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Heart Cafted Poems - 2020

Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Tattered But Not Done"
Musings of an old man -2020

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Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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This is a great patriotic poem to save our United States from those who hate everything she stands for! Those who taught and influenced our children to hate our country and history are traitors!

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Rebecca, thank you for this great validation and six-stars. I hope that we are still the majority and will finally vote for change.
reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 25-Jun-2020
    Me too!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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This is exactly the situation that is seen from outside the states:"We don't want the freedom you died for. We want
to tear down everything including history; so no one can
learn what price freedom costs; to live without
laws and cops; no honor, to let
freedom be, no more, no more!"
"Burn it Down, we say."
We know you are
angry, so are
we! America
Stand!"

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Iza thank you !
Comment from Minglement
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What an amazing entry for the 20 line poem contest. I love the patriotic tone and spirit of this, and your beautiful presentation and artwork. Well done. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest ;)

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Thank you so very much for the six-star validation and support of my rant.
reply by Minglement on 25-Jun-2020
    LOL - You are most welcome. Take care, Marcia
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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Not enough can be said about the outrageous acts that are happening. I am a Canadian and very interested in what happens in the U.S. because we eventually mirror your actions. Already we have a group rising "Black Students Matter." My God, I hope your leaders coalesce soon and do something about the lawlessness you are experiencing. It is Criminal!
Ralf So, don't stop writing your meaningful poems JLR.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Ralf, thank you! This Marxism movement is beyond frightening. They want to white wash history so we forget what the cost is to get our country back on even ground, Not perfect but not militant and lawless.
reply by Raffaelina Lowcock on 25-Jun-2020
    Who would have thought, after the strict years of dissing Communism you would see it rise in America.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
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Dear JLR, a masterful job you have done with crafting this post.
Not only have you delivered a powerful message, but also neatly fitted it into a 20 line poem with the additional challenge of the ascending and descending word count.
Bravo!

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Suzanna thank you for this kind review.
Comment from Monica Chaddick
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I love the message that you are conveying in your poem. The art work is very appropriate. I had trouble with the flow of the poem, but otherwise it was wonderful.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Monica, the flow is designed to make the reader feel the disruptive tone of the writings feelings. Thank you so much for the honest review.
Comment from BeasPeas
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Many people feel this way. We are silent. I'm glad you are not. We wait for sanity to return to our beautiful country, but no sanity comes. People around the world are dying to come to America while some American citizens who have it all... tear it apart. Marilyn

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Marilyn, thank you for this six-star review. It is truly amazing isn't that the migration to America is so strong if this country is so bad....
    wow, I don't think these young people could survive a day in Russia.
reply by BeasPeas on 25-Jun-2020
    Spoiled brats.
Comment from nomi338
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It would be a huge mistake to assume that African Americans hate America. The truth is that we more than a lot of people, love Anerica, would rather live here than any place else. What we hate is despit the many sacrifices we have made for America, we are still treated like we have done nothing but take from America. We have fought in wars where we were segregated, we have always paid our taxes, we do not need any extra reasons to be sent to jail. Most of us are law abiding, still arrested at the highest rate. Still, with all of this and more, we still love America, it is our home, it is our hope. The frustration is that anyone not black can make any aspersion about us that they choose and the majority of people believe it. I am not saying that any of this applies to you, but it breaks my heart that my statements are all too true.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Nomi, I am so very aware that there are a majority of people of color who truly love America, even when the system has not been so kind. My rant is about the ANTIFA and VANDALS and that are reflective of a herd mob mindset that are not protesting, they are destroying other peoples property and lives, I blame the money machine 24 hour news channels that replay the worst of scenes over and over days on end and never, ever interviewing the people that live in the middle of the brough haha and are in fear of their safety. I fear for anyone of the 98% of good cops of any color who's lives are on the line everyday and thrown into the same swamp as the 2% bad cops that should be thrown into prison. My family immigrated to the US when I was six years old, while white, I spoke with a brogue and I was very poor,so I know something about discrimination. I remember, August 28th 1963, when Dr King delivered his "I have a Dream" speech at the Lincoln memorial. I was thirteen and his speech as life transforming for me - Pray that GOD will rise up leaders of all colors and SHOUT THE VOICE OF REASON that we must change, America must change, but ALL have to respect and follow the law of the land. In closing, you and I could be the beginning of having what we all need to do = hearing one another's story, and say, I see the Godperson in you and we are good!
reply by nomi338 on 25-Jun-2020
    I thank you for your detailed and heartfelt response. I have read your past work and do not believe or think you to be a biased person. Like you I have very strong feelings about what is going on in our country rigt now. I am a veteran who can trace my ancestry in America all the way back to the 1600's. I have never been arrested or been in any kind of trouble with the law. I say all of this to say that I and you are alike in many ways.. I too was sickened by the visions of people looting from people who done nothing to deserve this. I will end here, but I have so much more to say.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Thank you for the service to our country, for your voice of reason and I offer my prayers that we can find a meaningful solution for all
reply by nomi338 on 25-Jun-2020
    Amen.
Comment from joycetreasures
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Hi JLR,
I pray you are doing well these days. Prayer is needed, so much more! You definitely met the poem's requirement. Your poem is very powerful and true in many ways. What is happening to our America? So many opinions and true feelings are on the rise. I like your honesty and true feelings how you feel? I enjoyed reading your poem to the end. I agree that somethings need to change. Thanks for sharing this HEARTFELT poem. Lovely presentation and format. I agree," America, Stand!!! Nicely done. Happy writing:-)

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Joyce, I know that discrimination runs rampant, not only in America but around the world. I spoke with a brogue and I was very poor, so I know something about discrimination. I remember, August 28th, 1963, when Dr. King delivered his "I have a Dream" speech at the Lincoln memorial. I was thirteen and his speech as life-transforming for me - Pray that GOD will rise up leaders of all colors and SHOUT THE VOICE OF REASON that we must change, America must change, but ALL have to respect and follow the law of the land. In closing, you and I could be the beginning of having what we all need to do = hearing one another's story, and say, I see the Godperson in you and we are good!
reply by joycetreasures on 25-Jun-2020
    Hi JLR,
    I appreciate you sharing a little of your story with me. Yes, we are good. I pray we will see a peaceful world one day for our children and grandchildren. I am an optimist, so I feel a change is coming for EVERYONE. We have to move forward with gladness in our hearts. Have a wonderful day.
Comment from jenn7475
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I love this, so meaning and true. How can people these days not respect the freedom we have. honor those that have fought for this country and the freedoms we get to have. I can not understand this newer generation and what is happening. It really scares me for our future generations, will there even be an America in the future. Great piece.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Jenn I am so very grateful for the six-star review, change will sooner than later come anfcalm things down.