Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from misscookie
Oh, my goodness this chapter is in perfect timing for Halloween.
It gave me chills.
I'm glad I'm reading this in the day time my friend.
This was great.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Oh, my goodness this chapter is in perfect timing for Halloween.
It gave me chills.
I'm glad I'm reading this in the day time my friend.
This was great.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Hi, misscookie. I've been traveling and got behind on my chapters. When I realized I'd probably be getting it out late in October, I thought it might tie in nicely to All Hallow's Eve. Thanks for noticing and taking time to read - I know this kind of story is upsetting for you. Your support means a lot.
Blessings, Bev
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Your very welcome. If it wasn't for you I would pass it by. It was great. I tried to be brave as I read each line. LOL
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Aw thanks, Cookie. You're so very kind. Big Hug, Bev
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Your very welcome. I enjoyed the read. Hugs back to you.
Until next time.
Comment from Rondeno
Oh, wow! Wonderful writing, Bevvers. The floating statue gave me the heebie-jeebies. This HAS to be published. It's writing of a very high order indeed. I want to read more!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Oh, wow! Wonderful writing, Bevvers. The floating statue gave me the heebie-jeebies. This HAS to be published. It's writing of a very high order indeed. I want to read more!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much, Mikey. I'm honored by your words of encouragement, my friend. There's more developing here than meets the eye, so we've got a little way to go yet. Thanks for reading and caring. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Thatguypk
This is pretty gripping stuff. Stumbled upon it quite by accident, but I'm glad I did. The only trouble is, I now feel obliged to go back to the start and take in the whole story. Very good writing. :-)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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This is pretty gripping stuff. Stumbled upon it quite by accident, but I'm glad I did. The only trouble is, I now feel obliged to go back to the start and take in the whole story. Very good writing. :-)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you much, T. I sure appreciate the humor and encouragement of your review. It means a lot to me that you found the story interesing. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from reconciled
Hi.....I remember when the book was written....my mother wouldn't let me read it....I knew I had too...just from the way she had been walking around weird since she started reading it.....so...I did.....hm hmm....then when the movie came out....she went abd seen it....came home with white hair....mumbling something about...protect my children.....so....following weekend I watched this little girl spin her head in complete circles...spitting obscenities and vile green slime. I swear I didn't sleep for a week.....jut way way too creepy man....-smile- alright....good luck...Holy water...-wink- love Michael
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Hi.....I remember when the book was written....my mother wouldn't let me read it....I knew I had too...just from the way she had been walking around weird since she started reading it.....so...I did.....hm hmm....then when the movie came out....she went abd seen it....came home with white hair....mumbling something about...protect my children.....so....following weekend I watched this little girl spin her head in complete circles...spitting obscenities and vile green slime. I swear I didn't sleep for a week.....jut way way too creepy man....-smile- alright....good luck...Holy water...-wink- love Michael
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Hi Michael. I remember both reading and viewing the movie, The Exorcist. I have since learned the details of the case this was based upon ... one of the rare cases confirmed by the Catholic Church to have been of true Satanic posession. I had to keep my lights on for quite a while afterwards. Thank you for the delightful and generous review. So nice to hear from you! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
It's so clich©, but honestly, Bev, I am still shivering. This chapter was deeply disturbing because the horror was so realistic; I am so impressed! The exorcism words he spoke scared the heck out of me, and your description of the sulphur smell, Alyx behaving as he did, the coldness of the room, all of it was so darn authentic - you have again mastered this - it must tae a lot out of you to write like this my friend...
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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It's so clich©, but honestly, Bev, I am still shivering. This chapter was deeply disturbing because the horror was so realistic; I am so impressed! The exorcism words he spoke scared the heck out of me, and your description of the sulphur smell, Alyx behaving as he did, the coldness of the room, all of it was so darn authentic - you have again mastered this - it must tae a lot out of you to write like this my friend...
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Dawn, thank you so much for this terrific review. I appreciate it coming from someone who writes horror and understands a little better about the nuances of it. Your six is icing on the cake, buddy. Love you, Bev
Comment from Mastery
""Your mother killed herself because she copulated with a priest" Outstanding hook for your intro, Bev. Wow!
The new chapter: "Father Brian climbed the oak staircase to the upper rooms of the rectory. A whimper from Alyx, clutched to his chest, brought him back to the moment. He willed his arms to relax, but could not extinguish the violent trembling that radiated from the core of his body"
is another fine grabber. You are doing well with that, aren't you? LOL
I love your images throughout also, Bev: Examples:
"Brian stepped into the room and was overcome by the smell of sulphur. He felt his gut twist, and fought to keep from retching. Slapping his hand against the wall, he searched for the light switch and flipped it on."
And: "Brian's legs trembled, and he swayed on his feet. As though sensing his waning strength, demonic forces mounted their furies into a spectacular offense. The Blessed Virgin's statue lifted from the table and moved towards him. It began to spin ever faster. Alyx leaped through the air and knocked Brian aside just as the statue whizzed past his master's head and shattered against the wall"
The entire chapter deserves six stars but I have already squandered mine...so sorry, Bev. Outstanding writing. Bob
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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""Your mother killed herself because she copulated with a priest" Outstanding hook for your intro, Bev. Wow!
The new chapter: "Father Brian climbed the oak staircase to the upper rooms of the rectory. A whimper from Alyx, clutched to his chest, brought him back to the moment. He willed his arms to relax, but could not extinguish the violent trembling that radiated from the core of his body"
is another fine grabber. You are doing well with that, aren't you? LOL
I love your images throughout also, Bev: Examples:
"Brian stepped into the room and was overcome by the smell of sulphur. He felt his gut twist, and fought to keep from retching. Slapping his hand against the wall, he searched for the light switch and flipped it on."
And: "Brian's legs trembled, and he swayed on his feet. As though sensing his waning strength, demonic forces mounted their furies into a spectacular offense. The Blessed Virgin's statue lifted from the table and moved towards him. It began to spin ever faster. Alyx leaped through the air and knocked Brian aside just as the statue whizzed past his master's head and shattered against the wall"
The entire chapter deserves six stars but I have already squandered mine...so sorry, Bev. Outstanding writing. Bob
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Hi, Bob. Thank you so very much for this thorough and very encouraging review. I am especially honored when I receive a review like this from a writer I so admire. Really appreciate it, Bob. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Holy SHIT! Sorry. But oh, my , goodness. What a chapter, Bev. Honestly, I'd be curious to know how you felt writing this. You would have to be strong of spirit, I think, to handle writing about this type of evil. Absolutely superb, my friend. I like how you brought the Virgin into this - how the demon 'used' the statue. A great contrast between absolute evil and absolute good.
Bloody hell - the hair is still up on the back of my neck.
This priest is a heck of a guy, and as for Alyx...!!!
I love him.
Love love love the parting shot - "Round one goes to the Lord."
Perfect.
Love and hugs and my COMPLETE ADMIRATION
Av
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The cross he clutched, warmed the palm of his hand - just a suggestion dear friend - you could lose 'he clutched' since you mention a little earlier that he picked up the cross.
The cross warmed the palm of his hand.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Holy SHIT! Sorry. But oh, my , goodness. What a chapter, Bev. Honestly, I'd be curious to know how you felt writing this. You would have to be strong of spirit, I think, to handle writing about this type of evil. Absolutely superb, my friend. I like how you brought the Virgin into this - how the demon 'used' the statue. A great contrast between absolute evil and absolute good.
Bloody hell - the hair is still up on the back of my neck.
This priest is a heck of a guy, and as for Alyx...!!!
I love him.
Love love love the parting shot - "Round one goes to the Lord."
Perfect.
Love and hugs and my COMPLETE ADMIRATION
Av
xxx
The cross he clutched, warmed the palm of his hand - just a suggestion dear friend - you could lose 'he clutched' since you mention a little earlier that he picked up the cross.
The cross warmed the palm of his hand.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Av, thanks for such a thorough and deeply encouraging review. I like your suggestion -- perfect -- and shall make it posthaste. It's a bit creepy writing since I'm home alone when I do most of my writing. Once or twice, I've had a sense I wasn't alone in the room and have seen a few shadows flickering just beyong my vision. But, I have my Angels and Mother Mary always watching over me. I'm kinda like Father Brian, I'll only take so much before I get steamed! Again, I so appreciate your continued and generous support, my dear friend. Love you, Bev
Comment from barbara.wilkey
******, the best six stars I can give your right now. This post is filled with information. I really like it. Your di a wonderful job with it.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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******, the best six stars I can give your right now. This post is filled with information. I really like it. Your di a wonderful job with it.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Hi, barbara. Thank you for the virtual six. It means a lot coming from you. :0) Bev
Comment from RGstar
I think I remembered reviewing one of your chapters at one stage a while back.
My only regret now is that I didn't follow it through. I am a sucker for this type of story and genre.
Although I reviewed only one, I think, The characters remain poignant in my head. This means it had to have, one, been written well, and two, it must have captured my imagination.
This chapter, i was able to relate to directly.
I felt as though I was watching the Exorcist again.
Your scenes were clear and concise. The characters played their parts in equal amounts according to the role set out which made the scenes believable and created the imagery needed for the enhancement of emotions in bringing about a certain reality, though it is fiction.
I like the usage of the floating statue of the Virgin Mary in trying to gain access to the mind.
I will try to follow the next chapter when written.
The dialogue and area of usage around your characters is good, so no need for any change, it is progressing nicely.
Well done,
My best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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I think I remembered reviewing one of your chapters at one stage a while back.
My only regret now is that I didn't follow it through. I am a sucker for this type of story and genre.
Although I reviewed only one, I think, The characters remain poignant in my head. This means it had to have, one, been written well, and two, it must have captured my imagination.
This chapter, i was able to relate to directly.
I felt as though I was watching the Exorcist again.
Your scenes were clear and concise. The characters played their parts in equal amounts according to the role set out which made the scenes believable and created the imagery needed for the enhancement of emotions in bringing about a certain reality, though it is fiction.
I like the usage of the floating statue of the Virgin Mary in trying to gain access to the mind.
I will try to follow the next chapter when written.
The dialogue and area of usage around your characters is good, so no need for any change, it is progressing nicely.
Well done,
My best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Roy, thank you so much for this very helpful and encouraging review. I appreciate you taking time out to reach this chapter, and for your support. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from boxergirl
This was another interesting read. Father Brian climbing the stairs with Alyx clutched tightly to his chest was realistic and had me engaged throughout the story. Good job. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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This was another interesting read. Father Brian climbing the stairs with Alyx clutched tightly to his chest was realistic and had me engaged throughout the story. Good job. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2013
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Hi, BG. Thank you for reading my chapter. I appreciate your generous and supportive review. :0) Bev