Forgotten Thoughts
Sometimes They Come Back103 total reviews
Comment from TDGlover2013
This poem has a good structure and style making it an excellent read. The idea of the poem is very good too. I have enjoyed reading as well as making a comment. The picture fit with theme very well.
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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This poem has a good structure and style making it an excellent read. The idea of the poem is very good too. I have enjoyed reading as well as making a comment. The picture fit with theme very well.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time and for your comments.
Curt
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Yesss... and it doesn't stop with age... they never go away. Dreams that turn into nightmares... how many times does that happen to us? Too many.
scattered dusty memories and used up yesterdays
with scars that last from days gone past in hues of blacks and greys
Those lines are not only poetic, but they spell it out perfectly. As content as I am with my life, there are still those dark corners that can't be ignored.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Yesss... and it doesn't stop with age... they never go away. Dreams that turn into nightmares... how many times does that happen to us? Too many.
scattered dusty memories and used up yesterdays
with scars that last from days gone past in hues of blacks and greys
Those lines are not only poetic, but they spell it out perfectly. As content as I am with my life, there are still those dark corners that can't be ignored.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for your insightful comments and for your rating of this work. It is very much appreciated my friend.
Curt
Comment from James crofoot
That is kind of a sad piece. 'Used up yesterdays' something you would write on a rainy day, I think. Very nice beat, easy to read. I sometimes feel this and just write it down. I hope it helped you. thanks for sharing this little piece.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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That is kind of a sad piece. 'Used up yesterdays' something you would write on a rainy day, I think. Very nice beat, easy to read. I sometimes feel this and just write it down. I hope it helped you. thanks for sharing this little piece.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time and for your thoughts on this piece James.
Curt
Comment from justjo66
Nicely done. I really liked the alliteration. Your poem
read very smoothly with a nice rhythm. So, true
our memories do seem to keep popping up (even the
unwanted ones).
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Nicely done. I really liked the alliteration. Your poem
read very smoothly with a nice rhythm. So, true
our memories do seem to keep popping up (even the
unwanted ones).
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for your thoughts.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Winslow
Dear Chanphy,
This is quite a depressing and dark poem you have written. It makes you feel the agony of your past, reaching out grabbing the reader by the throst. Well done.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Dear Chanphy,
This is quite a depressing and dark poem you have written. It makes you feel the agony of your past, reaching out grabbing the reader by the throst. Well done.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you Winston, but my name is Curt, not chanphy. (smile)
Comment from Righteous Riter
This is an good piece about something we all have experienced. The words are put together beautifully creating a nice flow. The rhyming is good and consistent throughout the piece. The title got my attention but the words kept it. Good job.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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This is an good piece about something we all have experienced. The words are put together beautifully creating a nice flow. The rhyming is good and consistent throughout the piece. The title got my attention but the words kept it. Good job.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Your thoughts and rating are much appreciated.
Curt
Comment from smudge
A powerful poem about dreams using alliteration and internal rhymes, "contained inside the cobalt tide." A well presented posting.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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A powerful poem about dreams using alliteration and internal rhymes, "contained inside the cobalt tide." A well presented posting.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you very much for your thoughts on this write.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Grace C. S.
This is a beautiful piece! The flow of the poem is excellent, and the meaning is profound. All can relate to this piece. The language is fitting, everything falls together beautifully and makes sense. Good job and good luck!-Grace
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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This is a beautiful piece! The flow of the poem is excellent, and the meaning is profound. All can relate to this piece. The language is fitting, everything falls together beautifully and makes sense. Good job and good luck!-Grace
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you Grace
Your thoughts and generous rating are very much appreciated.
Curt
Comment from kashmayank
I liked the last stanza most anyways a nice poem well thought and well written the structure was good and the art work was also nice all the best
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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I liked the last stanza most anyways a nice poem well thought and well written the structure was good and the art work was also nice all the best
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time and thoughts on this work.
Curt
Comment from kcross11
I really liked these lines-
never to be mended in the tattered threads perceived
knotted in the fabric of the falsehoods I believed
and these lines-
How proudly they parade in gaudy colors crimson laced
to radiate so fiercely from the fears I haven't faced
Those were my favorite. Overall, it came off very well. Good flow, it felt smooth. I liked the enjambment in it, it added some texture.
Job well done!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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I really liked these lines-
never to be mended in the tattered threads perceived
knotted in the fabric of the falsehoods I believed
and these lines-
How proudly they parade in gaudy colors crimson laced
to radiate so fiercely from the fears I haven't faced
Those were my favorite. Overall, it came off very well. Good flow, it felt smooth. I liked the enjambment in it, it added some texture.
Job well done!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for your insightful comments.
Curt