Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Begin Again
Barbara,
What one of your female readers wouldn't want to jump in and take her place..so fairytale and yet believable ...something we all wish would happen to us. Wonderful chapter.
Carol
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Barbara,
What one of your female readers wouldn't want to jump in and take her place..so fairytale and yet believable ...something we all wish would happen to us. Wonderful chapter.
Carol
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I alway enjoy hearing from you.
Comment from FredCollingwood
Sara sound like she's a hottie. I don't know what to think of Joe. I have the feeling she's out of his league. He's a bit overboard. I'm not sure I trust him.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Sara sound like she's a hottie. I don't know what to think of Joe. I have the feeling she's out of his league. He's a bit overboard. I'm not sure I trust him.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Joe does have some bad habits and we will see them soon. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi barbara,
This entire chapter is so sweet and romantic. Sounds like Sara has found the perfect man and what a perfect gentleman he is to care so much for her feelings, protecting her from the years of small town gossipers.
Your chapter is well written with a good flow. A very enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.
Becky
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Hi barbara,
This entire chapter is so sweet and romantic. Sounds like Sara has found the perfect man and what a perfect gentleman he is to care so much for her feelings, protecting her from the years of small town gossipers.
Your chapter is well written with a good flow. A very enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.
Becky
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I made the time to read your latest chapter this morning of your terrific book 'Another Pretty Face.' I adore Joe he is so sweet and polite. Does this guy have bad traits? He's a real gem. The kiss between him and Sarah is so sweet. Wonderful characterization, excellent narrative, natural dialogue, and great pace. Here are some examples of your engaging and descriptive writing style:
"Let me look at you." He circled around her, sighed at her flat stomach, and perfectly flared hips. Wow! What a figure! "You look fantastic. That dress makes your eyes sparkle."
She's about five feet six inches tall and weighs maybe one hundred twenty pounds. His eyes continued searching her petite body. That strapless gown shows a slight muscle definition in her arms and upper back. Probably from the lifting, she does at the hardware store. "When the florist delivered them, did you smile?"
Joe shook his head and sighed. "This is the first time I've polished a lady's nails." Under his breath he added, "What Task Force men won't do for the women in their lives?" He reached his hand out. "Hand me that remover." With a cotton ball, he rubbed. "Can I add this to my resume?"
At least it's not the little finger. The one she's wrapped me around. Joe admired the fresh coat of polish. "Looks good. Can we go, now? I'm afraid of what else you have for me to do." His grin reflected how much he enjoyed teasing her.
"My shoulders are broad and strong." He put his arm around her waist and drew her close. "Anytime you need to lean on them, I'm here for you."
"See those men sitting over there?" She patted his hand and glanced toward the classmates. After he nodded, she said, "Not one of them holds a candle to you." With her head tilted, she smiled. "Not only are you the most handsome man here, but you're always a perfect gentleman."
"You should never admit that. Not all uniformed men are gentlemen." He stood, walked toward her, and held his hand for her to take. "Care to dance?" He led her to a small open area between the tables. As he put his arms around her, he kissed her.
Ginger appeared beside them. "Excuse me. I don't mean to interrupt this little dance, but the ballroom is already set for dancing. Think you can wait an hour?"
Ginger is a kill joy. A marvelous chapter and a entertaining read. I tied to give you a six but I'm restricted from rendering you a six. I definitely look forward to your next chapter. . .Melissa!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Barbara,
I made the time to read your latest chapter this morning of your terrific book 'Another Pretty Face.' I adore Joe he is so sweet and polite. Does this guy have bad traits? He's a real gem. The kiss between him and Sarah is so sweet. Wonderful characterization, excellent narrative, natural dialogue, and great pace. Here are some examples of your engaging and descriptive writing style:
"Let me look at you." He circled around her, sighed at her flat stomach, and perfectly flared hips. Wow! What a figure! "You look fantastic. That dress makes your eyes sparkle."
She's about five feet six inches tall and weighs maybe one hundred twenty pounds. His eyes continued searching her petite body. That strapless gown shows a slight muscle definition in her arms and upper back. Probably from the lifting, she does at the hardware store. "When the florist delivered them, did you smile?"
Joe shook his head and sighed. "This is the first time I've polished a lady's nails." Under his breath he added, "What Task Force men won't do for the women in their lives?" He reached his hand out. "Hand me that remover." With a cotton ball, he rubbed. "Can I add this to my resume?"
At least it's not the little finger. The one she's wrapped me around. Joe admired the fresh coat of polish. "Looks good. Can we go, now? I'm afraid of what else you have for me to do." His grin reflected how much he enjoyed teasing her.
"My shoulders are broad and strong." He put his arm around her waist and drew her close. "Anytime you need to lean on them, I'm here for you."
"See those men sitting over there?" She patted his hand and glanced toward the classmates. After he nodded, she said, "Not one of them holds a candle to you." With her head tilted, she smiled. "Not only are you the most handsome man here, but you're always a perfect gentleman."
"You should never admit that. Not all uniformed men are gentlemen." He stood, walked toward her, and held his hand for her to take. "Care to dance?" He led her to a small open area between the tables. As he put his arms around her, he kissed her.
Ginger appeared beside them. "Excuse me. I don't mean to interrupt this little dance, but the ballroom is already set for dancing. Think you can wait an hour?"
Ginger is a kill joy. A marvelous chapter and a entertaining read. I tied to give you a six but I'm restricted from rendering you a six. I definitely look forward to your next chapter. . .Melissa!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. It's always a jy hearing from you. Joe does have some bad habits and we will soon discover one of them.
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Joe has a secret. Now, I'm intrigued. Is he investigating Sarah or the town?
Melissa!
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I will not reveal my plot. (LOL)
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I tried to get it out of you.
Melissa!
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Bribery won't work either, but I will tell you I have a feeling you will be extremely surprised.
Comment from dmjones
Excellent chapter. I'd really like to know what's going on inside the others' heads at the reunion. Men and women. I'm guessing Ginger might be a little jealous. Early on she seemed the type. I didn't spot any errors.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Excellent chapter. I'd really like to know what's going on inside the others' heads at the reunion. Men and women. I'm guessing Ginger might be a little jealous. Early on she seemed the type. I didn't spot any errors.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your review. We will see more of the reunion people coming soon.
Comment from lola29
Joe is such a gentleman, and seems to care deeply about Sara. I'm so glad he's making it a magical night for her because it's long overdue.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Joe is such a gentleman, and seems to care deeply about Sara. I'm so glad he's making it a magical night for her because it's long overdue.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I often wonder, if there are really men like Joe out there.
Comment from anabelle
Good chapter to this story, Barbara. Amazingly simple and effective. I loved it and never took my eyes off the screen until I was done.
Thanks for the good read.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Good chapter to this story, Barbara. Amazingly simple and effective. I loved it and never took my eyes off the screen until I was done.
Thanks for the good read.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from hyway94
Who wouldn't give you a wonderful review? I can't see you getting anything else. This story is just great and the charters are people who live in our own town. I fell as I was at the reunion with them. But that's what makes a good story. Keep it up.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Who wouldn't give you a wonderful review? I can't see you getting anything else. This story is just great and the charters are people who live in our own town. I fell as I was at the reunion with them. But that's what makes a good story. Keep it up.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from bookishfabler
I know people are a bit mushy when they first meet and are falling for on anouther, but, I'm finding the conversation a bit too mushy. Maybe that's just me.
Probably from the lifting(-,) she does at the hardware store.
your fourteen(-) year(-)old daughter."
hugs book
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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I know people are a bit mushy when they first meet and are falling for on anouther, but, I'm finding the conversation a bit too mushy. Maybe that's just me.
Probably from the lifting(-,) she does at the hardware store.
your fourteen(-) year(-)old daughter."
hugs book
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and I will look at the mush.
Comment from Jonez08
Sweet, romantic chapter Barbara. Any guy that'll paint your nails is a winner. I love how you set the perfect night for Sara or any girl. We all want to be her. I'm really enjoying these two.
She held out the sides of the (eggplant) colored, long flowing skirt.
(I like this color choice, rarely used)
She's about five feet six inches tall and weighs maybe one hundred twenty pounds. That strapless gown shows a slight muscle definition in her arms and upper back. Probably from the lifting, she does at the hardware store.
(I guess you could get away with this as his thoughts, but I think a more creative approach to writing would have been better giving the reader this info from the beginning of the story and sprinkled throughout)
Did you do a little dance?"
(lol)
We can stand here and admire it all night or get in and go to the reunion." He searched her eyes and grinned.
(he's so funny)
She readjusted the water glass and silverware.
(I recommmend starting this sentence out differently since the last one started with 'she')
should in front of your fourteen(-)year(-)old daughter."
Cassandra
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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Sweet, romantic chapter Barbara. Any guy that'll paint your nails is a winner. I love how you set the perfect night for Sara or any girl. We all want to be her. I'm really enjoying these two.
She held out the sides of the (eggplant) colored, long flowing skirt.
(I like this color choice, rarely used)
She's about five feet six inches tall and weighs maybe one hundred twenty pounds. That strapless gown shows a slight muscle definition in her arms and upper back. Probably from the lifting, she does at the hardware store.
(I guess you could get away with this as his thoughts, but I think a more creative approach to writing would have been better giving the reader this info from the beginning of the story and sprinkled throughout)
Did you do a little dance?"
(lol)
We can stand here and admire it all night or get in and go to the reunion." He searched her eyes and grinned.
(he's so funny)
She readjusted the water glass and silverware.
(I recommmend starting this sentence out differently since the last one started with 'she')
should in front of your fourteen(-)year(-)old daughter."
Cassandra
Comment Written 18-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2010
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I actually searched formal gown magazines and got the color and the style. I have a picture of it setting on my desk, so I got it right. I had orginally started that sentece Readjusting her glass...but I've been gigged for starting sentences with a gerund. I am not sure how to do it. Any ideas? Thank you for your kind review and support.