Chronicles of the Wandering Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Terra Sanctum, A Shadow on the Grey"An extended story in poem form
106 total reviews
Comment from anabellapongasi
This is an outstanding piece of work. Very well written, good rhyme and meter. Very imaginative writing, full of vivid imagery though its theme is dark and horrifying. Gave me the shivers!
Anabella
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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This is an outstanding piece of work. Very well written, good rhyme and meter. Very imaginative writing, full of vivid imagery though its theme is dark and horrifying. Gave me the shivers!
Anabella
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Anabella. I was certainly going for the darker side of expression :-)
Mike
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
I generally ignore the poetry because it looks like someone just slapped down any old thing. With no rhythm or rhyme, no verse length, how can one tell whether it took any skill to write it or now?
This, on the other hand, took some skill to write and time to make it come out right. Good job.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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I generally ignore the poetry because it looks like someone just slapped down any old thing. With no rhythm or rhyme, no verse length, how can one tell whether it took any skill to write it or now?
This, on the other hand, took some skill to write and time to make it come out right. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Roberta. You're right - there is a lot of toss written in poetry (pardon my language!). I'm honoured that you see my piece as skillful. Thank you for the grand review :-)
Mike
Comment from Beans
This is one of the most powerful things I have read in a long time. I can't tell you how brilliant I think the idea to write a story in poetry form is. I will definitely go back and read the rest of your tale, I just wanted to say that this is pure genius, and it was amazing.
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This is one of the most powerful things I have read in a long time. I can't tell you how brilliant I think the idea to write a story in poetry form is. I will definitely go back and read the rest of your tale, I just wanted to say that this is pure genius, and it was amazing.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Elphaba :-). It's been a real tough journey, writing these ten chapters, but hugely reqarding. I'm so glad you enjoyed this closing chapter so much; I was determined to make it a worthwhile conclusion. Your review has given me a huge smile, this hot and muggy night in London :-)
Mike
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Pen pals! I love London, England is my favorite place on earth. I hope your enjoying your hot and muggy summer. Have a great week. Elph
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a emotional and appropriate ending. Nice moral. If we leave things alone, we might see the world grow again. Decay will stop and new things will grow.
It is sad what we have done to the ground and air. This story can become all too true.
The rhyme and rhythm are great.
I see no errors.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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This is a emotional and appropriate ending. Nice moral. If we leave things alone, we might see the world grow again. Decay will stop and new things will grow.
It is sad what we have done to the ground and air. This story can become all too true.
The rhyme and rhythm are great.
I see no errors.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Joan :-). I'm both relieved and sad to have finished this tale. I was worried the ending might be a little too bleak, but it felt so right for the preceeding story!
Mike
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You're welcome. It just says the world will truly be this bleak if some don't change their ways.
Joan
Comment from Cheryle Rene
Wow! This is a great piece of writing. It is my first look, and I have all intentions of going back to read more and follow the journey (with or without MD rewards as I'm sure from this piece the read will be reward enough). The rhyming and meter of this piece is very well done - - reads smooth and clear. Thanks so much for sharing and I'm glad I found this piece before it was too late.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Wow! This is a great piece of writing. It is my first look, and I have all intentions of going back to read more and follow the journey (with or without MD rewards as I'm sure from this piece the read will be reward enough). The rhyming and meter of this piece is very well done - - reads smooth and clear. Thanks so much for sharing and I'm glad I found this piece before it was too late.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Cheryle :-). I'm so glad that you enjoyed this piece as much as you did, and that you're driven to read the rest. It's the greatest compliment any poet can receive :-)
Mike
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
This poetic piece is such a horror, my friend. I do enjoy it, as I do all your works. The thirtieth stanza was my favorite--gruesome. Well versed presentation.
Isaiah Ramesses
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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This poetic piece is such a horror, my friend. I do enjoy it, as I do all your works. The thirtieth stanza was my favorite--gruesome. Well versed presentation.
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Isaiah. This has been a hell of an undertaking but I'm pleased with my dark, bleak conclusion to the saga. So glad you liked it!
Mike
Comment from Raul GF
While I'm not familiarized or used to idea to read this kind of long poems on a daily basis, it was a good surprise to follow this man in this strange and epic journey. Good Job.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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While I'm not familiarized or used to idea to read this kind of long poems on a daily basis, it was a good surprise to follow this man in this strange and epic journey. Good Job.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you Charlatan. I'm so glad my poem interested you enough to read through.
Mike
Comment from angelawhitelaw
You have such a vivid style. I could see the images in my mind, the ones I understood anyway. It was clear what was happening, even to someone who had not read the other chapters and I hope to get a chance to read more of it. Very nice.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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You have such a vivid style. I could see the images in my mind, the ones I understood anyway. It was clear what was happening, even to someone who had not read the other chapters and I hope to get a chance to read more of it. Very nice.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you :-). I'm always trying to walk that tightrope between artistic exposition and sense, so it's always good to hear I haven't gone too far.
Mike
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written and a great end to your journey. i enjoyed reading these parts. i have read some of the other parts you've written. good form, good flow, great job--reminded me of something orson welles would read,
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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this is very well written and a great end to your journey. i enjoyed reading these parts. i have read some of the other parts you've written. good form, good flow, great job--reminded me of something orson welles would read,
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, SWJ :-). It's been a long but rewarding journey, and I'm very happy with the result. Thanks for the great comments!
Mike
Comment from marcellawachtel
This is a most astonishing piece of work; I have not read any of the previous chapters but will do so. Reading this conclusion is chilling; I repeated stanza after stanza in wonder at how this is written.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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This is a most astonishing piece of work; I have not read any of the previous chapters but will do so. Reading this conclusion is chilling; I repeated stanza after stanza in wonder at how this is written.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Marcella! What a fantastic review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it :-)
Mike