Comment from Susan Morritt

Average

I liked the overall tension set in the writing style, but "Kayla" turned into "Kyla" a few times, and I noticed a few more typos. Also, almost no contractions used. The character development for Helen and Kayla was great.

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 Comment Written 05-Jul-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2019

Thanks, Susan. I've inserted the 'a' in Kayla on the two occasions when it was missing. Thanks for pointing that out. Appreciated.

You mention some other typos. I've been through the chapter again and can't spot any. If you have time to specify them, that would be great.

I generally avoid contractions in the narrative but use them in dialogue when appropriate. I may be wrong, but I understand that's fairly standard practice.

Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Best wishes, Tony