing his "Unruly wavy brown hair from his suntanned face" or Anna's heart thudding down like a load of bricks when Micheal pounds down on the hood of the car (what type of car?). Just something to make these people/situations more real and stimulating for the reader's mind's eye.
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Sounds good and I'm sure that if I were reading the rest of your book I would probably get into the groove a bit more with who the characters are, what things look like,etc.. However, seeing I'm new and it's somewhat sparse I think more visual description's needed.Even if it's as casual as Troy's pushing his "Unruly wavy brown hair from his suntanned face" or Anna's heart thudding down like a load of bricks when Micheal pounds down on the hood of the car (what type of car?). Just something to make these people/situations more real and stimulating for the reader's mind's eye.
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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I don't right that type of stuff. I don't like reading it and so I don't write it; either do my fans. Thank you for stopping by,
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
This is another interesting and action-packed chapter in your book which I enjoyed reading.
In several places, you use the word "toward". In English-English, this should be "towards" but perhaps on your side of the Atlantic, things are different.
I now look forward to reading the next chapter.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Hullo Barbara ....
This is another interesting and action-packed chapter in your book which I enjoyed reading.
In several places, you use the word "toward". In English-English, this should be "towards" but perhaps on your side of the Atlantic, things are different.
I now look forward to reading the next chapter.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes on our side of the pond, it's toward.