The Animal Doctor
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "For His Eyes Only"Love Among the Thorns
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Comment from Millibrad
This is a good chapter. Your transitions to memory and back to present were smooth. Your dialogue is excellent.
Just one thing I noticed for you to check:
"Nathan took the (bate)[bait]."
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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This is a good chapter. Your transitions to memory and back to present were smooth. Your dialogue is excellent.
Just one thing I noticed for you to check:
"Nathan took the (bate)[bait]."
Comment Written 10-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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LOL! Thank you for catching that. And thank you for reading and reviewing. I really do appreciate it.
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you're welcome.
Comment from Gungalo
Amazing detailed story of their wedding night. It was so perfect that it seemed to roll our onto the page. Amahra you have managed to tell of a beautiful love and in such a way as to glorify it.
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Amazing detailed story of their wedding night. It was so perfect that it seemed to roll our onto the page. Amahra you have managed to tell of a beautiful love and in such a way as to glorify it.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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Thank you Gungalo so much for keeping up with the story.
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Smile.
Comment from Tatarka2
I didn't expect to like this, since I'm not usually a fan of this genre. However, I found this piece intriguing, and I would read on. Yes, the plot is very predictable, and the characters, at least in this chapter, seem more like caricatures than real people. But, the detail in the sex scene is very well done, and will, I think, serve to draw the reader in.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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I didn't expect to like this, since I'm not usually a fan of this genre. However, I found this piece intriguing, and I would read on. Yes, the plot is very predictable, and the characters, at least in this chapter, seem more like caricatures than real people. But, the detail in the sex scene is very well done, and will, I think, serve to draw the reader in.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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Thank you for stopping by.
Comment from barkingdog
I loved the scene with the father. After the threat they seemed to hit it off and Nathan was accepted.
The description of the bed with all of it brass and crome as well as the clinging satin wedding dress and beautiful lace veil stick in my mind as I write this review.
Now we get to the love making. Her speed at taking off her nightgown, and raising her knees to her chest made me wonder if she hadn't done this before. She didn't seem like the virgin who was willing to learn, but instead a participant that knew what she liked. Now if he took off her gown and she blushed and he pulled up her legs to her chest and she looked wary and then moaned with pleasure, that I could see as a virgin willing to be taught.
One spag:
-when Nevers stop(stopped) suddenly causing
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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I loved the scene with the father. After the threat they seemed to hit it off and Nathan was accepted.
The description of the bed with all of it brass and crome as well as the clinging satin wedding dress and beautiful lace veil stick in my mind as I write this review.
Now we get to the love making. Her speed at taking off her nightgown, and raising her knees to her chest made me wonder if she hadn't done this before. She didn't seem like the virgin who was willing to learn, but instead a participant that knew what she liked. Now if he took off her gown and she blushed and he pulled up her legs to her chest and she looked wary and then moaned with pleasure, that I could see as a virgin willing to be taught.
One spag:
-when Nevers stop(stopped) suddenly causing
Comment Written 10-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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I don't agree. I was a virgin in my twenties and I couldn't wait to have sex with my husband. Grace was ready for this. She was instructed by her mother(though I didn't put all the details in that scene)and she trusted her husband and he was gentle.
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Oh, I forgot to thank you for reading and reviewing, Smile.
Comment from Matthew M.
I don't know much about this story. The announcement of the wedding couple was good. Then the conversation between Never and Nathan had a good amount of tension and some humor.
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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I don't know much about this story. The announcement of the wedding couple was good. Then the conversation between Never and Nathan had a good amount of tension and some humor.
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Comment Written 10-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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Thank you Matthew M. for stopping by and reviewing.
Comment from RJFunston
Good morning,
I just finished your chapter and have to say I am impressed. You have a nice easy way in your writing, but manage to give a complete story. Your characters are well thought out and believable. You have a strong writing style that captures the attention of the reader.
I hope to get back and read some of the other chapters, but right now I'm limited to time because of medical problems. Please continue to write, your awesome and I look forward to more.
Have a great day,
RJ
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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Good morning,
I just finished your chapter and have to say I am impressed. You have a nice easy way in your writing, but manage to give a complete story. Your characters are well thought out and believable. You have a strong writing style that captures the attention of the reader.
I hope to get back and read some of the other chapters, but right now I'm limited to time because of medical problems. Please continue to write, your awesome and I look forward to more.
Have a great day,
RJ
Comment Written 10-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013
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First let me say, I hope you feel better. Thank so much for taking the time to read my latest chapter. And you have a great day, also. And thank you for all the stars.
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...:) My pleasure