Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Chapter 14; part three"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
Chicken livers? Well, they are medically necessary, and I'm glad you're showing a positive sign.
I enjoyed this read and couldn't find anything to criticize. It looks like things will work out. Sara should realize the huge gulf between a man's hitting a male jerk for good cause and hitting a woman.
Dave
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Barbara,
Chicken livers? Well, they are medically necessary, and I'm glad you're showing a positive sign.
I enjoyed this read and couldn't find anything to criticize. It looks like things will work out. Sara should realize the huge gulf between a man's hitting a male jerk for good cause and hitting a woman.
Dave
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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True, but Sara doesn't have a lot of experience, so is niave in many ways. Thank you for your kind review. I happen to like chicken livers, but even when you like them, there's only so many you can eat.
Comment from R. K. Alan
So glad to see her starting to let her guard down a little. She needs to move on and start trusting a little. Glad you're feeling better. Ray aka Krylon
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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So glad to see her starting to let her guard down a little. She needs to move on and start trusting a little. Glad you're feeling better. Ray aka Krylon
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from carl8447
Good job with this chapter, keep plotting along, your chacters are strong, your story is tight, good work. great to hear you're feeling better.
Carl
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Good job with this chapter, keep plotting along, your chacters are strong, your story is tight, good work. great to hear you're feeling better.
Carl
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Didn't see a single error, Barbara. Your lovers seem to have gotten their act together. You're too close to the end for more to go wrong, so I look forward to a strong wrap-up. Glad you're making good progress. Hang in there. Hugs. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Didn't see a single error, Barbara. Your lovers seem to have gotten their act together. You're too close to the end for more to go wrong, so I look forward to a strong wrap-up. Glad you're making good progress. Hang in there. Hugs. Nancy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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I can tell you they do hit one more stumbling block, but it's soon taken care of.
Comment from marcii
I understand that when you see someone loose their temper you may wonder if they could loose their temper with you one day or with a child. However loosing it in certain situations although not good doesn't mean you would all the time.
Of course she would think of her child first, all parents should.
Marcii
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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I understand that when you see someone loose their temper you may wonder if they could loose their temper with you one day or with a child. However loosing it in certain situations although not good doesn't mean you would all the time.
Of course she would think of her child first, all parents should.
Marcii
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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I wish more women would think of their children before they get involved with a man. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Fireshadow
Barbara - great news that you paid mind to my suggestion to include chicken livers in your nutrition - and that your iron count is on the rise. Wonderful news ! Hope you enjoyed my recipe, my friend.
As far as this narrative - FINALLY ! Sara and Joe are on the same page as she has accepted as true Joe's statements. Very well penned - flows smoothly and didn't find any spag errors.
Ama
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Barbara - great news that you paid mind to my suggestion to include chicken livers in your nutrition - and that your iron count is on the rise. Wonderful news ! Hope you enjoyed my recipe, my friend.
As far as this narrative - FINALLY ! Sara and Joe are on the same page as she has accepted as true Joe's statements. Very well penned - flows smoothly and didn't find any spag errors.
Ama
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from fionageorge
And you couldn't have done better than a heart from Angelheart (I love her work). Another good chapter, where a lot of air is cleared, and love is now able to blossom. Sara's concerns have been well addressed, and the dialogue used was realistic.
He even allowed the townspeople and participated himself in chastising you for over fourteen years."
[Not too sure about the above sentence, it confused me. Perhaps:
'Not only did he allow the townspeople in chastising you for over fourteen years, he even participated himself.']
Apart from that one sentence, I found no flaws.
Thanks for sharing and warmest regards,
Marijke :o)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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And you couldn't have done better than a heart from Angelheart (I love her work). Another good chapter, where a lot of air is cleared, and love is now able to blossom. Sara's concerns have been well addressed, and the dialogue used was realistic.
He even allowed the townspeople and participated himself in chastising you for over fourteen years."
[Not too sure about the above sentence, it confused me. Perhaps:
'Not only did he allow the townspeople in chastising you for over fourteen years, he even participated himself.']
Apart from that one sentence, I found no flaws.
Thanks for sharing and warmest regards,
Marijke :o)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Thank your for your eagle eye. I will check out those areas.
Comment from KATYBUG:)
this is a wonderful chapter and you did a great job with it, you are a very talented author and i hope to be like you when i grow up! you did a wonderful job with the dialouge and the descriptions, there was a great plot.
love
katy
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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this is a wonderful chapter and you did a great job with it, you are a very talented author and i hope to be like you when i grow up! you did a wonderful job with the dialouge and the descriptions, there was a great plot.
love
katy
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I am always willing to help.
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your welcome:) and thanks
Comment from Rama Rao
Good to know you are making good progress in your health. The story is also moving forward.Since there are no more obstacles, the novel is almost finished. I wonder what is there to take 24 pages after this.
Since you asked for spags, kindly put two commas:
1. planted, and I admire
2. attacking Roy,
Wishing you good health and good luck.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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Good to know you are making good progress in your health. The story is also moving forward.Since there are no more obstacles, the novel is almost finished. I wonder what is there to take 24 pages after this.
Since you asked for spags, kindly put two commas:
1. planted, and I admire
2. attacking Roy,
Wishing you good health and good luck.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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I will check out those commas. I swear commas will be my downfall.
Comment from fictionwriter
A great little chapter. I'm glad that they seemed to have worked things out, although I don't think I'd take him beating some guy up protecting me as a bad thing. Great job.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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A great little chapter. I'm glad that they seemed to have worked things out, although I don't think I'd take him beating some guy up protecting me as a bad thing. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2011
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I think he should have beaten this guy worse. Thank you for your kind review.