Writings From the Heart
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good flow, good meter, good form, a wonderful picture. i think it is sad when people won't try to reach their full potential and criticize others for trying
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this is very well written with good flow, good meter, good form, a wonderful picture. i think it is sad when people won't try to reach their full potential and criticize others for trying
Comment Written 08-May-2010
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thank you for reading sweet
Comment from Fish
Sadness is:
Or forget the comma as it's not necessary.
When the phoenix rises it does not require
an apostrophe.
I like this but I really wish that you
would put periods at the end of sentences
and proper punctuation where it belongs.
You're quite smart and it ain't that hard.
:) fish
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Sadness is:
Or forget the comma as it's not necessary.
When the phoenix rises it does not require
an apostrophe.
I like this but I really wish that you
would put periods at the end of sentences
and proper punctuation where it belongs.
You're quite smart and it ain't that hard.
:) fish
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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ok ok i will thanks for reading fish....smiling
Comment from Ann Smith
Isn't it amazing how others can pull you down with their bad attitudes? I think sometimes people criticize others because it makes them feel better about themselves. My favorite line is 'real friends will stay, lockd deep in your heart.' The poem has good rhythm and flow. ann
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Isn't it amazing how others can pull you down with their bad attitudes? I think sometimes people criticize others because it makes them feel better about themselves. My favorite line is 'real friends will stay, lockd deep in your heart.' The poem has good rhythm and flow. ann
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you ann
Comment from jgirlie152
Extremely well written poem, showing sadness to be an actual malady keeping one from going on with the enjoyment life offers, to be strong and look ahead. I enjoyed reading this.
Joan
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Extremely well written poem, showing sadness to be an actual malady keeping one from going on with the enjoyment life offers, to be strong and look ahead. I enjoyed reading this.
Joan
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you Joan for reading, Gary
Comment from Josipher32
deepwater,
"Writings From the Heart" was a well written poem. You put a lot of thought into your carefully chosen words. Thanks for sharing.
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deepwater,
"Writings From the Heart" was a well written poem. You put a lot of thought into your carefully chosen words. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you, for reading my friend
Comment from Alpha Female
Very strong poem, steady cadence and rhythm, it flows well and the message is clear, I also think the picture fits the writing. Good job.
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Very strong poem, steady cadence and rhythm, it flows well and the message is clear, I also think the picture fits the writing. Good job.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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Thank you Alpha
Comment from connied
Good strong message--the wise will know!!
You have it within you, to reach and fly high
So remove your defenses, go reach for the sky
Go forward with gusto show life what you are
The phoenix that rise's, now claim your new start
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Good strong message--the wise will know!!
You have it within you, to reach and fly high
So remove your defenses, go reach for the sky
Go forward with gusto show life what you are
The phoenix that rise's, now claim your new start
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you connied
Comment from Leigh Ann
Good work. There is one grammatical error, rise's,should just be rises. But other than that the message is clear. We need to give life all the energy we can, respect the gifts we are blessed to have and use them before its too late. I appreciate the sentiment of this poem very much. Leigh
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Good work. There is one grammatical error, rise's,should just be rises. But other than that the message is clear. We need to give life all the energy we can, respect the gifts we are blessed to have and use them before its too late. I appreciate the sentiment of this poem very much. Leigh
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thanks Leigh for reading
Comment from Brantley88
I am particularly found of, "Too lazy to do what's in your own reach, but criticize others on their fight to succeed." This is well said, and very true. I see you are a Kipling fan. I have often quoted the last line of THE OUTLAWS;
They paid the price to reach their goal
Across a world in flame;
But their own hate slew their own soul
Before that victory came.
I visit Houston a couple of times a year. This year we will be on the "hunt", as it were, for something out of the ordinary. We might be getting old, but that doesn't mean there's no adventure left in us.
I don't know you, GW, but I urge you to keep developing your talent. You are going to make one hell of a poet.
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I am particularly found of, "Too lazy to do what's in your own reach, but criticize others on their fight to succeed." This is well said, and very true. I see you are a Kipling fan. I have often quoted the last line of THE OUTLAWS;
They paid the price to reach their goal
Across a world in flame;
But their own hate slew their own soul
Before that victory came.
I visit Houston a couple of times a year. This year we will be on the "hunt", as it were, for something out of the ordinary. We might be getting old, but that doesn't mean there's no adventure left in us.
I don't know you, GW, but I urge you to keep developing your talent. You are going to make one hell of a poet.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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Thank you Brantley for your responce and comments, Gary, and for reading my work
Comment from Bellringer
Love your opening line. I was a little lost on the use of commas in that opening line. Also the apostrophe over rises (rise's) is a concern. But your ovwerall meaning is inspiring.
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Love your opening line. I was a little lost on the use of commas in that opening line. Also the apostrophe over rises (rise's) is a concern. But your ovwerall meaning is inspiring.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you Bell