The Animal Doctor
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Comment from barkingdog
In response to your author note: From what I've read wealthy, families all had their own store of liquor. Their drinking continued. The President even had liquor during prohibition.
Poorer families made bath-tub gin and of course there were always the moonshiners.
I enjoyed this chapter and can see it is leading up to more if Margaret is in town.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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In response to your author note: From what I've read wealthy, families all had their own store of liquor. Their drinking continued. The President even had liquor during prohibition.
Poorer families made bath-tub gin and of course there were always the moonshiners.
I enjoyed this chapter and can see it is leading up to more if Margaret is in town.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thanks for keeping up with my story. Yeah, that's right. So if things get too tough for my characters, I'll let them guzzle down some hidden booze. LOL
Comment from c_lucas
It has been a while, but your post made the wait worthwhile. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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It has been a while, but your post made the wait worthwhile. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thanks lucas. I'm still waiting for you to write our little girl out from under her sick uncles. I know you had to get away from it for a while. I did too. It's been weeks since I post.
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Maybe you missed a post. Jo is with Seth in Trouble's A'Brewing. The novel, "An Orphan Named Jo," ended with Jo and Seth getting together. You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie
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Oh, I've got to go back and read that. I was wondering why you were posting other stuff.
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Thank you, Amahra. Charlie
Comment from Gooloom
Somewhere sometime i think I have read some of the chapters of your interesting story.Your easy going style and language is well chosen and the plot is also easy to understand and follow. The birth of Margaret seems to have complicated their relationship and made them bitter. Love seems to be flying out of the window. Lets see what happens. gooloom
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Somewhere sometime i think I have read some of the chapters of your interesting story.Your easy going style and language is well chosen and the plot is also easy to understand and follow. The birth of Margaret seems to have complicated their relationship and made them bitter. Love seems to be flying out of the window. Lets see what happens. gooloom
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thank you Gooloom. Hope you will keep up with my story. Appreciate the review.
Comment from elchupakabra
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I thought this was really great. I love that the 'mansion' was fitting to the time and was more of a big house by today's ludicrous standards. I wouldn't personally ever want a mansion, I find myself losing enough things in my apartment, let alone if I had 30 more rooms to lose stuff in lol. That's a lot of searching. Anyways, great work on this write, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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I thought this was really great. I love that the 'mansion' was fitting to the time and was more of a big house by today's ludicrous standards. I wouldn't personally ever want a mansion, I find myself losing enough things in my apartment, let alone if I had 30 more rooms to lose stuff in lol. That's a lot of searching. Anyways, great work on this write, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thank you elchupakabra for this fine review. I would love to live in one, maybe not that big.
Comment from mrmorris69
When people post their work I assume they are trying to improve their work. So when I write a review I try to find something I believe that can be improved and something I like. Please don't take my review negatively; I am only trying to help.
What I thought could be improved:
You wrote:
The two stood and gazed upon the 21,000 square foot, 34 room mansion. It was built by English architect, Sir Alfred Bringhum. It featured 10 bed rooms--including two master suites, 15 baths, 20 closets, 12 fireplaces, a ball room, and a 200 seat formal dining area. The back of the house showcased a lovely brook, many oak trees and formal gardens for hosting events.
I don't know how we concluded this by standing in front of the house looking at it.
You wrote:
"It's a surprise, Mame. Is all I can say."
I apologize but this is the only part of this I have read. Is Mame what you meant?
I am just a bit confused by the last name Nevers for example George Nevers said what did George never say. Again you might have a reason you used Nevers but I think Neverson might be better
Things that I liked: I liked the background although I will be honest when I read the background I did not understand the missing Texas but I now believe that at the end of whatever reason they were in Europe they decided to get married. I also liked the dialog and structure of the piece. Great job.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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When people post their work I assume they are trying to improve their work. So when I write a review I try to find something I believe that can be improved and something I like. Please don't take my review negatively; I am only trying to help.
What I thought could be improved:
You wrote:
The two stood and gazed upon the 21,000 square foot, 34 room mansion. It was built by English architect, Sir Alfred Bringhum. It featured 10 bed rooms--including two master suites, 15 baths, 20 closets, 12 fireplaces, a ball room, and a 200 seat formal dining area. The back of the house showcased a lovely brook, many oak trees and formal gardens for hosting events.
I don't know how we concluded this by standing in front of the house looking at it.
You wrote:
"It's a surprise, Mame. Is all I can say."
I apologize but this is the only part of this I have read. Is Mame what you meant?
I am just a bit confused by the last name Nevers for example George Nevers said what did George never say. Again you might have a reason you used Nevers but I think Neverson might be better
Things that I liked: I liked the background although I will be honest when I read the background I did not understand the missing Texas but I now believe that at the end of whatever reason they were in Europe they decided to get married. I also liked the dialog and structure of the piece. Great job.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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You're the second reviewer who has spoke about the "The two stood and gazed..." So I'll change it. But I thought "They stood and gazed upon the 21,000 sq and then the narrator could say what was on the inside, but I guess since you're the second reviewer to complain, I guess I was wrong, so I'll just change that. And thank you for your honesty. Nevers is their name. Mame is a typo. It should be Mam.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good introduction. The tone is set from the start. The setting is revealed as well. Good transition between the events. Good character balance. Good smooth dialogue between the characters. The pace is nice and consistent as this piece seems real and has that real vibe going on. I also like the ending of this chapter because the way it ends makes me look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Good introduction. The tone is set from the start. The setting is revealed as well. Good transition between the events. Good character balance. Good smooth dialogue between the characters. The pace is nice and consistent as this piece seems real and has that real vibe going on. I also like the ending of this chapter because the way it ends makes me look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much for your fine review. I'm so glad you liked this chapter.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, amahra, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where nate and grace come home from their honeymoon to find a huge house given by grace's parents. a string of miscarriages cause problems and naming the first daughter is met with misunderstandings and anger. i enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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this is very well written, amahra, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where nate and grace come home from their honeymoon to find a huge house given by grace's parents. a string of miscarriages cause problems and naming the first daughter is met with misunderstandings and anger. i enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thank you, my friend for your kind review.
Comment from MERRY1
this is an interesting story. Would have liked a bit more of the difference between the two cultures. the type of cat was Cheshire not Chester. Fancy them naming the baby after his old flame. that will get the tongues wagging even if that wasn't the reason for Margaret' Well done
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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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this is an interesting story. Would have liked a bit more of the difference between the two cultures. the type of cat was Cheshire not Chester. Fancy them naming the baby after his old flame. that will get the tongues wagging even if that wasn't the reason for Margaret' Well done
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the correction and for your review. I appreciate you catching that.
Comment from onkughosh19
A story beautifully told....Mr and Mrs Nevers are very rich and are willing to do anything for the happiness of ther daughter, Grace.Nathan seems to be very fond of his wife but has not forgotten his lover,Margaret, afterwhom he wants to name their first child.Elizabeth, the doctor's wife is fond of Nathan and to side him tells a lie.THe plot is getting thicker.....
Very interesting....the readers attention is held throughout
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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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A story beautifully told....Mr and Mrs Nevers are very rich and are willing to do anything for the happiness of ther daughter, Grace.Nathan seems to be very fond of his wife but has not forgotten his lover,Margaret, afterwhom he wants to name their first child.Elizabeth, the doctor's wife is fond of Nathan and to side him tells a lie.THe plot is getting thicker.....
Very interesting....the readers attention is held throughout
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thank you for reading my new chapter. I really appreciate your review.