Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the Rhyming Poetry writing prompt.
Your lovely verse is a wonderful tribute to Omar Kayyam.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

Thanks very much for the lovely comments and good wishes, Sharon.

Craig.

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

Thank you for this poetic introduction to this great man, Omar Khayyam, a scientist, a scholar and poet. I admired your rhyming, meter and cadence, a very well woven ode to a great man. Your author notes were very helpful. Thank you for sharing this excellent composition.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

Thanks for the very kind review, I'm glad you found value in my poem :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

a beauty CD. I was entertained and educated at the same time. a neat trick. I enjoy your style, straight to the point with a dash of whimsy. really great. behold the loving grape, so small, yet with the charge of twisting men's souls....meeshu

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

Thanks for the kind words. I'm glad you got some enjoyment from it :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Don't know much about the tentmaker, but rather enjoyed Fitzgerald's attempts to make sense of him. Even Paladin quoted Omar(Fitzgerald). Excellent post.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

Fitzgerald's translations are excellent, I think. Thanks for the kind review :) Craig

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

This was well written... The subject is Stellar. Love biographical posts. Like Rene Descartes, I enjoy wine here and there. Love the imagery. looking forward. yours diana

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

Thanks very much, Diana. I, too, enjoy a wine here and there... and there... and there... I'm only kidding, I'm not really a drunkard lol. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Cindy McIntyre

Excellent

I really enjoyed the play on words of "I think; therefore I am." So, your last stanza was a great one. I'll raise my glass and with a toast, I will celebrate YOU. Thank you for sharing your writing.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

Thanks, Cindy, for the lovely words - much appreciated; Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem and ode to Omar Khayyam. Many people say that the real poet comes out after a few glasses of wine. I will not know if itvis true because I never tried this theory.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

Me either, Sandra - maybe I should start? Thanks for the kind review - Craig

Comment from rama devi

Exceptional

GREAT PUN and closing twist. This got a chuckle out of me, but the sixer is more for the phenomenal rhyming and fine timing. This is one of the better entries in the rhyming contest. Good luck!

Even though it has reverse syntax in a line, which I am not a fan of, I want to give this a six for the rhymes and the humor too.

NOTES


Nishapur and endure--creative rhymes!

REVERSE SYNTAX WORKS OKAY HERE, BUT I SUGGEST USING COMMAS:

Astronomer(,) was he(,) of quite some note,


CLEVER LINE:
the proof lies in a calendar he wrote.


LOVE THIS RHYME PAIR:
For Omar was a proper vinipote-

to prove it, one need only heed this quote:



LOVE THE RHYME PAIR HERE TOO:
Thus says this truly wonderful Bacchant;

one luminary Persian bon vivant.


STANDING OVATION FOR THE CLOSING STANZA (AND RHYMES):

I raise my glass to celebrate his art,

in deference to old Rene Descartes;

and toast him with my very last iamb,

in playful jest- "I drink, therefore Khayyam".


witty closing AHA! Hee hee.

My only suggestion is the punctuation in the last stanza could be better (and the period should be inside the quote marks too). Example edit:


I raise my glass to celebrate his art

(in deference to old Rene Descartes)

and toast him with my very last iamb,

in playful jest: "I drink, therefore Khayyam."

Chuckling,
rd

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

Thanks very much for those catches, RD, and for the lovely, glowing review. I'm most grateful for your eagle eye :) Craig

reply by rama devi on 26-Mar-2018

Happy to help! Thanks, Craig. Best, rd :-)))

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Thank you Craig for sharing this poem. I did not know all these facts about him. You did a great job with the rhyme & smooth flow of lines. I love the last 2 lines. Your author notes are very informative. Thanks again. Jan

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

Thanks for reviewing, Jan. I really appreciate the kind comments. Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Super job on this. Love the beautiful artwork and your well-written lines which flow perfectly. The poem is amusing, too, as well as educational to readers with your author's notes. There may be a small typo here: "we learn we (he?) had a healthy love of wine. Marilyn

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018

You are the only person who picked that up, Marilyn, so thanks for the great catch. Thanks for the kind words as well. Craig