Pumpkin Fate
Bad things happen to bad people.67 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
Wow!
I'm proud of myself I read the complete story with out having a cookie moments
As always I think your writing is the best, and yes you captured my attention fro the first line to the last
Thank you for sharing this very interesting write.
My Kind Sir.
Cookie
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Wow!
I'm proud of myself I read the complete story with out having a cookie moments
As always I think your writing is the best, and yes you captured my attention fro the first line to the last
Thank you for sharing this very interesting write.
My Kind Sir.
Cookie
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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And thank you so much, M'lady. I am honored that you took the time to read my story. Bless you dear lady. : ) Bob
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i THANK YOU FOR THOSE KIND WORDS AND PRAY i WILL BE ABLE TO READ MORE NEXT TIME.
this COMPUTER IS JUMPING WHICH CAUSING DIFFERENT SIZE WORDS
cookie.
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Take caps off. (suggestion)
Your very welcome and for those comments , Believe it was off and it stills jumps any way and times it wants too. ( this things is almost confuse as me when I have those Cookie moments (smile) have a nice day my Kind Sir.
Cookie
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X smile..: ) Bob
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X smile..: ) Bob
Comment from Cindy Warren
Coley was a drunken jerk the world is better off without. It's a good thing Laureen's mother has that apartment. Her daughter and grandson will be much safer there. I wanted to strangle the guy from the beginning. What a loser. Congratulations on your win.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Coley was a drunken jerk the world is better off without. It's a good thing Laureen's mother has that apartment. Her daughter and grandson will be much safer there. I wanted to strangle the guy from the beginning. What a loser. Congratulations on your win.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you, Cindy. LOL I am glad you were so touched by this story. : ) Bob
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Very good. It's shame that Halloween is no longer a children's holliday. Clown and Cinderella costumes have been replaced by sexy waitresses and scary presidents.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Very good. It's shame that Halloween is no longer a children's holliday. Clown and Cinderella costumes have been replaced by sexy waitresses and scary presidents.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you, Thomas. Bob
Comment from Patty Palmer
This was a great story from beginning to end! Extremely well written! This story kept my interest and with each page I was looking forward to next one. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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This was a great story from beginning to end! Extremely well written! This story kept my interest and with each page I was looking forward to next one. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you, Patty. I am glad you liked this one. I sincerely appreciate the sixth bright star. Bless you. Bob
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is better than a project, research and study work, expressively and coherently explored and worded masterly, produced a gem stone work; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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This is better than a project, research and study work, expressively and coherently explored and worded masterly, produced a gem stone work; well said, well done. Liked and enjoyed the read. Write to Inspire, Change.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much, Dear. : ) Bob
Comment from RodG
I can easily see why this story won the contest. Coley Drummond is one of the most despicable characters I have read about in sometime. An excellent job of characterizing him through description, dialog, and actions. We are not sorry to see him incinerate. Rod
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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I can easily see why this story won the contest. Coley Drummond is one of the most despicable characters I have read about in sometime. An excellent job of characterizing him through description, dialog, and actions. We are not sorry to see him incinerate. Rod
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thanks so much, Rod. I am glad you liked it.
: ) Bob
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You are very welcome.
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: ) Bob
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This story was incredible. Very sad to think that alcohol does create several problems like your story recognizes. The woman (wife) and the child (step child) are so abused by their own father that you wondered if anyone cared....very well written.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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This story was incredible. Very sad to think that alcohol does create several problems like your story recognizes. The woman (wife) and the child (step child) are so abused by their own father that you wondered if anyone cared....very well written.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2019
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Thanks so much for your time, Rosemary. : ) Bob
Comment from Jennpenn
I know I'm reading this way after the fact, but I'm new to this site. Great job incorporating the required items into this realistic tale of karmic debt. I like those little, telling lines, like the description of the bar:
where the locals blew their paychecks and tempers every Friday night.
And Coley, who...
constantly sought that winning lottery ticket in life that would somehow alter his dull existence.
You understand it only takes a few words, placed correctly, to set a scene and drop readers into the middle of the action. Great job.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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I know I'm reading this way after the fact, but I'm new to this site. Great job incorporating the required items into this realistic tale of karmic debt. I like those little, telling lines, like the description of the bar:
where the locals blew their paychecks and tempers every Friday night.
And Coley, who...
constantly sought that winning lottery ticket in life that would somehow alter his dull existence.
You understand it only takes a few words, placed correctly, to set a scene and drop readers into the middle of the action. Great job.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2015
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Welcome aboard, Jenn! Thanks so much for the review. This is an old one. LOL..You must have browsed my folio for it eh? I am originally from New York, myself..(most of my life) I was born in upstate...Watertown area, then lived on Long Island for the remainder until I joined the Marines. Yes, I'm a talker too..LOL) I will become a fan of yours so that I won't miss any of your posts. I think you are going to like it here. I have been here ten years and just got a novel published. It's on amazon and will be on Barnes and Noble...called "Fatal Beauty" ad is at the bottom of most pages here with the link. blessings and good luck. Bob (Mastery)
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Congratulations to you! A win for you is a win for all of us striving to have our words read, and enjoyed! So glad that your writing dreams are coming true. Thanks for becoming my fan. I'm honored. I will certainly return the favor!
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Great! And thanks so much...:) Bob
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Congratulations to you! A win for you is a win for all of us striving to have our words read, and enjoyed! So glad that your writing dreams are coming true. Thanks for becoming my fan. I'm honored. I will certainly return the favor!
Comment from Jean Lutz
Surely a winner. From Halloween flames to eternal flames in the blink of an eye. You certainly made use of the words to warn. This scene is not limited to trailer trash -- some pay steeply to celebrate darkness.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Surely a winner. From Halloween flames to eternal flames in the blink of an eye. You certainly made use of the words to warn. This scene is not limited to trailer trash -- some pay steeply to celebrate darkness.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2010
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Hi, M L. Welcome aboard Fanstory! I am so pleased that you have discovered my book. I would be so honored if you tried to catch up. I only post about once every two weeks, so hopefully you may find some time. Meanwhile I will watch for your work as well. Bless you! Bob
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Hey Bob, was this meant for me? My mind is so mixed up tonight it could be and I still didn't get it.
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LOL....I am not sure...Darn! Bob
Comment from Diny
I know this writing anywhere!- no name needed- again you spin a yarn with the best of them dude- and good luck in the contest is probably not even needed!- One queston was it too drunck to drive what you meant you said too drunk to drink which in his case was probably a fruedian slip! hugs- Diny
worthy of a six- but alas I'm out!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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I know this writing anywhere!- no name needed- again you spin a yarn with the best of them dude- and good luck in the contest is probably not even needed!- One queston was it too drunck to drive what you meant you said too drunk to drink which in his case was probably a fruedian slip! hugs- Diny
worthy of a six- but alas I'm out!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2010
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Hi, Diny. thanks so much...Nope....I meant it the way I wrote it....think about it.....it's a joke.....(sorta) LOL..You are pretty darn clever you. Did you excercise your right anyway, even if you do know who I am? LOL...Bye for now...
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you bet i did!
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:) What a gal. I only hope it's enough....(Yikes!)