Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Her life she must endure"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from bkrighter
I like this poem a great deal. The cowgirl, like most of us, lives with the consequences of decisions and commitments she makes.
I found the use of her and she in the title a little awkward. I prefer the use of 'the' in place of 'her' but it doesn't quite carry the same weight. Perhaps changing it entirely to something like "The Modern Cowgirl's Life"?
Steve
reply by the author on 28-May-2010
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I like this poem a great deal. The cowgirl, like most of us, lives with the consequences of decisions and commitments she makes.
I found the use of her and she in the title a little awkward. I prefer the use of 'the' in place of 'her' but it doesn't quite carry the same weight. Perhaps changing it entirely to something like "The Modern Cowgirl's Life"?
Steve
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for the comments bk
Comment from kintesiegel
this is an interesting poem that does not resonate with me. the cowgirls i knew where part of a big family -- the core and not anything like you describe. but you give me another perspective:Her cowgirl ways of pearls and lace replaced with the Wal-Mart store
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this is an interesting poem that does not resonate with me. the cowgirls i knew where part of a big family -- the core and not anything like you describe. but you give me another perspective:Her cowgirl ways of pearls and lace replaced with the Wal-Mart store
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for reading Kintesiegel
Comment from Gert sherwood
Good day to you deepwater
Now to me your poem shows a girl who knows how to cope with the life she has chosen, being a lonely cowgirl.
I love the picture it shows how peaceful she is with her life being a cow girl.
smiles
Gert
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Good day to you deepwater
Now to me your poem shows a girl who knows how to cope with the life she has chosen, being a lonely cowgirl.
I love the picture it shows how peaceful she is with her life being a cow girl.
smiles
Gert
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for reading Gert
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You are welcome
Gerty
Comment from Gideon Roth
Great job once again. The whole thing was well done but these lines at the end really were great:
Her cowgirl ways of pearls and lace replaced with the Wal-Mart store
Her fancy ways long gone with age,
Her life she must endure
Best of success with future submissions...Gideon
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Great job once again. The whole thing was well done but these lines at the end really were great:
Her cowgirl ways of pearls and lace replaced with the Wal-Mart store
Her fancy ways long gone with age,
Her life she must endure
Best of success with future submissions...Gideon
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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again thank you for reading
Comment from rmdelta
deepwater,
wow, what a combination of feelings this exposed in me. Great descriptives you chose to use allow us vivid imagery. Powerful poem, my friend.
REggie
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deepwater,
wow, what a combination of feelings this exposed in me. Great descriptives you chose to use allow us vivid imagery. Powerful poem, my friend.
REggie
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thank you RE
Comment from thequillman
Deepwater, another fine piece by your pen. I like the way that you made the cowgirl current. I can relate to the walmart experience. good Job.
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Deepwater, another fine piece by your pen. I like the way that you made the cowgirl current. I can relate to the walmart experience. good Job.
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thank you for reading quill
Comment from Ronni
Interesting reflection on a lonely cowgirl's life,
comparing with the early years to ths latter lonelier
ones. Paradise does not last forever, and if it
weren't for memories, we'd truly perish sooner and
oftener than we do. Great write.
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Interesting reflection on a lonely cowgirl's life,
comparing with the early years to ths latter lonelier
ones. Paradise does not last forever, and if it
weren't for memories, we'd truly perish sooner and
oftener than we do. Great write.
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thank you Ronni
Comment from Amicus
Although specifically targeting the cowgirl, this is a smooth flowing portrait of the life of any working class mother whose mate's work or service takes him away from home. Having to do the tasks of single parenthood without being single and to live apart from one's mate for long periods of time is certainly a lonely and frustrating lifestyle and your use of the word endure drives this home. Well done but for your use of the possessive where the plural is needed ...drop the apostrophe in cowgirls and things for grammatical correctness.
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Although specifically targeting the cowgirl, this is a smooth flowing portrait of the life of any working class mother whose mate's work or service takes him away from home. Having to do the tasks of single parenthood without being single and to live apart from one's mate for long periods of time is certainly a lonely and frustrating lifestyle and your use of the word endure drives this home. Well done but for your use of the possessive where the plural is needed ...drop the apostrophe in cowgirls and things for grammatical correctness.
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for the good comments Amicus
Comment from words
How interesting.
I had never thought of a cowgirl's life this way:
Her cowgirl ways of pearls and lace replaced with the Wal-Mart store
Had always assumed it was more of a life of jeans, cowboy boots and open sky.
An interesting tale of realities versus fantasy.
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How interesting.
I had never thought of a cowgirl's life this way:
Her cowgirl ways of pearls and lace replaced with the Wal-Mart store
Had always assumed it was more of a life of jeans, cowboy boots and open sky.
An interesting tale of realities versus fantasy.
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for reading and the comments words
Comment from Addy García
This poem shows the reality of the woman to put aside our own dreams to help fulfill the dreams of husband and children.
But children are the compensation of our efforts and the realization of our dreams.
ADDY GARCIA
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This poem shows the reality of the woman to put aside our own dreams to help fulfill the dreams of husband and children.
But children are the compensation of our efforts and the realization of our dreams.
ADDY GARCIA
Comment Written 28-May-2010
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thanks for reading Addy