Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "old cowboys"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from words
You tell quite a story in just a few lines.
I especially liked:What made it end so sudden was, the cowboy just got old
She was younger by a decade her life was riding high
The cowboy liked his ranchland life and had to pick a side
Love and life is like this ... we often have to make a choice, pick a side and romantic love often does not survive our choices.
A wise and moving write.
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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You tell quite a story in just a few lines.
I especially liked:What made it end so sudden was, the cowboy just got old
She was younger by a decade her life was riding high
The cowboy liked his ranchland life and had to pick a side
Love and life is like this ... we often have to make a choice, pick a side and romantic love often does not survive our choices.
A wise and moving write.
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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thank you words for reading this
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a sad tale of the lost love of an old cowboy. The poem has a distinctly ballad-like flair that is charming. Best wishes to you, Jeanie Mercer
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This is a sad tale of the lost love of an old cowboy. The poem has a distinctly ballad-like flair that is charming. Best wishes to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 13-May-2010
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thank you jeanie for reading
Comment from skye
We all have a picture in our head of how our lives are, should be, could be.
This poem is wonderful, pointing out the differences in viewpoints about a shared life.
Excellent rhymes, rhythm, and imagery.
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We all have a picture in our head of how our lives are, should be, could be.
This poem is wonderful, pointing out the differences in viewpoints about a shared life.
Excellent rhymes, rhythm, and imagery.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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thank you skye for reading
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
Another thought provoking piece, Gary. I enjoyed it.
Rich houses and the finer side was not what he had planned
Between the working days and late, late nights her life was so insane>>great lines.
Good job.
Isaiah Ramesses
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Another thought provoking piece, Gary. I enjoyed it.
Rich houses and the finer side was not what he had planned
Between the working days and late, late nights her life was so insane>>great lines.
Good job.
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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thank you Isaiah for reading
Comment from Leigh Ann
A lovely but sad story of how two people can love one another but still not be sould mates. They were from two different generations and two different worlds, he a cowboy, she a city girl. Sometimes it absolutely happens this way. Great writing. Leigh Ann
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A lovely but sad story of how two people can love one another but still not be sould mates. They were from two different generations and two different worlds, he a cowboy, she a city girl. Sometimes it absolutely happens this way. Great writing. Leigh Ann
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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thank you Leigh Ann
Comment from mountainwriter49
This is a very well written, poignant love poem
that reminds the reader that not all relationships
end happily for reasons, at times, beyond our
control. I liked the way you developed the story
line.
I do have one or two suggestions for you to consider:
The teaching[s] from our fathers that carry us this far
Thanks for sharing. -ray
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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This is a very well written, poignant love poem
that reminds the reader that not all relationships
end happily for reasons, at times, beyond our
control. I liked the way you developed the story
line.
I do have one or two suggestions for you to consider:
The teaching[s] from our fathers that carry us this far
Thanks for sharing. -ray
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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thank you Ray
Comment from Njorgensen
I thought this was really good reading. It flowed well and carried through til the end. I like these kind of poems where a story is told.
Nicely done.
Nancy
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I thought this was really good reading. It flowed well and carried through til the end. I like these kind of poems where a story is told.
Nicely done.
Nancy
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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thank you Nancy
Comment from fionageorge
What a sad poem about the trials and tribulations of an old cowboy who fell in love with the wrong woman. Is it really about age? Or is it about some women (and men) want the best and will discard what has had its use?
Well written, it flows freely, with excellent rhythm and rhyme.
Warmest regards,
Marijke
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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What a sad poem about the trials and tribulations of an old cowboy who fell in love with the wrong woman. Is it really about age? Or is it about some women (and men) want the best and will discard what has had its use?
Well written, it flows freely, with excellent rhythm and rhyme.
Warmest regards,
Marijke
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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thank you Marijke for reading
Comment from missy98writer
deepwater,
Emotional poetry you've written. Excellent imagery, descriptive writing and great narrative. I like the photo or art work you used. I especially liked:
Rich houses and the finer side was not what he had planned
Between the working days and late, late nights her life was so insane
Both tried to close that gap in life but came from different worlds
A logical man his simple life, the ranch was all he had
Thanks for sharing your wonderful rhyming poem. . .Melissa.
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deepwater,
Emotional poetry you've written. Excellent imagery, descriptive writing and great narrative. I like the photo or art work you used. I especially liked:
Rich houses and the finer side was not what he had planned
Between the working days and late, late nights her life was so insane
Both tried to close that gap in life but came from different worlds
A logical man his simple life, the ranch was all he had
Thanks for sharing your wonderful rhyming poem. . .Melissa.
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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thank you for reading Melissa
Comment from connied
Good advice---
sad and poignant like an old cowboy song!!
The trials and tribulations that make us who we are
The teaching from our fathers that carry us this far
The heartaches we must carry to make it day by day
The love from that woman, he lost along the way
reply by the author on 13-May-2010
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Good advice---
sad and poignant like an old cowboy song!!
The trials and tribulations that make us who we are
The teaching from our fathers that carry us this far
The heartaches we must carry to make it day by day
The love from that woman, he lost along the way
Comment Written 12-May-2010
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thank you connied for reading