Precious Gems: An Anthology
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Family Ties"A Rhyming Collection of Treasured Works
51 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
I love the message, I love the structure - rhythm, rhyme - I love the imagery - this is beautiful, down to the painting.
the Life's cards verse is probably my favorite image - and the ending is stunning!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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I love the message, I love the structure - rhythm, rhyme - I love the imagery - this is beautiful, down to the painting.
the Life's cards verse is probably my favorite image - and the ending is stunning!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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Thanks so very much adew. Your words are too kind, but I am very glad you liked this one! xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
Met criteria fro the contest and put an intersting peronsl twist on that I ireally liked. the last phrase is what I really liked about this poem:
"In fear I had fallen from their family tree
In safety, I landed; in truth, I walked free"
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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Met criteria fro the contest and put an intersting peronsl twist on that I ireally liked. the last phrase is what I really liked about this poem:
"In fear I had fallen from their family tree
In safety, I landed; in truth, I walked free"
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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Thanks SJB for your review and good luck wishes. I confess to being a bit fond of that last couplet; sometimes those little endings seem to fit. I'm glad you enjoyed this one xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from mmichelle97219
This has a terrific meter and even a lyrical flow. It just sings in soft but definite flute like notes, and the reader can connect and roll around in the words comfrtably. I thought it was very cool. Good luck in the contest.
Michelle
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This has a terrific meter and even a lyrical flow. It just sings in soft but definite flute like notes, and the reader can connect and roll around in the words comfrtably. I thought it was very cool. Good luck in the contest.
Michelle
Comment Written 29-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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Aw, thanks buddy! I always love to get a positive review from you, and this one has left a BIG smile on my face. You have a great day with those six rug-rats of yours (an Aussie term for 'kids'!!) xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from eveeator
wow I think this is a very strong entry, you have filled the contest requirement and then done some more as this piece is lovely, sad, happy, encouraging, freedom, a life to decide what, when, who, why and how, great writing
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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wow I think this is a very strong entry, you have filled the contest requirement and then done some more as this piece is lovely, sad, happy, encouraging, freedom, a life to decide what, when, who, why and how, great writing
Comment Written 29-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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Yes, that's what I wanted to bring out here. You don't have to dump your family to be happy; just get out from under those family influences/ties that no longer serve you. I'm glad you enjoyed this one and 'got' what it was saying. Have a great day! xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from honeytree
Very interesting words and yes it does benefit one to lead their own lives as much as possible. We are all different when we live our lives, we are individuals and think and talk as one.
"I ran, skipped along, jumped high, and I squealed
While layers of my old facade were peeled
With joyful abandon, I built a huge pile
Compiled of years of cold sorrow and trial"
I feel so glad for this person who is so happy now.
I also feel that one copes better in life learning
everyday on this journey on earth.
I loved every word written as a great learning curve for many people.
Wonderful words written.
Honeytree
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Very interesting words and yes it does benefit one to lead their own lives as much as possible. We are all different when we live our lives, we are individuals and think and talk as one.
"I ran, skipped along, jumped high, and I squealed
While layers of my old facade were peeled
With joyful abandon, I built a huge pile
Compiled of years of cold sorrow and trial"
I feel so glad for this person who is so happy now.
I also feel that one copes better in life learning
everyday on this journey on earth.
I loved every word written as a great learning curve for many people.
Wonderful words written.
Honeytree
Comment Written 29-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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It is all about learning who you are and sometimes this can take years to achieve. Family is, after all, the stepping stone out into the big world, then it's up to us. I appreciate your kind words here, and the encouragement you give is awesome. Thanks so much Honeytree! xoxoxoxxoo
Comment from charliecheshire
A really descriptive piece that i felt was very deep and meaningful. Good pace and style.
Thanks
Charlie
The Cheese People
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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A really descriptive piece that i felt was very deep and meaningful. Good pace and style.
Thanks
Charlie
The Cheese People
Comment Written 29-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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Thanks Mr Cheese Person! Good to see you again, and I'm glad you liked this one! Love from Ms PacaPunch xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from joan marie
A wonderful take on "the grass is always greener on the other side" At least that what I felt. So often, we count what it is we don't have instead of enjoying what we do. Good early morning read. It's 6:am here in Florida and already too hot! Terrific read. joan marie
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A wonderful take on "the grass is always greener on the other side" At least that what I felt. So often, we count what it is we don't have instead of enjoying what we do. Good early morning read. It's 6:am here in Florida and already too hot! Terrific read. joan marie
Comment Written 29-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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You have an amazing and different perception of things joan marie and I have to say I LIKE IT. Applied to this poem, I feel it's been given another dimension - something most of us love to see (except for those who get snotty when their 'intended meaning' is not what people get!). 6am and hot already, huh? We're at about 24 degrees which is about 70 farenheit, so should be another warm one here. Glad you enjoyed this one my friend and I appreciate your review and your perceptive comments xoxoxoxoxo
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I always thought writing poetry was cool because people could interpret it in their own way. Relate it to their own lives. I think it's neat I could get 2 for 1!!! LOL I review more by relating to the poem. I am not experienced technically enough except some forms, punctuation, and of course the Typo. I want people to read my work and have a brain storm or remember something they hadn't remembered in a long time. Learn something new from a different part of the world. Writing is my favorite form of communication. jm
Comment from jack silver
perfectly written poem here. absolutely loved it. for me i can't break any family ties because the only two people that could be counted as family don't wish to know me. i have tried to fix it but the more i try the harder things seem to get when, my step dads in prison for killing my mum and raping my sister. and my three sisters are dead. along wwith my niece, wife and unborn child.... anyway i just i enjoyed reading the poem and maybe i will read more.
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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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perfectly written poem here. absolutely loved it. for me i can't break any family ties because the only two people that could be counted as family don't wish to know me. i have tried to fix it but the more i try the harder things seem to get when, my step dads in prison for killing my mum and raping my sister. and my three sisters are dead. along wwith my niece, wife and unborn child.... anyway i just i enjoyed reading the poem and maybe i will read more.
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jack
Comment Written 29-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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Your review, although encouraging and excellent, makes me sad the further I read. You've suffered an enormous blow in your life Mr Jack and I sure hope you can pick up the pieces, dust yourself off and give yourself something precious in this life. You sorely deserve it. Good luck, best wishes from Down Under and as said, I hope things work out for you xoxoxoxoxoxo PS: Thanks for the awesome review too!
Comment from fayesh
I enjoyed your take on the sentence prompt, "I have fallen from the family tree." The ending was especially well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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I enjoyed your take on the sentence prompt, "I have fallen from the family tree." The ending was especially well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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Thanks so much fayesh. It's great you 'caught' the ending! xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from earthlybeing
This is a great poem and is written will. So true that sometimes family can be overbearing expecting to be in control. Well done. Thanks, Jeanette
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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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This is a great poem and is written will. So true that sometimes family can be overbearing expecting to be in control. Well done. Thanks, Jeanette
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Comment Written 29-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2008
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Thanks so much, as always my friend xoxoxoxoxoxo