Bed of Roses
a perfect moment39 total reviews
Comment from JJ Rowe
Ooooo nice! A different side of you I have yet to read. Beautiful job building imagery for this perfect moment. It was really good. Good luck!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Ooooo nice! A different side of you I have yet to read. Beautiful job building imagery for this perfect moment. It was really good. Good luck!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for the generous review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
You fooled me. SUch a romantic start, and then that creepy and very clever ending! But it needs a comma to make it clear that the red is from her blood. Add comma after the word WHITE.
The red roses, once white[,] contrast on her ivory skin.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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You fooled me. SUch a romantic start, and then that creepy and very clever ending! But it needs a comma to make it clear that the red is from her blood. Add comma after the word WHITE.
The red roses, once white[,] contrast on her ivory skin.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for the help and advice. Glad I got you. Lol much appreciated
Comment from robina1978
Lovely photo that complements your essay very well. You made love on a bed of roses. Nice pick you made and fulfilled the requirements. I did not see any mistakes. Best wishes for the prompt.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Lovely photo that complements your essay very well. You made love on a bed of roses. Nice pick you made and fulfilled the requirements. I did not see any mistakes. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for this gracious review. Much appreciated
Comment from Sis Cat
This is quite beautiful and descriptive. It is also visual, fragrant, romantic, passionate. What "A perfect moment in time and space, captured in my mind's eye for eternity." This is an excellent response to the Cat Stevens song title "Bed of Roses." Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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This is quite beautiful and descriptive. It is also visual, fragrant, romantic, passionate. What "A perfect moment in time and space, captured in my mind's eye for eternity." This is an excellent response to the Cat Stevens song title "Bed of Roses." Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for the great review. This is Bon Jovi now. Last one was Cat Stevens! Lol
Much appreciated
Comment from flylikeaneagle
I like the vision of the beautiful lady with your details. Love the roses. A time of peace and captured moments, forever young...so why are you leaving? This would make a good chapter in a book, you jet setter. Well written, I can see why you are in #2 spot and I am learning from masters like you! God bless.
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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I like the vision of the beautiful lady with your details. Love the roses. A time of peace and captured moments, forever young...so why are you leaving? This would make a good chapter in a book, you jet setter. Well written, I can see why you are in #2 spot and I am learning from masters like you! God bless.
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for your very gracious response. Much appreciated
Comment from alf collier
Hi Gareth. Wow, short and sweet. Your descriptive phrases are among the very best on this site and a joy to read. The leaving made so sad by the words, alf
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Hi Gareth. Wow, short and sweet. Your descriptive phrases are among the very best on this site and a joy to read. The leaving made so sad by the words, alf
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for the gracious compliments. Much appreciated
Comment from gypsycaravan
Your description of the lady reads like a painting and she can be pictured easily in the reader's eyes. Good job with this prompt.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Your description of the lady reads like a painting and she can be pictured easily in the reader's eyes. Good job with this prompt.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for the review. Much appreciated, as always.
Comment from happykat4
Contest rules for title and line.in writing followed. Very descriptive of lover, passion, description of place they made love. He will always see her,young and beautiful. Very good.
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Contest rules for title and line.in writing followed. Very descriptive of lover, passion, description of place they made love. He will always see her,young and beautiful. Very good.
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for this fine review. Much appreciated
Comment from mfowler
Reminiscent of the bath scene from 'American Beauty', but the girl hadn't been killed. You build us up to envisage a beautiful sex between lovers. Your detailed description of beauty is delightful and it all seems so serene. But, I know you too well. I was waiting for the twist but you left it so late, you caught me. Good flash. I'm still deciding whether you're a psychopath or a vampire.
Excellent piece.
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Reminiscent of the bath scene from 'American Beauty', but the girl hadn't been killed. You build us up to envisage a beautiful sex between lovers. Your detailed description of beauty is delightful and it all seems so serene. But, I know you too well. I was waiting for the twist but you left it so late, you caught me. Good flash. I'm still deciding whether you're a psychopath or a vampire.
Excellent piece.
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for the review. That was the image I had in my head too, and then the white roses leeching to red. I sometimes get accused of giving the game away too early! Take your pick as to what monster suits you best! Much appreciated.