Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Your language is beautifully elegant. Great alliteration throughout. Your wilderness has a good rhythm when read aloud. Thanks for sharing. Les

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks, Les. I try to keep the alliteration to a bare minimum, especially in haiku. From what I've read, it is generally frowned upon. However, Americanized haiku widely accepts it, so...

Thanks for the great review, my friend.

reply by Glasstruth on 25-Jun-2014

You welcome. :)

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

This is a fun hiaku which creates vivid images of deer playing. I love the picture to enhance the words. Rivers are the lifeblood of the wild creatures. Every creature needs water.
Excellent alliteration in "resplendent river" and "flows free"
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks, Debi, I really am glad you liked it.

Comment from judester

Excellent

A wonderful little image in my mind Dean, I can just smell the wind through the pines. Good luck with the contest, cheers judester

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks, judester. That's what haiku is supposed to do, make a clear image that puts your reader in the scene. That's what I've been told, at least.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

A Haiku celebrating Nature in Her pristine state 'lush wilderness' enhanced with alliterative brushstrokes and complimented with a beautiful pic

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks a bunch, zanya. Glad you liked it.

Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

What . . . no horror?? Just teasing you. This is a darling haiku. We are rich with spotted fawns right now. A common sight, but always a welcome sight. Those baby deer really know how to frolic. Nicely penned, Dean.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Nope, I've never heard of a horror haiku (although, it does have a catchy ring to it, LOL), so I had to be nice, Green Lake Girl. It's hard, but I managed.

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

resplendent river
flows free through lush wilderness
whitetail yearlings play
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is spot on. Good alliteration with resplendent/river...flows/free. Clear message that is short and simple.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thank you, my brother.

Comment from Kaila Mari

Excellent

The Haiku, "resplendent river", has already been recognized and has achieved "All Time Best". It is a perfect Haiku with a river subject. Meets all requirements of prompt entry. Nicely done; God bless!

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2014

Thanks so much, Kaila. We'll see when the dust clears and the voting is done just how good folks thought it was...

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

This is a lovely river haiku with great - resplendent river to start it off.Even without the cute artwork your words paint a nice picture for us of this resplendent river.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thank you, Pearl. I'm glad you liked this brief jaunt into my lighter side.

Comment from Karen B.

Excellent

I love the imagery of your haiku, that first line evokes beauty and power in my mind, a nice contrast to the gentle play of whitetail yearlings. Nice alliteration and perfect artwork. Good luck in the voting booth!

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thank you, Karen. I appreciate it, and I'm very glad you enjoyed reading it.

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Excellent

Dean, I enjoyed reading then reviewing your river haiku writing prompt. Reminds me of my younger days spent in the forests sitting beside a meandering river. now and then I would catch a glimpse of a doe and her fawns. A sight nothing like it.

Well done Dean and I wish you much luck. Have a great day,,,,,,Jim

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2014

Thanks, Jim, and you're right. There's nothing quite like it.

God Bless~