Comment from RGstar

Excellent

I love tales of life, and as a fisherman in love with sea and fish, I found this a pleasure to read.
The imagery profound...a moment in time.
Good luck with this.
My best wishes.
RGstar

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks, RG. Nothing like a good fish tale.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Paul,

hahahahahaha! I don't blame you one bit - though with all those utensils that had to be used to kill the thing, it's a wonder there was anything left to mount! hahahaha Fun story!

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks, Robyn. You should see the finished product. There are a lot of scars.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this story/poem contest entry. I could visualize the action as I read. That's a sign of using great verbs. Thank you for sharing this entry with us and I want to wish you the best of luck.

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks, Barb. Always glad to share my poems.

Comment from Thatguypk

Excellent

There is great energy and almost a ballad quality to this fishy tale. Set it to music and go sing it in the local bar, It'll go down a treat. Very funny, enjoyable and well told. That must have been some almighty fish!
:-)
PK

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks, PK. It was so long that I had to hang it vertically on the wall.

Comment from Ethan Vandervelden

Exceptional

I loved this poem and the story it told! I was engaged while reading and found myself reading louder and louder as it went on.

My favorite parts below!

{He wrapped that fish line 'round my leg
And headed for deep water,
And I would not be here today
If I was too much shorter.} -- dramatic, humorous and exciting!


{So after that encounter,
And I got all my repairs,
I then went after safer game
Like hunting grizzly bears.} --loved it as the idea of hunting grizzly bears seems safer!

Really good fishing story told very well! Thank you for sharing poetry in a fun and exciting way!

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks, Ethan. That first stanza that you mentioned was also one of my favorites.

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem entry for the contest. It is well done in rhyme and has great visuals. I love the fun ending of taking on grizzly bears
Good luck in the contest.
Take care and regards,Mary

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks, Mary. I haven't found any grizzly bears yet.

Comment from the13thpoet

Excellent

Hello Paul a happy Friday to you, I enjoyed your share a story in a poem entry. Your flow and rhymes were great and the way you told the story created great visuals, good job and good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks for the review. Nothing like a good fish story.

Comment from oliver818

Excellent

This is quite a funny poem, I love the ending where trout aren't enough, you have to go after grizzlies too. That made laugh. The imagery is particularly good , I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks, Oliver. The trout was too much for me.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

I like how the Speaker sets the scene by first referring to the trophy on the wall and then telling us about the pond and the square-tailed trout he was after. Great action! Easy to visualize the entire event. I especially like the subtle humor sustained throughout. Rod

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thanks, Rod. The trophy didn't come out that well. It was kind of banged up.

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Good morning, Paul!
What a hoot!
I read your poem aloud, and I smiled as I did so!
Lots of vivid imagery and some outstanding lines such as:
In water deep and murky
With those little flecks of foam,
I knew that it was here where that
Old squaretail made his home.

and:

He wrapped that fish line 'round my leg
And headed for deep water,
And I would not be here today
If I was too much shorter.

Reminded me of fishing with my father a lifetime ago. Will never forget my mild-mannered father exclaiming, "Diane! You're more work than one of my goddammed roofers" when I wouldn't or couldn't bait my line or touch the catch! Good times!

Thanks for the smiles!
diane

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 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

Thank you for the smiles I got when reading about you and your father.