The Killer
Free Verse - Story Poem44 total reviews
Comment from Hudblack
Ahhh! So perfect!
Playful and skillful arousing method to bring us deep
And set us free at the end.
Because you know you the type of minds you captured..
The freedom from depression you hinted at was brilliant.
A very good read Guns.
Smart ass...:)
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Ahhh! So perfect!
Playful and skillful arousing method to bring us deep
And set us free at the end.
Because you know you the type of minds you captured..
The freedom from depression you hinted at was brilliant.
A very good read Guns.
Smart ass...:)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Oh smart ass eh? LOL thanks Hud for a great review of this. LOL
Comment from Bina1
You are a HOOT! The suspense was killing ME! I thought you were stretching again.....which you did so successfully! You got me with this one, my heart is still racing. You should not do this to a old lady, I need to lay down for a while!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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You are a HOOT! The suspense was killing ME! I thought you were stretching again.....which you did so successfully! You got me with this one, my heart is still racing. You should not do this to a old lady, I need to lay down for a while!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Ooooh Bina. I'm sorry girl. Hehehe come on now, yer putting me on, right? LOL
Comment from Sasha
YOu did a superb job pulling me into this one. What a marvelous story in a poem. You caught me completely off guard with this and gave me a big laugh at the unexpected ending. I enjoyed this immensely. Bravo! Job well done.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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YOu did a superb job pulling me into this one. What a marvelous story in a poem. You caught me completely off guard with this and gave me a big laugh at the unexpected ending. I enjoyed this immensely. Bravo! Job well done.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much Smurph. I owed ya this one girl. Hehehe.
Comment from Kiki12
Chickie!! I cannot believe you! LOL!!! Wow, now I went back and re-read the lead up to the murder and it's amazing how you played that, it is a perfect parallel to the intense nail biting edge-of-your-seat thriller-
not have to worry
about the constant assaults,
just in time to
hear him
come through the door.
The lamp
at the end of the old
sofa would do. --> now these clues seem obvious to the description of the mosquito! too funny, thanks for the great big laugh...
xx
kiki
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Chickie!! I cannot believe you! LOL!!! Wow, now I went back and re-read the lead up to the murder and it's amazing how you played that, it is a perfect parallel to the intense nail biting edge-of-your-seat thriller-
not have to worry
about the constant assaults,
just in time to
hear him
come through the door.
The lamp
at the end of the old
sofa would do. --> now these clues seem obvious to the description of the mosquito! too funny, thanks for the great big laugh...
xx
kiki
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much Kiki for a terrifying review.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hahahahahaha .... loved the SURPRISE ending, Gungalo! I thought at first that this might be about a young woman who is being sexually assaulted by her father. Thank goodness it was just an annoying BIG misquitoe!
You built up the suspense very well.:) An enjoyable read!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Hahahahahaha .... loved the SURPRISE ending, Gungalo! I thought at first that this might be about a young woman who is being sexually assaulted by her father. Thank goodness it was just an annoying BIG misquitoe!
You built up the suspense very well.:) An enjoyable read!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much Connie for your great review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hahahaha! Shame on you, especially for the artwork - the presentation you chose for this deception. What a wonderfully fun poem, Gungalo. I LOVED it!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Hahahaha! Shame on you, especially for the artwork - the presentation you chose for this deception. What a wonderfully fun poem, Gungalo. I LOVED it!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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LOL girl. Gotcha eh? First time I'll bet. Your left such a great review. I loved IT.
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:0))
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:)
Comment from Pili Pubul
LOL. You bad girl , you really full me, you are good girl.
Very good poem , love the style and chilling imagery , thank you for giving me a big laugh. Big hugs. Pili
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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LOL. You bad girl , you really full me, you are good girl.
Very good poem , love the style and chilling imagery , thank you for giving me a big laugh. Big hugs. Pili
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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LOL Pili, now would I try to fool you? Oh you just bet I would. Thanks sweetie.
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You just did, me and all your faithful readers... But was so happy you did. ... Hate those creatures...
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Sigh I did?
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Oh yes you did sneaky little poet... Love u
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LOL sneaky little poet eh? Heheh
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Hehehe yea, you too clever girl...
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Nahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.
Comment from c_lucas
Excellent twist at the end. This is very well written, building up the suspense to the end. She'll have to clean up the mess. Too bad, she hadn't heard of RAID!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Excellent twist at the end. This is very well written, building up the suspense to the end. She'll have to clean up the mess. Too bad, she hadn't heard of RAID!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Of course Charlie, but that would spoil the whole thing. LOL. Thanks so much guy.
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You're welcome, Gungalo. Charlie
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So smiling at you Charlie.
Comment from Teresa Paul
Under the chair reading with anticipation for the next horrifying word. Then rolling on the ground with laughter! This was brilliant! I can't tell you how much I loved this. Awesome, is all I can say. Now you will know I am truly a fan. EXCELLENT!!!Your amazed fan, Teresa.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Under the chair reading with anticipation for the next horrifying word. Then rolling on the ground with laughter! This was brilliant! I can't tell you how much I loved this. Awesome, is all I can say. Now you will know I am truly a fan. EXCELLENT!!!Your amazed fan, Teresa.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thanks T for a funny and wild review of this one.
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That was an incredibly talented piece of art. Yours, T.
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LOL smile.
Comment from Capricorn30
Oh my gosh--a great surprise ending, girl!
Your story is extremely misleading--good suspense incorporated throughout this sunset adventure;
Good visual and audio images utilized in this excellent thriller--I enjoyed immensely!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Oh my gosh--a great surprise ending, girl!
Your story is extremely misleading--good suspense incorporated throughout this sunset adventure;
Good visual and audio images utilized in this excellent thriller--I enjoyed immensely!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2013
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Thanks so much Capri for a thrilling review.