Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 " Special forces soldier"A book of Poetry & Writing
60 total reviews
Comment from hfriscia
This is a interesting piece to read...The flow is good, very easy to read...I like you did in this work, very informative...
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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This is a interesting piece to read...The flow is good, very easy to read...I like you did in this work, very informative...
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you for your comment and review hfriscia
Comment from Gideon Roth
This was very well done. It is a serious narrative but very realistic of what the special forces and many regular military units have to endure during service to their country. I salute you and all those who have sacrifice greatly to serve in such capacities. Well done...Gideon
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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This was very well done. It is a serious narrative but very realistic of what the special forces and many regular military units have to endure during service to their country. I salute you and all those who have sacrifice greatly to serve in such capacities. Well done...Gideon
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you for your welcome review Gideon
Comment from JimLee
Thank you for this real description of war. While enemies claim the obey the rule of war we know they don't.
America produces strong steadfast soldiers that do give their life to save others. Women have no place in war.
Frankly I am not sure the even belong in the military.
Everything about war and the military must be brutal in order to survive. Women are nurturers and teachers, not warriors.
I like your writing and your attitude!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Thank you for this real description of war. While enemies claim the obey the rule of war we know they don't.
America produces strong steadfast soldiers that do give their life to save others. Women have no place in war.
Frankly I am not sure the even belong in the military.
Everything about war and the military must be brutal in order to survive. Women are nurturers and teachers, not warriors.
I like your writing and your attitude!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you JimLee for the review and comment GW
Comment from Pili Pubul
My friend, your story is very well written , you gave us a powerful inside into the realities of the life of soldiers and the brutality of war. Excellent.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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My friend, your story is very well written , you gave us a powerful inside into the realities of the life of soldiers and the brutality of war. Excellent.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you Pili for your review GW
Comment from Alpha Female
Sad, horrific and I know very true. You did a wonderful job of bringing the emotions out for the reader to feel right along with you.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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Sad, horrific and I know very true. You did a wonderful job of bringing the emotions out for the reader to feel right along with you.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you for your welcome review Alpha
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you're welcome
Comment from dportwood
deepwater,
Your descriptions are vivid and, unfortunately, are accurate in many cases.
I noticed these items you may wish to edit:
Sierra Alpha Sierra soldier's Carry
should be:
Sierra Alpha Sierra soldiers carry
Your training was brutal, fact 75 % have dropped out or are injured
should be:
Your training was brutal, 75% dropped out or were injured
Now the morning comes that you make the grade and to see what you become
should be:
Now the morning comes that you make the grade and see what you have become
Operate at night hide during the day hoping there's no
should be:
Operate at night, hide during the day, hoping there's no
killing 2 of your team the game's over
should be:
killing two of your team. The game's over
No sleep but more beatings no food, water just beatings,
should be:
No sleep, but more beatings, no food or water, just beatings
Duane
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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deepwater,
Your descriptions are vivid and, unfortunately, are accurate in many cases.
I noticed these items you may wish to edit:
Sierra Alpha Sierra soldier's Carry
should be:
Sierra Alpha Sierra soldiers carry
Your training was brutal, fact 75 % have dropped out or are injured
should be:
Your training was brutal, 75% dropped out or were injured
Now the morning comes that you make the grade and to see what you become
should be:
Now the morning comes that you make the grade and see what you have become
Operate at night hide during the day hoping there's no
should be:
Operate at night, hide during the day, hoping there's no
killing 2 of your team the game's over
should be:
killing two of your team. The game's over
No sleep but more beatings no food, water just beatings,
should be:
No sleep, but more beatings, no food or water, just beatings
Duane
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thanks for the comments Duane and the review
Comment from Kingsland
This was a pretty intense piece of writing, but I know for a fact that these thing have happened and will happen again. War is such a fruitless pursuit. Fought by brave souls that will give their all. I found this piece to be well written and to hinge on the truth of what really happens... John
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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This was a pretty intense piece of writing, but I know for a fact that these thing have happened and will happen again. War is such a fruitless pursuit. Fought by brave souls that will give their all. I found this piece to be well written and to hinge on the truth of what really happens... John
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thanks for the review and your comments John GW
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is so intense. I really don't believe in women fighting in the war, but that's just my feelings. I don't know how most men do it. It has to be the most frightening thing in the world. I admire and respect anyone in the armed forces. My prayers and heart go out to each of them. It's always an honor to know one. This story is so expressive and written with the knowledge of truth. That's obvious. This is an excellent read, God bless you!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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This is so intense. I really don't believe in women fighting in the war, but that's just my feelings. I don't know how most men do it. It has to be the most frightening thing in the world. I admire and respect anyone in the armed forces. My prayers and heart go out to each of them. It's always an honor to know one. This story is so expressive and written with the knowledge of truth. That's obvious. This is an excellent read, God bless you!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you for your welcome review and comments Harly
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You are very welcome. I hope you have a blessed day. Marilyn
Comment from missy98writer
deepwater,
Your story is well written and a riveting read. Vivid imagery, excellent narrative, and very descriptive writing. I especially enjoyed the lines:
Naked in a cold wet room hands and feet tied, kicked and beaten half to death
Name, rank and number is given again followed by more beating and kicks
Food and water denied and forget cries for help, you are captive
For the first time you?re on your own, split from the team, survival mode
No sleep but more beatings no food, water just beatings, you think of home
Profound writing in your story. You're a very talented writing and it shines through in your poetry or writing.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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deepwater,
Your story is well written and a riveting read. Vivid imagery, excellent narrative, and very descriptive writing. I especially enjoyed the lines:
Naked in a cold wet room hands and feet tied, kicked and beaten half to death
Name, rank and number is given again followed by more beating and kicks
Food and water denied and forget cries for help, you are captive
For the first time you?re on your own, split from the team, survival mode
No sleep but more beatings no food, water just beatings, you think of home
Profound writing in your story. You're a very talented writing and it shines through in your poetry or writing.
Melissa.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you for your review Melissa
Comment from dragonqueen1983
this short piece is very factual. i cant say i like it but that is becuase of the subject matter. the point is that it is rea. well done
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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this short piece is very factual. i cant say i like it but that is becuase of the subject matter. the point is that it is rea. well done
Comment Written 12-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2010
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thank you for your review dragon